LLL Week Two: Plot (0-0) vs. Barcotic (0-0) - BARC WINS

[Blue Bayou]

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[Barcotic]

sup,12?

[Plot]

Sure man

[Blue Bayou]

@Plot I have Barc's 12.

[Barcotic]

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plots
set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics
ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker
break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black
i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year
ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in
im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up

[Plot]

A Medium told me: in beast-Mode your savage with text,
Think she meant your pen-games Mean…coz your just average at best.
Few bong rips then pitchin trash concepts with drunk slurs?
Next time save us the grief, and pitch'em straight in the dumpster.
Barcotic, names synonymous with swaying and being a twat,
We’ve never seen a moanier faggot, and wish he’d chug a litre of that.
Shots marked with infa-reds, like Indy when these glocks spark,
The beam'll light-up ya temple like searching for the lost ark.
Now your bout to die man, dreaming of sunsets in Siam?
You'll hear Bang-kok, Bang-kok, but wont be landing in Thailand.
Fukn High-school drop-out! mowing lawns with a mad face?
Report from the cannon serves as sad reminder for bad grades.
Should have found god! now its too late for foolish games,
Coz when Bar meets the maker, betcho wish yud joined the jewish faith!

[Clout]

A Medium told me: in beast-Mode your savage with text,
Think she meant your pen-games Mean…coz your just average at best.

Mean median mode, average i get the scheme. But this isn't really a diss to me. Average at best doesn't scream "your trash tier go die off in a corner buckle-sniffer." Even ur set up is more so a compliment.


Few bong rips then pitchin trash concepts with drunk slurs?
Next time save us the grief, and pitch'em straight in the dumpster.

Light.

Barcotic, names synonymous with swaying and being a twat,
We’ve never seen a moanier faggot, and wish he’d chug a litre of that.

a Little jab here, waiting for you took kick him in his gums man.

Shots marked with infa-reds, like Indy when these glocks spark,
The beam'll light-up ya temple like searching for the lost ark.

ok, this is your best one so far.

Now your bout to die man, dreaming of sunsets in Siam?
You'll hear Bang-kok, Bang-kok, but wont be landing in Thailand.

Seems lazy on the punch. You need more wit/layers to make this crush his hopes and dreams.

Fukn High-school drop-out! mowing lawns with a mad face?
Report from the cannon serves as sad reminder for bad grades.

He's the Premier Lawn Don i'd be careful bro. You could end up in his wood-chipper. This one just feels underwhelming. You should've kept this about Horticulture. There's plenty of ways you can flip Lawn care concepts. Barc seen one i did for him in MAG chat.

Should have found god! now its too late for foolish games,
Coz when Bar meets the maker, betcho wish yud joined the jewish faith!

A Bar Mitzvah? eh

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plots

Ok, nothing heavy but worded well enough to be a jab.

set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics

LOL you canadians and your dick jokes. This is Ok i can tell you didnt put much effort.

ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker

Meh dont like it.

break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black

i thought this one was tough.

i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year

dope, liked this play on words here.

ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in

My guy said Poo with writtens. Punch is light

im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up

Light



Well Plot you seem to have the basics down. But the way you word your concepts makes them so soft or not hit at all for me. Your set up's were better than some of your punches to me. You have good set ups but your punches either don't mesh with your set up or just have no layered wit or harsh tone to them. You got to word your bars alot better than that to beat even a playful barcotic.

Barcotic you didn't really try to over do it. So not much i can say but the obvious, you half-assed this.

v/ Barc more lands for me.

[Blas]

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plots
lolz ok
set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics
a THICK WHIP? bar is lolz but very light
ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker
lmfao
break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black
meh
i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year
cool wp
ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in
ehhh
im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up
aight

..

A Medium told me: in beast-Mode your savage with text,
Think she meant your pen-games Mean…coz your just average at best.
very simple unless im missing something
Few bong rips then pitchin trash concepts with drunk slurs?
Next time save us the grief, and pitch'em straight in the dumpster.
again very straight forward, ok
Barcotic, names synonymous with swaying and being a twat,
We’ve never seen a moanier faggot, and wish he’d chug a litre of that.
chug what?
Shots marked with infa-reds, like Indy when these glocks spark,
The beam'll light-up ya temple like searching for the lost ark.
aight, finally getting a bit creative here
Now your bout to die man, dreaming of sunsets in Siam?
You'll hear Bang-kok, Bang-kok, but wont be landing in Thailand.
no sir but valid attempt
Fukn High-school drop-out! mowing lawns with a mad face?
Report from the cannon serves as sad reminder for bad grades.
alright very simple but i see the personal
Should have found god! now its too late for foolish games,
Coz when Bar meets the maker, betcho wish yud joined the jewish faith!
did not enjoy

well this battle was barc having some witty bars while going for some very simple/clean wording & a lil bit of wordplay mixed in while plot was just kind of saying things directly with not much wordplay or creativity. would suggest working in some double meanings/wp & making the punches slightly less obvious. even with seemingly no effort barc had enough for me to win this IMO.

v/ barc

[Greedy]

Bar Comic:
Opener-ok
Harley Quinn- i like it
Semi annual- i like it

Vs
Plot:
Pitch/pitch- i liked this one. Not crazy about how u executed it tho
Lost ark- ok
Bangkok- hmmmm i kinda liked it.


