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Thread: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - JEM WINS

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    LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - JEM WINS

    LLL RULES!

    verses due: Thursday 11:59PST
    Minimum Lines = 12 Lines
    Maximum Lines = 20 Lines



    Extension: Up to opponent IF verse completed & posted/sent. Otherwise at the Moderators discretion.

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    Doce.

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    Man. This guy's record is almost as bad as mine.

    What a loser.

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    ... I think he said 12.

    I just want to confirm @JEM

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    @hello there I have 12 from JEM.
    "Sound stuff out guys" - Barcotic

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    .. It's fucking due on Thursdays now isn't it.

    Fuck you guys.

    I have meetings all day and happy hour cuz one of the employees is leaving.

    @hello there if they're leaving the company anyways then fuck em... BARS OVER BANTER
    Last edited by Blue Bayou; March 14th, 2019 at 01:25 PM

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    What trendy city you live in? We lurk… catch him in the murk
    And keep kicking till he stand down like the LIME don’t work
    .

    .


    "He's whack." That's the voter feedback - but I don't think JEMs gettin' the clues..
    Your punches don't pack a Bash, and I'mma call you Steve cuz you're less clever than Blue..
    That's why you'll never reach the Crown Heights. One Red Hook and your bile is pouring..
    Jem is the ultimate hipster: I liked your LIME bar, but your style is boring..
    Your words will never hurt me. You're that nerdy kid, wishin' he was liked..
    Listen, on the mic? These voters cringing from JEM like unsollicited advice..
    Your flaws? Your punches are meek. If you show up to three straight battles, we call it a streak..
    So how you gonna rate JEM highly when he's got a new crack every couple of weeks?..
    They call me a blood seeker -- that's how I knew this JEM was cut funny..
    So I pick Axe and JEM gets cracked open. That's nerd speak for blood money..
    Son, you'se a casual player. I'm a natural slayer -- ain't no tellin' when I'm mad..
    This hit game available everywhere: I line up green and jem pops, from cellphone to ipad..

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    Last edited by hello there; March 14th, 2019 at 02:18 PM

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1)

    JEM's Verse


    In HS you were a bitch! Going to classrooms, getting hazed son
    Used to being the hallmark so much, you made your name one!
    Overtime.. we got sick of your antics so when my dudes swarm
    You&ya crew dead! You’ll see more boxes filled than a W2 Form!
    Spit killed this bitch… I’m just here to embarrass this fag sour
    Booyy you get’n aired out TODAY, career ended like Matt Lauer
    I’m leaving no evidence, everybody gone when the ringer sound
    His bitch beg for life, but needed her nailfile to grind the serial down
    Cuz off tech, I let off techs! I’m riding to your house with guns
    All ya’ hear is click, clack like I was describing a mouse to someone
    Real talk - fuck a bar… you a bitch! Proven by loads of content
    Cuz real Gs don’t snap over a band, let alone forum comments!
    "Sound stuff out guys" - Barcotic

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Hello there. I liked the first part of your verse it’s good. I don’t get the unsolicited advice punch. Second half of verse wasn’t as good as first half imo,

    I actually like Jen’s verse. There wasn’t really a bar that I thought was bad. I liked the today show punch His verse appears to be shorter, I haven’t counted the lines, but I think JEM wins.

    not gonna lie I’ve never read anything from you before I thought you were gonna suck but your verse was good. Vote JEM

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    "He's whack." That's the voter feedback - but I don't think JEMs gettin' the clues..
    Your punches don't pack a Bash, and I'mma call you Steve cuz you're less clever than Blue..
    i get what you were aiming for and it had potential but there was way too much happening, stick to like...1 concept per bar lol
    That's why you'll never reach the Crown Heights. One Red Hook and your bile is pouring..
    Jem is the ultimate hipster: I liked your LIME bar, but your style is boring..
    ....nah
    Your words will never hurt me. You're that nerdy kid, wishin' he was liked..
    Listen, on the mic? These voters cringing from JEM like unsollicited advice..
    this doesnt make any sense man
    Your flaws? Your punches are meek. If you show up to three straight battles, we call it a streak..
    So how you gonna rate JEM highly when he's got a new crack every couple of weeks?..
    ok, much better than everything prior
    They call me a blood seeker -- that's how I knew this JEM was cut funny..
    So I pick Axe and JEM gets cracked open. That's nerd speak for blood money..
    youre overdosing on JEM usage, and “that’s nerd speak”, you mean like lingo? Who says that lol
    Son, you'se a casual player. I'm a natural slayer -- ain't no tellin' when I'm mad..
    This hit game available everywhere: I line up green and jem pops, from cellphone to ipad..
    nah


