Originally Posted by
Cheesecake Assassin
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You can hate all you want, but all your shit ever amounts to, is light reaches.
I feel like calling checkmate right now, cuz how you be using knight pieces.
1: Scheme - Good end rhyme and a decent inner. Not that forced.
1: Concept - So the concept is that he will be using / taking L's. But you're gonna have to spell it out for other voters.
0: Wordplay - Don't see any here
1: Execution - Strong one. Set up the "L" in the first bar and it's a 2.
3: Total bar score
There must be a gap, in your abilities, because against me you can’t see well.
If you asked him politely, allen woulda ghost wrote for your whack ass on the D.L.
1: Scheme - You carry one of the inners through two bars. That's enough for me.
1: Concept - The thing about battle rap is the clickpoint is supposed to be low, IMO. You should "get it" right away. otherwise it isn't a punch, it's a crossword puzzle. But I spent like 3 minutes with this and all I got is that allen ghost writes him. I'll hedge you H&D is dumb points. But - again - the concept is weak even if it's strong, cuz people should just get that shit.
0: Wordplay - None
1: Execution - I can't really give you two because whack ass on the DL can't be the punchiest way of wording this, right? Cmon.
3: Total bar score
If I’m throwing bash, it’s off the balcony then yall can celebrate with cake.
You said I’m bugging, we’re different species then, cuz you won't hesitate to snake.
1: Scheme - I never really realized how clean your end rhymes were. Mostly because you got such a hate boner for me.
2: Concept - Dope. I read this and my reaction was dope. So it's a 2.
1: Wordplay - There is some. Buggin' is used two ways.
2: Execution - It's a really weak two cuz the setup wasn't tied into the punch IMO. But I liked how each bar was done individually.
6: Total bar score
Kick my ass? You should kick your own, for attempting to take a title from me.
Because if you used your own verses, you prepared literature for the bible study.
1: Scheme - Again, the end rhymes are super clean. I think this is the last scheme point i can give you for end rhymes, though.
0: Concept - Clickpoint man. I don't want to have to Torah study your lines. I gotta zero you out.
0: Wordplay - If I missed it, I missed it. I've been generous for end rhyme points.
1: Execution - I know you're doing something. The wording itself was clean. I just don't feel the rest.
2: Total bar score
You already reached the biting point, without clutch control, what you hoping to gain?
You called meth for back up, because you’ll need that drug, to cope with the pain.
0: Scheme - Can't give you end rhyme points anymore.
1: Concept - I hate Meth and his stupid name.
1: Wordplay - There was Meth. It existed. Lowest possible 1 I can give.
1: Execution - The execution of the PUNCH itself was pretty lame. Copy with the pain, etc.
3: Total bar score
Since yo bitch like’s cheese fries, I’m going to white castles, she can be the passenger.
They call me diasick, cuz your bitch stays pierced to my dick like a fucking catheter.
1: Scheme - There was a scheme. Doesn't have to be complicated boys, try to rhyme your shit.
1: Concept - The cheesefries from sig is good. I like it. The rest kinda sucked tbh
0: Wordplay - None
1: Execution - Dude. This was a brag line. Are we in 8 mile? White castles had so much potential, so I'm gonna 1 point it/
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