Light battle. Bar Comic, i hated alot of verse this week. No hate. Not feeling ur movie references. Harley quinn was nice tho. I fk w that one.
Plot- a few good concepts. That medium/mean/mode been done before. Ive seen light up ya temple too.

Vote bar comic

[Sting3r]

Good battle both, I'll edit this with a vote later.

[JEM.]

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plots
This was alright.

set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics
Eh, not feeling.

ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker
Dope.

break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black
Eh, okay.

i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year
Haha, dope.

ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in
Okay.

im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up
lol… I fuck with bars like this.. it’s an acquired taste, but I thought this was a dope
Middle finger to your opponent.


A Medium told me: in beast-Mode your savage with text,
Think she meant your pen-games Mean…coz your just average at best.
Na… medium/mean/average bars - personally just over them.

Few bong rips then pitchin trash concepts with drunk slurs?
Next time save us the grief, and pitch'em straight in the dumpster.
Very good, well done… smooth.

Barcotic, names synonymous with swaying and being a twat,
We’ve never seen a moanier faggot, and wish he’d chug a litre of that.
lmao… funny, jab. BTW: I’m giving it a good here THINKING you
Gotta be British… because that’s the ONLY way this rhymes. lol.

Shots marked with infa-reds, like Indy when these glocks spark,
The beam'll light-up ya temple like searching for the lost ark.
Nice.

Now your bout to die man, dreaming of sunsets in Siam?
You'll hear Bang-kok, Bang-kok, but wont be landing in Thailand.
Good, just awkward a bit… like the question mark set up, or
Something ?

Fukn High-school drop-out! mowing lawns with a mad face?
Report from the cannon serves as sad reminder for bad grades.
Eh, na

Should have found god! now its too late for foolish games,
Coz when Bar meets the maker, betcho wish yud joined the jewish faith!
Not really feeling.


All in all, good battle - short read, well executed, and entertaining. Barcotic just
Was a bit sharper, and I felt the concepts a bit more…

v/Bar.

[SoIceyRichG]

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plot
Nice jab here

set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics
Na this is weak

ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker
Ok jab I guess. It was feeling like it was going to be harder

break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black
Ya kind of just said a line that sounds like this as far as the set up so it kind of takes away from it. It’s like repetitive ya know? And then tbh, I kind of don’t get it. Now I do. You’re saying the K enters the plot of the movie. IMO, this is wack. But what do I know really

i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year
Semi-annual it’s a term that I personally have never seen before. I’ve heard of bi annual but never semiannual.

ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in
What the fuck is a batt career. Always poo with writtens? Why would you write like that for a hip hop, battle verse?
If anything stuck out it. Eh. Ok jab I guess I wouldn’t call it wack but the one line before this one is wack. I got a question, why are we voting by going bar for bar like this why not vote in a manner where you look more so at the verse as a whole?


im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up

This was actually like your best bar lol. Nice jab here but you didn’t seem to have any hard punches that made me excited or interested in any way as I read

Now I’m going to read the next verse all the way through and then give my opinion of the verse without copying and pasting and putting something stupid and/or irrelevant behind each and every couplet. The way you vote kind of makes shit less impactful from the get go. It’s pretty weird, battle rap, nor rap in general, needs to be written in couplets

Ok as I’m reading. I must be honest. What you are saying so far is getting consenstantly harder, and I’m at the ammonia bar, and that shot is bananas def got a reaction from me. See this how you supposed to write a battle verse you are hard with it dog.
Ok after the bang cock punch I didn’t like the last two

However, you shit sounds like something I could actually hear someone spitting in a battle rap. Violence and hard shit and you are actually writing it in a way that it comes across effective because you can actually say this shit out loud and it doesn’t sound goofy like the first verse. I think you know what I mean. Like who the fuck says that your crew is in a thick whip lol. Corny

Vote plot

[$pitacular]

Barcotic -

I liked the Tre's into Plots.. it didn't read well initially (impact wasn't there for me off the first glance), but as with many of your punches I find I have to overlook that and dig into the concept itself before passing judgement.. and I dig it. heads from Ram was good but I feel like it could have been tied in better, the setup didn't really sell the truck factor (I feel like "dodge" could have been cleverly placed somewhere in that punch), but you did say whip so cool.. didn't like Harley Quinn, too much like that young money/wayne style.. doesn't imply wit really more of a "relational" punch which I am not fond of.. personal preference but nonetheless.. I feel like Men in Black was repetitive cuz you sold it the same way as Boyz in the Hood.. both movie refs both imply entering plots.. (move into, enters) which is honestly lazy for you, you don't typically do that.. Semi-Annual was nice (you're killing me Larry..) cock you blew was stupid lol.. creating traffic was just OK. Not your best obv but I'm grateful you're here and active (FTC!)