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    In HS you were a bitch! Going to classrooms, getting hazed son
    Used to being the hallmark so much, you made your name one!
    lol ok this was actually pretty good
    Overtime.. we got sick of your antics so when my dudes swarm
    You&ya crew dead! You’ll see more boxes filled than a W2 Form!
    pretty fire tbh, good shit
    Spit killed this bitch… I’m just here to embarrass this fag sour
    Booyy you get’n aired out TODAY, career ended like Matt Lauer
    im not familiar, typically I’d look it up but man not tonight
    I’m leaving no evidence, everybody gone when the ringer sound
    His bitch beg for life, but needed her nailfile to grind the serial down
    mmm nah not feelin it
    Cuz off tech, I let off techs! I’m riding to your house with guns
    All ya’ hear is click, clack like I was describing a mouse to someone
    had potential but wasn’t done too good, decent
    Real talk - fuck a bar… you a bitch! Proven by loads of content
    Cuz real Gs don’t snap over a band, let alone forum comments!
    decent again


    Hello there, you’ve gotta work on forming your bars into disses and definitely work on execution. I don’t think I’ve ever read a JEM verse but the first two bars were fire, after that you kinda dwindled and fell off a bit. Good stuff though man, looking forward to reading more from you.


    Vote JEM

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Hello There: had a bunch of nameplays, couple good rhyme schemes in the sets up that i liked. i thought your set ups were okay and maybe could use some better follow up.

    JEM: Your opener was tight. over all solid verse that had good wording all around couple bars didnt hit hard. for example the mouse line just doesn't do much for visuals cause i would never describe a mouse like that. closer was cool.

    V/ Jem, he had the harder hitting punches. hello there had some wording issues but still delivered competitive verse. i think both lacked personals.
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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Ur getting better HT. It seems like ur trying to go a more humorous route
    maybe? that couple weeks bar was tight. I dug that one. Kind of Od's the nps though
    This was one of the better JEM drops i've seen. I liked the opener. W-2 bar was dope.
    Even the bars i thought were eh were still worded well. props.

    v/jem

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    They call me a blood seeker -- that's how I knew this JEM was cut funny..
    So I pick Axe and JEM gets cracked open. That's nerd speak for blood money..

    v

    In HS you were a bitch! Going to classrooms, getting hazed son
    Used to being the hallmark so much, you made your name one!
    Overtime.. we got sick of your antics so when my dudes swarm
    You&ya crew dead! You’ll see more boxes filled than a W2 Form!
    Spit killed this bitch… I’m just here to embarrass this fag sour
    Booyy you get’n aired out TODAY, career ended like Matt Lauer

    hello there try to start having your concepts be a bit more complex, i like what you tried with the axe/jem concept the connection could have just been a bit better to make it a harder punch. JEM i actually thought ur first 3 bars were pretty cool and w2 form was fucking dope.. good shit.

    v/ JEM

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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    "He's whack." That's the voter feedback - but I don't think JEMs gettin' the clues..
    Your punches don't pack a Bash, and I'mma call you Steve cuz you're less clever than Blue..
    [b]lol, creative enough for a blues clues bar.. solid/b]
    That's why you'll never reach the Crown Heights. One Red Hook and your bile is pouring..
    Jem is the ultimate hipster: I liked your LIME bar, but your style is boring..
    dece, coolish idea
    Your words will never hurt me. You're that nerdy kid, wishin' he was liked..
    Listen, on the mic? These voters cringing from JEM like unsollicited advice..
    dnt get this, wp? pm me
    Your flaws? Your punches are meek. If you show up to three straight battles, we call it a streak..
    So how you gonna rate JEM highly when he's got a new crack every couple of weeks?..
    nice, good spin on the np
    They call me a blood seeker -- that's how I knew this JEM was cut funny..
    So I pick Axe and JEM gets cracked open. That's nerd speak for blood money..
    too many consecutive np's for a short verse.. this was okay
    Son, you'se a casual player. I'm a natural slayer -- ain't no tellin' when I'm mad..
    This hit game available everywhere: I line up green and jem pops, from cellphone to ipad..
    fire idea, pretty creative tbh, again od'd on the np's tho, they get stale unless ur doing 30+


