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    MB2010

    I’m the Man
    (Better off Alone - Tupac)

    I watched what was left of you die that day
    While I was screaming to you running away
    Not that way
    Don’t remember the memories of your born city for that
    As I watched your tears fall so slowly on the beach as we sat
    I screamed in your lap
    I couldn’t stand to watch your mind just snap
    It was too evil for your naive heart to comprehend
    And you were too pure to be calling them bitches your friends

    Hook “I’m the man”

    I explained to you what the black blood meant but you wasn’t trying to hear me
    I know it was easier to believe
    But the really real of it is what was harder to conceive
    Too pure to ever deceive
    And I had the fix to make sure if you ever lied youd be caught
    So Ill never forget how long I sat with you in court
    and I just prayed
    The before and after just withered away
    Now you was down to 147 id watch 3 more drop every day
    The weight loss...
    It’s started in criminal mental
    As you caught middle bunk syndrome
    I calmed your shake when you were processed to red pod
    As I contemplated for their payment bullets or chard
    When they dismissed your case I kissed you on the cheek
    And laughed how quick you learned when your name is called to when you get out makes 3 hrs feel like a week

    “Too much on my mind right now...”
    I’m the man hook

    But you were so hit and shattered
    And slowly again you conquered and decided to get better
    As I was STILL feeling like I let her
    I finally understood insanity and every out of place word that you’d say
    And wish all the time and wonder why it had to be that way
    And I was ok, even if you wasn’t strong enough to face it yet
    I’d sit and crack up at how you played them back w them not realizing you LET them
    You always did keep it real
    Your candid was always the emotion I’d feel
    The hardest part was to watch you be ashamed like it was your fault
    The echo of vanity to the knife that you fought
    Then you got rid of everything that glittered but didn’t realize why like default
    A 100 shadows down cause it was always the best lesson you taught

    “Too much on my mind right now... looking for the sucker that need to be found right now”
    I’m the man hook

    Then you finally remembered why youd never feel safe again
    Then came feeling so gross you couldn’t stand to be in your own skin
    While these bitches in the back ground tilting their glass to the toast
    I need you to remember you’re still stronger then most
    Then you’re relationships shattered as you finally grew the fuck up and pulled away
    Then came the flash backs, the nightmares, that haunted you at least every day
    And they still play?
    ——-

    Do you finally hear me? Do you hear me? Do you hear what I say?
    “I only bought it cause I wanted it” but it wasn’t that way

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    Am I the only one that knows it doesn’t work like that anyway - it was just hypothetical
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    Re: MB2010

    There is something about your writing I like. I think because it feels authentic.

    It was too evil for your naive heart to comprehend
    And you were too pure to be calling them bitches your friends


    Then you finally remembered why youd never feel safe again
    Then came feeling so gross you couldn’t stand to be in your own skin
    While these bitches in the back ground tilting their glass to the toast
    I need you to remember you’re still stronger then most

    Somewhat long but your writing kept me intrigued.

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    Re: MB2010

    Thank you and yeah I do tend to go too long, I hate that too @carvinous_ecoz
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    Re: MB2010

    You know, this was a lot less cryptic here, and I like that you kept some fresh thoughts playing in here, great forms of imagery that were pretty visual so kudos for taking a journey through the ups and downs of a fucked up pseudo relationship, kind of being the good friend to a player and not the smartest gangsta ( court) lol. This was a really good read compared to some of your past pieces which come off with a muddied imagery sometime, this felt a lot realer and much more linear. Keep at it
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    Re: MB2010

    Thanks @_Lyrics you right about my writing get back to focus too
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