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    LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0)

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0)

    I may need a ext but not til tmm just for some extra hrs after work
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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0)

    U mean to read my verse & see what your up against. Don't matter.

    Coup de Grace


    I’m armed to the teeth so u can get ur mental severed,
    Until ur plaque is on the wall…& forensics can only identify u w/a dental record
    He’s close to the ledge...why should I throw the clips in?
    When all I gotta do is ‘push him over the edge’ for us to see the fall & wit's end
    U Watchmen so when I saw the door crack to ur shack,
    I crept in...machete in hand…& then I left w/ ur ‘head in a bag’ like Rorschach
    Should I spell it out? If u try to fuck w/ this animal mental,
    Or write off this lost...I’ma ‘fill ur insides w/ more lead’ than a mechanical pencil
    I saw u & ur bitch at dinner. U think she’s a fine model...
    But don't celebrate yet cuz u know these 'capsule pop' & I'm not uncorking a wine bottle
    I’ma lift ur soul & give u breathing space as u vomit clown,
    I’ve cosmo stars to fall w/o shootin so someone tell this nigga to comet down
    Last edited by RealBodySnatcher; March 22nd, 2019 at 12:12 AM

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - EXT

    No 9s... Sniper shots'll have u high to the sky,
    Scope Zoom in on this snowflake by Design;
    He'll be permanently blind to the eye!.
    Face smeared, Silencer on.. they hardly could hear it;
    He felt "distinguish'n" people would be able to tell Body frm Spirit,
    Can't identify'em, Agents showin up w/ denture kits,
    I left Snatch distorted w/ the sticks his death came w/ Japanese censorship.
    So If its a Robbery... I'll mirror that w/ a gauge clutched;
    its Quick Draw Mc 'Grawlix'; If I sense any Signs to replace Fuk,
    All that time training like Goku..it's irrelevant if your fists means danger,
    it's Hyperbolic... U'll be in a Daze for Weeks I'm on another Level w/ the chamber...
    Did all Gun bars cus I'm Beast Mode...
    Push who's buttons? Everything I 'Write down' is a Cheatcode
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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    I’m armed to the teeth so u can get ur mental severed,
    Until ur plaque is on the wall…& forensics can only identify u w/a dental record
    nah plaque wp & association is played and has been done a variety of ways already
    He’s close to the ledge...why should I throw the clips in?
    When all I gotta do is ‘push him over the edge’ for us to see the fall & wit's end
    pretty cool, dont love reffering to him as Wit bcuz it just feels like reaching for a concept imo.. but i like the angle here
    U Watchmen so when I saw the door crack to ur shack,
    I crept in...machete in hand…& then I left w/ ur ‘head in a bag’ like Rorschach
    cool, the syllables in the multi are fucking me up.. but i like the watchmen wp flip with the Ror meta
    Should I spell it out? If u try to fuck w/ this animal mental,
    Or write off this lost...I’ma ‘fill ur insides w/ more lead’ than a mechanical pencil
    okay, dece flip but any led/pencil concept at this point feels pretty played & easy
    I saw u & ur bitch at dinner. U think she’s a fine model...
    But don't celebrate yet cuz u know these 'capsule pop' & I'm not uncorking a wine bottle
    ehh similar to last bar, the flip is solid enough but caosule/caps'll a very old wp
    I’ma lift ur soul & give u breathing space as u vomit clown,
    I’ve cosmo stars to fall w/o shootin so someone tell this nigga to comet down
    lol same kindve thing here... cause mo' has been done as has calm-it... indve a cool bar with the tie ins and how its constructed together.. but its tough to give originality points here

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    No 9s... Sniper shots'll have u high to the sky,
    Scope Zoom in on this snowflake by Design;
    He'll be permanently blind to the eye!.
    ummm, interesting concept.. i guess im missing how calling him a snowflake hits or the impact behind the concept... sorry
    Face smeared, Silencer on.. they hardly could hear it;
    He felt "distinguish'n" people would be able to tell Body frm Spirit,
    the dis ting is cool... but gwish? guishin ppl? nah
    Can't identify'em, Agents showin up w/ denture kits,
    I left Snatch distorted w/ the sticks his death came w/ Japanese censorship.
    i dont really like when ppl use Snatch plys on him.. but conceptually this is coo & creatvive
    So If its a Robbery... I'll mirror that w/ a gauge clutched;
    its Quick Draw Mc 'Grawlix'; If I sense any Signs to replace Fuk,
    creative attempt that fell flat imo.. punch is light
    All that time training like Goku..it's irrelevant if your fists means danger,
    it's Hyperbolic... U'll be in a Daze for Weeks I'm on another Level w/ the chamber...
    is this a level / game concept? a dbz game? i dunno never watched the show and dont know anything about it..
    Did all Gun bars cus I'm Beast Mode...
    Push who's buttons? Everything I 'Write down' is a Cheatcode
    nah the 'left' 'right' down' 'up' controller combo bars have been done, and done better.. i think it was Warbux that had a down, right similar bar longgg time ago everyone lovedd


    I dunno im underwhelmed and ive seen you both come much better before imo... Body seemed to try & come with a more wp heavy approach this week, but it hurt him as he had a lot of played ideas... a couple cool lines but on the whole a lot of freshness to be desired..
    I dunno i kinda feel bad I'm missing a few of Unfuk's ideas... i know his trademark is more obscure abstract ideas a lot of the time, but i wasnt fuckin with his verse this week.. and the gwishing wp felt forced af.. props to both, ive got Body edging this one

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    Quote Originally Posted by RealBodySnatcher View Post
    U mean to read my verse & see what your up against. Don't matter.

