LLL Week One: King vs Skurj - King Wins.

[Blue Bayou]

LLL RULES!

verses due: Thursday 11:59PST
Minimum Lines = 12 Lines
Maximum Lines = 20 Lines



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@King @Skurj.

[Skurj.]

Check g’luck
Going 12

[King]

Word

[Skurj.]

@King sent 12 to @Blue Bayou

[King]

I'm keying bull shit n still this'll be one that u regret
Bout to expose this actor, shit'll be more one sided than a movie set
U don't hustle or move weight. Fr this punks fuckin lame
Only time he takin pounds on the arm is playing the punch buggy game
Bitch I'll have u killed for bud, low price for ur useless life
I'll put a pack on ur head n we aint talkin black eyes when u get iced
n I stay in ur girls dm. Gettin pics, arranging some head
Son I seen that bitch inbox so many times i could mistake her for lez
I'm giving cats flashbacks to my champ runs, settin the steez
Ur giving cats flashbacks to when links were required to enter the league
And thats all i'm gonna bother with, just gonna make it rhyme
I came for competition, ur more of a pre warm up stretch u waste of time

[Blue Bayou]

Skurj's Verse



King aka lil dizbit ice
Real name Dave

Your last seasons Ace? funny, cos I'll knife your throat
S'like god dealt David Spades; Vs Skurj, this Kings lifes a joke
ya life in jeapordy, bullets rip your nerves 4 thrill
Hit your Pancreas wit cans sir till you lay wit Trebek if you question Skurj's skill
Blick loaded wit power bombs, no question they goin to puncture
My Heavy Machinery'll body slam you harder than those dudes Otis & Tucker
This wins a Brisk baby, this season I hope bro sinks
Bullets I put through Ice T'll have him more cooled Off than any Cold Drinks
Gut punch n we’ll sea boogers! Shoot this clam till boy is harmed
Each Shell Grants money! I’ll sink your body next to an Oyster Farm
Your wordplays all over the place! So I’m deadin this puke
If DIZ ass stir the pot? I’m punching his head into soup

[Clout]

I'm keying bull shit n still this'll be one that u regret
Bout to expose this actor, shit'll be more one sided than a movie set

UGH

U don't hustle or move weight. Fr this punks fuckin lame
Only time he takin pounds on the arm is playing the punch buggy game

Sort of UGH

Bitch I'll have u killed for bud, low price for ur useless life
I'll put a pack on ur head n we aint talkin black eyes when u get iced

Its more so the face/orbital region you doof,

n I stay in ur girls dm. Gettin pics, arranging some head
Son I seen that bitch inbox so many times i could mistake her for lez

Damn, well thats just disrespectful. im not voting for you now.

I'm giving cats flashbacks to my champ runs, settin the steez
Ur giving cats flashbacks to when links were required to enter the league

Ok, jab here

And thats all i'm gonna bother with, just gonna make it rhyme
I came for competition, ur more of a pre warm up stretch u waste of time

He said hold my purse fellow mods,

Skurj's Verse



King aka lil dizbit ice
Real name Dave

Your last seasons Ace? funny, cos I'll knife your throat
S'like god dealt David Spades; Vs Skurj, this Kings lifes a joke



ya life in jeapordy, bullets rip your nerves 4 thrill
Hit your Pancreas wit cans sir till you lay wit Trebek if you question Skurj's skill

Never end with a self brag, its more self hyping than a proverbial "suck my dick you piece of shit"

Blick loaded wit power bombs, no question they goin to puncture
My Heavy Machinery'll body slam you harder than those dudes Otis & Tucker

Ok, this is a cool idea. Now i see what people say about my stuff not being harsh enough. This is a case of good concept, decent wording and just not enough "fuck you assholes" concealed with in it.

This wins a Brisk baby, this season I hope bro sinks
Bullets I put through Ice T'll have him more cooled Off than any Cold Drinks

i liked this only for the ice tea bit. If you incorporated honey mustard pretzels within the line? i'd crown you champ, regardless of what blue bayous opinion! tbh.

Gut punch n we’ll sea boogers! Shoot this clam till boy is harmed
Each Shell Grants money! I’ll sink your body next to an Oyster Farm

my guy said boogers UGH. This was a fire idea, but u let me down with Sink your body tidbit. You should've made a humorous metaphor comparing him to an oyster in a slick way. Dominates verse really set the tone for nifty wordplays. Sorry your verse is read after his was.

Your wordplays all over the place! So I’m deadin this puke
If DIZ ass stir the pot? I’m punching his head into soup

No

So i personally think King had the crisper wording/harsher tone to his lines. They hit with more of a meaner intent. Skurj has a really good foundation. When reading your bars it just felt like you could've been alot meaner. I think you got the jab category where King had the Power shots landed. Plus you both had throw away closers but kings throw away was better of the two.

v/Princess david aka King

[Greedy]

King:
Pounds on the arm- yes indeed.
Pack- ok
Flash backs- decent
Closer- this was a lil statementish but i like this. More than most of ur other lines tho

Vs

Scurj:
Ice t/brisk- i liked this concept. But overall this bar was lackluster


Vote king
Better drop overall. Lbs on the arm, thats my kinda bar.
Skrj, u had a lot of played material that hurt you here. Like the cancer joint

[hello there]

I'm keying bull shit n still this'll be one that u regret
Bout to expose this actor, shit'll be more one sided than a movie set
Nope. Seen this like a dozen times and the set up aint shit
U don't hustle or move weight. Fr this punks fuckin lame
Only time he takin pounds on the arm is playing the punch buggy game
Don't really like this. The image sucks and the personal is stupid -- no one on this site deals drugs
Bitch I'll have u killed for bud, low price for ur useless life
I'll put a pack on ur head n we aint talkin black eyes when u get iced
Ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. This is pretty forced man
n I stay in ur girls dm. Gettin pics, arranging some head
Son I seen that bitch inbox so many times i could mistake her for lez
Man, can we please generate some new shit? Every verse is starting to sound literally the same at this pt
I'm giving cats flashbacks to my champ runs, settin the steez
Ur giving cats flashbacks to when links were required to enter the league
ugh
And thats all i'm gonna bother with, just gonna make it rhyme
I came for competition, ur more of a pre warm up stretch u waste of time
Nope

Yo I like King. But this shit was garbage.

