I ain’t mad at you

[A Disciple]

“Cheryl I’m with you”

But I don’t know why
Pain was 5th grade and Danny was the boy that they tied
The first thing to stop my cry
It was devistation in all of humanity
It was registration in my own insanity
So cute how he told my story... NO PC!!!! LOL
And I was just stuck on stupid
All emotion froze and the sense that was now included
Red vs white, I go up as you go down
And then we switch and turn it around
Dead opposite but the same spiritual fight
But who you so loyal to I still I don’t have that right
Backwards bandana I had one too
I can’t remember why but I remember you
They all joke about my sister if that’s why my dad was flipping that morning
I’d say I doubt it too he was prolly just in mourning
Prolly a guilt and yeah I knew him best
But when emotion consume you better put on that vest
I wasn’t there to hurt him and I didn’t play games
But just the potential to had him asking for names... maybe
I know you a part of his life he never discuss
When they say it’s gay I crack up like maybe everyone else but not us
I had the naive heart they all love to shame
Laughing all in but never realized the game
And shit changed...
I went from ballerina to solder tagged at 13
He went from misdermeaner to soldier forgetting 2 to teen

C:

Thanks for the time you chased me out the room
Saved me 3 years but the guilt I still
Consume
Fake is a curse and you know I’d stay the same
I never knew the rules until my angel came
You’d watch me pray as I’d beg no nun
You’d watch me play and when I went too far you’d make sure I’d run
But you never told me I had a son and mookie was mine
To the jump and the smile to him paying my fines
I’m trying to get back up if it seems I don’t care
My saves on these streets and I’m always aware
My daughter more mature then me, don’t let them break her down for that like they did me
Everything we went thru from boxing shadows to changing faces
I’m not sure why or how we would even switch places
At the casino I would’ve told you not to trip
Even though you know I understand that flip

C:

And my shock when I realized what’s up with sharing skirts
And your pain when you realize how much it all still hurts
We all divided and I got most my feelings back too
Just reality vs their doubt and I already know how they do
Until the hands of time you were watching me then
And look how he did I thought he was my friend
I started to see them all as I fell
I wouldn’t stand for not one now as I tell


“So many changed on me........ all the way thru”

I moved back to the ghetto cause my real is my only way how
For my mama I did it all and again I’m protecting her now
So blessed to have an angel like you
And Don’t think I’m ungrateful I still see you too 2

[Messiah]

Dont know good for you nice writing best piece ive read from you yet i dont know how much further you could have pushed it.... but yeah great writing if theres a wsy to be a bit more revealing ya get me put your piece out there

[A Disciple]

Thank you @Messiah

[Cody Phoenix]

A simple flow of rhyme accompanied with some lyricism, you're getting better, Disciple. I like how consistent you are with your writing. Keep at it! A bit of advice is to focus more on your structure and leave more room in your mind to play with conceptualizing creative writing techniques and adhere to a scheme that emphasises your emotional undertones in your writing. Keep it up!