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    Cry Little Sister

    Cry Little Sister

    Comfort in a realm when reminded its fault
    Fear when the speed of the clouds grind to a halt
    Trick of an eye like a still life picture
    A confusing blister
    Memories fade then the light will return
    Just a trick of the shade and then to fight we learn
    As I silently screamed the red door opened
    Sacred black peace falls cause war is what we put our hope in


    As my tears burn my flesh
    The sacred heart aches, 2 souls mesh
    Your worst nightmare stripped in all humility
    Until pain is all you can bare in all futility
    Alone stripped to one, one will catch the fall
    We own up and we face, we don’t run, we stand tall
    It’s not about love or a rite
    It’s a higher mission when we’re called to flight


    1000 lives we lived to stand at the gate
    All the lessons learned a first test of fate
    No compassion for the rabid or those who cycle short
    Who won’t stand eye to eye or be judged by any court
    Do you still expect your messiah to stand in place of you?
    Shaking off every sin w a weak prayer (and I’ll do it again) for forgiveness too?
    Lost is in the angels and trust as they do
    Listen to your heart and your own soul you always knew

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    Re: Cry Little Sister

    This wasn't bad, A.


    Nice little story with a good structure and subject matter. The theme wasn't all too clear to me, but it's satisfactory writing and execution. Also, some good concepts sprinkled in between. Overall, not too shabby of a verse. Keep it up!



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    Re: Cry Little Sister

    Thank you... @Celph _taut
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