Plot -

The opener was almost a compliment on his letter-writing game to chicks...? Am I reading that right? Eh. pitch'em straight to the dumpster was a good idea from a personal angle because of the drunk slurs set up, but execution was off a little. Still, I liked it and laughed. I don't get the moanier punch.. sorry just don't know what drink you're referring to.. Googled it and all (yes @Blue Bayou , I actually tried to gain an understanding before voting on it lol) so that one gets a no from me.. light-up ya temple/lost ark was dope.. creative and hard hitting, never seen it.. bang-kok was a weird one for me.. at first I'm like this mufucka did NOT just use a confucious jok.. oh wait no he didn't and that's actually funny and hard too.. cool.. report from cannon slipped by me.. don't get it, sorry.. Jewish faith seemed like filler trash tbh


Overall not a bad read.. expecting more from Bar and hopefully he will get motivated to truly shine.. but he took this one

v/ Barcotic

[Ryno]

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plots
set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics
ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker
---Opener was a clever np, dick pic was lol,Harley quin was ok
break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black
i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year
ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in
---2 movies refs? this ight at best, didnt care for semi annual, blew to fit in was eh
im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up
---Felt lazy

vs

A Medium told me: in beast-Mode your savage with text,
Think she meant your pen-games Mean…coz your just average at best.
Few bong rips then pitchin trash concepts with drunk slurs?
Next time save us the grief, and pitch'em straight in the dumpster.
Barcotic, names synonymous with swaying and being a twat,
We’ve never seen a moanier faggot, and wish he’d chug a litre of that.
---not feeling the opener, nothin really special w/ the dumpster bar, 3rd bar dont rhyme but im gonna assume ur from somewhere else but light at best
Shots marked with infa-reds, like Indy when these glocks spark,
The beam'll light-up ya temple like searching for the lost ark.
Now your bout to die man, dreaming of sunsets in Siam?
You'll hear Bang-kok, Bang-kok, but wont be landing in Thailand.
Fukn High-school drop-out! mowing lawns with a mad face?
Report from the cannon serves as sad reminder for bad grades.
---lost ark was ok, bang kok was a nice spin, execution was light on bad grades
Should have found god! now its too late for foolish games,
Coz when Bar meets the maker, betcho wish yud joined the jewish faith!
---nah brah

v/Barc...less/not as bad misses

[Blue Bayou]

imna slay u fake kids n spray with the shots
me n my Boyz 'n the Hood...we movin Tre's into Plots
cool movie punch.. solid open
set goin HAM while usin heat in a thick whip
removing heads from the Ram like u deleted ya dick pics
i do agree the setup is a bit lazy/corny, like the punch tho.. its a solid concept
ill put eighty in ur mug, aiming from the bunkers
AR w army clips. Harley Quinn; goin crazy w the sucker
cool meta..
break inside homes to leave mfs dead, in fact..
when a 'K enters Plots, its not another Men in Black
dece again.. hits
i tuck a desert mac, finna let it blast in here
1 hit from the semi-annual be in a bed for half the year
dope, this was a cool wp
ur batt career? AWFUL! always poo w. writtens
if anything stuck out, it was the cock u blew to fit in
fuck no
im creating traffic bc im hella great n stuff
now ur creating traffic bc the yellow tape is up
okay, some swag to it.. dece

vs

A Medium told me: in beast-Mode your savage with text,
Think she meant your pen-games Mean…coz your just average at best.
nah
Few bong rips then pitchin trash concepts with drunk slurs?
Next time save us the grief, and pitch'em straight in the dumpster.
nah not really
Barcotic, names synonymous with swaying and being a twat,
We’ve never seen a moanier faggot, and wish he’d chug a litre of that.
looked up and nada... Grand Marnier? is it a posion?
Shots marked with infa-reds, like Indy when these glocks spark,
The beam'll light-up ya temple like searching for the lost ark.
seen IJ/temple lines but this was worded cool
Now your bout to die man, dreaming of sunsets in Siam?
You'll hear Bang-kok, Bang-kok, but wont be landing in Thailand.
fire
Fukn High-school drop-out! mowing lawns with a mad face?
Report from the cannon serves as sad reminder for bad grades.
ehh
Should have found god! now its too late for foolish games,
Coz when Bar meets the maker, betcho wish yud joined the jewish faith!
nah, seen way better bar mitzva lines



Overall barc had a coolverse with consecutive solid jabs... Bang cock Bang cock was fire but the rest was pretty lack lustre.. keep at it, barc got the W

Vote - Barcotic