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    In HS you were a bitch! Going to classrooms, getting hazed son
    Used to being the hallmark so much, you made your name one!
    BOOM... i have a hallmark w/p lol, scrapped... i like this
    Overtime.. we got sick of your antics so when my dudes swarm
    You&ya crew dead! You’ll see more boxes filled than a W2 Form!
    solid, direct, straight forward... good punch
    Spit killed this bitch… I’m just here to embarrass this fag sour
    Booyy you get’n aired out TODAY, career ended like Matt Lauer
    lol, dece
    I’m leaving no evidence, everybody gone when the ringer sound
    His bitch beg for life, but needed her nailfile to grind the serial down
    ehhh
    Cuz off tech, I let off techs! I’m riding to your house with guns
    All ya’ hear is click, clack like I was describing a mouse to someone
    "quite as a mouse" .. cool for a click clack gun concept, havent seen.. light but enjoyable
    Real talk - fuck a bar… you a bitch! Proven by loads of content
    Cuz real Gs don’t snap over a band, let alone forum comments!
    pretty dece



    Cool battle... HT def had some good creativity to his verse.. some solid hits, np's got a bit redundant and some stuff couldve been worded harsher.. JEM opener was lotb to me, you were pretty consistent and i wouldnt say you had any hard "misses"

    Pretty close but i liked JEm's verse better overall... props to both

    Vote - JEM
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    Re: LLL Week Two: JEM (0-1) vs. Hello There (0-1) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Both verses were steaming garbage. U both a couple okay's.



    Go Away:
    "He's whack." That's the voter
    feedback - but I don't think JEMs gettin' the clues..
    Your punches don't pack a Bash, and I'mma call you Steve cuz you're less clever than Blue..
    ...too jumbled up and pack a bash sounds weird....
    That's why you'll never reach the Crown Heights. One Red Hook and your bile is pouring..
    Jem is the ultimate hipster: I liked your LIME bar, but your style is boring..
    .....tf......
    Your words will never hurt me. You're that nerdy kid, wishin' he was liked..
    Listen, on the mic? These voters cringing from JEM like unsollicited advice..
    ....decent....
    Your flaws? Your punches are meek. If you show up to three straight battles, we call it a streak..
    So how you gonna rate JEM highly when he's got a new crack every couple of weeks?..
    ...see what u did. Its ehh....
    They call me a blood seeker -- that's how I knew this JEM was cut funny..
    So I pick Axe and JEM gets cracked open. That's nerd speak for blood money..
    ...sawv what you tried, diff wording this woulda been dope.....
    Son, you'se a casual player. I'm a natural slayer -- ain't no tellin' when I'm mad..
    This hit game available everywhere: I line up green and jem pops, from cellphone to ipad..
    ....this makes NO sense n I'm pissed I wasted time reading that garbage.......stick to trolling chat.........

    Vs

    Jem
    In HS you were a bitch! Going to classrooms, getting hazed son
    Used to being the hallmark so much, you made your name one!
    ...decent...
    Overtime.. we got sick of your antics so when my dudes swarm
    You&ya crew dead! You’ll see more boxes filled than a W2 Form!
    ....took the easy route on executing
    Spit killed this bitch… I’m just here to embarrass this fag sour
    Booyy you get’n aired out TODAY, career ended like Matt Lauer
    ....they hired him back didnt they? Pretty good...
    I’m leaving no evidence, everybody gone when the ringer sound
    His bitch beg for life, but needed her nailfile to grind the serial down
    ...are u insinuating u took her nail file and killed her to get it, if so u shoulda said that but wasted wording. I think I see what u tried...
    Cuz off tech, I let off techs! I’m riding to your house with guns
    All ya’ hear is click, clack like I was describing a mouse to someone
    ...describing a mouse? Who in this fucking godforsaken shithole planet earth doesn't know what a mouse sound like??????? Seriously nigga. U getting a wtf moment in the mag lmao...
    Real talk - fuck a bar… you a bitch! Proven by loads of content
    Cuz real Gs don’t snap over a band, let alone forum comments!
    ...seen this done better...

    Fuck both yall elevate quick its bout to be murders row next week

    Overall Hello There uber wack, some of his baes made no sense. He had a couple subpar - decent punches but didn't fall off too hard.

    Jem: ur verse started strong then fizzled out
    Now I am become death; destroyer of worlds.

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