Nature

[_Lyrics]

Yeah..
The way that it seems
Change is a leaf
That sways in the breeze
With sacred beliefs
Let me take you to peaks
raised from a dream
In space where we sleep-
Constellations achieved.
Maybe the reason
We aint what we need
Is something so outrageously
Complicated to see..
These gates that I keep
Get blazed in the heat
Of the moments I'm froze in
Glaciers will freeze
And brake from a sheet
To Float in the ocean
The lakes and the seas..
A blanket that breathes-
the waves on a Beach-
A span of sands-
Grains that are we.
As Tranquil as peace
This place meant to be
Gave what we need
But were making it weak
It Strengthens and sings
Braiding the trees
With whispering winds
That say whats unseen
A grace we can reach
What ancients could teach
Drawn On the walls
Of caves that get deep
Anger that seethes
Tangled and screened
A yang with its ying
An angel with wings..
Its the nature of things..

[Echelon]

This was pretty good, Lyrics. Examining your syntax and poetics; you aren't a formal poet; but a different kind. It was quite good, and unique to see you write this way about nature. Very good in it's contrast to other writing, with abiding by nature's drift with the wind. I don't really see anything wrong with this piece, it's quite good in it's way. I enjoyed the hell out of it myself. Good rhythmics, imagery, and poetic formula. Nice one, good work. Keep writing!

[A Disciple]

This was amazing because of the flow and the topic - lots a metaphors without going out too far - it was perfect.