Skurj's Verse



King aka lil dizbit ice
Real name Dave

Your last seasons Ace? funny, cos I'll knife your throat
S'like god dealt David Spades; Vs Skurj, this Kings lifes a joke
wut. oh. huh.
ya life in jeapordy, bullets rip your nerves 4 thrill
Hit your Pancreas wit cans sir till you lay wit Trebek if you question Skurj's skill
nope
Blick loaded wit power bombs, no question they goin to puncture
My Heavy Machinery'll body slam you harder than those dudes Otis & Tucker
nope
This wins a Brisk baby, this season I hope bro sinks
Bullets I put through Ice T'll have him more cooled Off than any Cold Drinks
forced but mehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Gut punch n we’ll sea boogers! Shoot this clam till boy is harmed
Each Shell Grants money! I’ll sink your body next to an Oyster Farm
nope
Your wordplays all over the place! So I’m deadin this puke
If DIZ ass stir the pot? I’m punching his head into soup
nah

I mean.

Both verses kinda sucked tbh. I thought David Spades had some potential. But the rest of his verse sucked more.

I guess I vote King. But I'm dodging both of your verses for a couple weeks.

- - - Updated - - -

King:
Better drop overall. Lbs on the arm, thats my kinda bar.

rusrs

[$pitacular]

King -

Wasn't feeling the opener. I get the concept I just don't feel like it really hit. Punch buggy game was a weird way to convey slug bug, not sure how I feel about it. Seems soft tbh which by your second couplet seems that's becoming the theme.. pack on your head was filler IMO, just seems even lazier than the first two.. inbox was nice I'm sure it's been done in some way just because it seems obvious (but what hasn't been done at this point) and the wording was the strongest in your verse so far. Flashbacks was cool, dig it. Closer was throwaway filler. A horrible lack of effort really bit you in the ass here. I was surprised but whatever maybe you had a busy week.

Skurj -

Opener tried to say something but it never really had a punchline. The was wordplay but nothing effective. Trebek was ok I get it but I've shot guns all my life never really heard anyone use the term cans and I'm from the streets in Cali but maybe it's an East Coast thing? So it was a little of a reach IMO. Otis & Tucker was filler to me.. Ice Tea was way too old school pre-2005 LLL Jr. for me.. did you say boogers..? Closer was lazy garbage. You pretty much did it to yourself here King dropped really bad this week.. you could have won this. But you didn't

v/ King

[Blue Bayou]

I'm keying bull shit n still this'll be one that u regret
Bout to expose this actor, shit'll be more one sided than a movie set
ehh, played basic idea w/ not too enjoyable a flip
U don't hustle or move weight. Fr this punks fuckin lame
Only time he takin pounds on the arm is playing the punch buggy game
pretty cool, like this
Bitch I'll have u killed for bud, low price for ur useless life
I'll put a pack on ur head n we aint talkin black eyes when u get iced
seen similar , havent heard "packs" much tbh, this was dece
n I stay in ur girls dm. Gettin pics, arranging some head
Son I seen that bitch inbox so many times i could mistake her for lez
lol funny, well delivered
I'm giving cats flashbacks to my champ runs, settin the steez
Ur giving cats flashbacks to when links were required to enter the league
good swag , very old school approach
And thats all i'm gonna bother with, just gonna make it rhyme
I came for competition, ur more of a pre warm up stretch u waste of time
nah, bad

vs.

Your last seasons Ace? funny, cos I'll knife your throat
S'like god dealt David Spades; Vs Skurj, this Kings lifes a joke
concept okay but the punch is weak
ya life in jeapordy, bullets rip your nerves 4 thrill
Hit your Pancreas wit cans sir till you lay wit Trebek if you question Skurj's skill
seen cans sir w/p done before, the fllip was dece & relevent here tho.. dece attack line
Blick loaded wit power bombs, no question they goin to puncture
My Heavy Machinery'll body slam you harder than those dudes Otis & Tucker
i find body slam as a term for getting shot a bit of a reacg, but this was cool for a wrestling punch
This wins a Brisk baby, this season I hope bro sinks
Bullets I put through Ice T'll have him more cooled Off than any Cold Drinks
straightforward np, not bad but this has been done before on ice names
Gut punch n we’ll sea boogers! Shoot this clam till boy is harmed
Each Shell Grants money! I’ll sink your body next to an Oyster Farm
mehh not crazy about it for a shell concept, these really need a lot this day in age
Your wordplays all over the place! So I’m deadin this puke
If DIZ ass stir the pot? I’m punching his head into soup
nah meh wp that couldve been more developed..


Overall Skurj had a coupe decent lines but a couple played and basic ideas... king was up and down as well but his highs were more enjoyable & his concepts hit harder... King took this one, props to both

Vote - King

[Blue Bayou]

King wins.