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    bobericc _Lyrics's Avatar
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    A Walk in the dark



    If you saw this picture, I'm walking witcha
    On the Dimmest of roads where Friendships corrode like a copper fixture..
    A monsters mixture, fitting dreams within the eves
    That form unknowns the common folk should never see..
    Eventually we have to walk it, paths of darkness
    Labyrinths locking awful thoughts of Sabotaging..
    Timeless in essence, a Night that is endless
    Quick fast, Pitch Black, but my eyes are like riddicks..
    Blind to the Lessons above, that crept in the dusk,
    Decisions undone, respected ethics Set with the Sun.
    Hindrences hung on those that hid or they run
    Lost their way, Throwing shade whenever they come.
    negativities a sick simplicity, chilling mystery
    It Flickers in the distance like Embers in a chimney.
    Principals and our civility, Criminal Inabilities
    Nothings predictable with Minimal visibility..
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    Rumble In The Bumble.. B Bumble B's Avatar
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    Re: A Walk in the dark

    Labyrinths locking awful thoughts of Sabotaging..

    This line right here is a bit darker then Im use to.. but the multis and rhyme scheme scream talent. really well written bro!

    Decisions undone, respected ethics Set with the Sun.

    wow. this line is 6 feet deep.. imagery is intense.. very poetic..

    Overall this piece was well written.. it had its high points in the lines i quoted... flow was great.. lyrics were on point for a darker ish piece.. keep writing man ill keep an eye out for ya.. would love to see something a bit more positive next thanks for the feed on my piece my friend..

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    Re: A Walk in the dark

    Wow... an amazing piece... probably one of the best ones I ever seen on here in my opinion and I relate - especially to the criminal inability.
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