    Coup de Grace


    I’m armed to the teeth so u can get ur mental severed,
    Until ur plaque is on the wall…& forensics can only identify u w/a dental record

    not bad here.

    He’s close to the ledge...why should I throw the clips in?
    When all I gotta do is ‘push him over the edge’ for us to see the fall & wit's end

    Slick little name flip here.

    U Watchmen so when I saw the door crack to ur shack,
    I crept in...machete in hand…& then I left w/ ur ‘head in a bag’ like Rorschach

    Seen this kind of punch before, this one was cool. It could've been harsher.

    Should I spell it out? If u try to fuck w/ this animal mental,
    Or write off this lost...I’ma ‘fill ur insides w/ more lead’ than a mechanical pencil

    Wasn't feeling this one so much.

    I saw u & ur bitch at dinner. U think she’s a fine model...
    But don't celebrate yet cuz u know these 'capsule pop' & I'm not uncorking a wine bottle

    This was alright, i wanna see you go for the kill!

    I’ma lift ur soul & give u breathing space as u vomit clown,
    I’ve cosmo stars to fall w/o shootin so someone tell this nigga to comet down
    lol yea i liked this one nice work here. The Darbs and drexel hill gang are rowdy tonight

    Quote Originally Posted by Unfukwitable View Post
    No 9s... Sniper shots'll have u high to the sky,
    Scope Zoom in on this snowflake by Design;
    He'll be permanently blind to the eye!.

    Nah, i really dont see how snowflake is harmful here.

    Face smeared, Silencer on.. they hardly could hear it;
    He felt "distinguish'n" people would be able to tell Body frm Spirit,

    Eh this feels like a rushed verse from your usual.

    Can't identify'em, Agents showin up w/ denture kits,
    I left Snatch distorted w/ the sticks his death came w/ Japanese censorship.

    this is cool tho

    So If its a Robbery... I'll mirror that w/ a gauge clutched;
    its Quick Draw Mc 'Grawlix'; If I sense any Signs to replace Fuk,

    More swag & flow than an attack line

    All that time training like Goku..it's irrelevant if your fists means danger,
    it's Hyperbolic... U'll be in a Daze for Weeks I'm on another Level w/ the chamber...

    Alot of dbz punches as of late. But this one is a fresh spin.

    Did all Gun bars cus I'm Beast Mode...
    Push who's buttons? Everything I 'Write down' is a Cheatcode
    nah


    v/ RBS he had more lands less misses. Unfuk felt like you rushed to meet a deadline. This isn't ur usual showing.
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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    Bodysnatcher

    I’m armed to the teeth so u can get ur mental severed,
    Until ur plaque is on the wall…& forensics can only identify u w/a dental record
    seen this armed to teeth concept before not bad

    He’s close to the ledge...why should I throw the clips in?
    When all I gotta do is ‘push him over the edge’ for us to see the fall & wit's end
    ok

    U Watchmen so when I saw the door crack to ur shack,
    I crept in...machete in hand…& then I left w/ ur ‘head in a bag’ like Rorschach
    not bad felt could've had more sting

    Should I spell it out? If u try to fuck w/ this animal mental,
    Or write off this lost...I’ma ‘fill ur insides w/ more lead’ than a mechanical pencil
    nah

    I saw u & ur bitch at dinner. U think she’s a fine model...
    But don't celebrate yet cuz u know these 'capsule pop' & I'm not uncorking a wine bottle
    no

    I’ma lift ur soul & give u breathing space as u vomit clown,
    I’ve cosmo stars to fall w/o shootin so someone tell this nigga to comet down
    nah forced wordplay

    Unfukwitable

    No 9s... Sniper shots'll have u high to the sky,
    Scope Zoom in on this snowflake by Design;
    nah

    He'll be permanently blind to the eye!.
    Face smeared, Silencer on.. they hardly could hear it;
    He felt "distinguish'n" people would be able to tell Body frm Spirit,
    wp was a miss

    Can't identify'em, Agents showin up w/ denture kits,
    I left Snatch distorted w/ the sticks his death came w/ Japanese censorship.
    dope af nice

    So If its a Robbery... I'll mirror that w/ a gauge clutched;
    its Quick Draw Mc 'Grawlix'; If I sense any Signs to replace Fuk,
    not really a punch

    All that time training like Goku..it's irrelevant if your fists means danger,
    it's Hyperbolic... U'll be in a Daze for Weeks I'm on another Level w/ the chamber...
    nice hit

    Did all Gun bars cus I'm Beast Mode...
    Push who's buttons? Everything I 'Write down' is a Cheatcode
    nah

    I really didn't like bodysnatchers concepts most were a miss and played. Unfuk was rushed but I really like the japenese censorship hit and the dragon ball concept.

    V/Unfuk
    Last edited by Joe Boston; March 23rd, 2019 at 07:00 PM
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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    I’m armed to the teeth so u can get ur mental severed,
    Until ur plaque is on the wall…& forensics can only identify u w/a dental record
    ...cool, used a similar concept before but u delivered it......
    He’s close to the ledge...why should I throw the clips in?
    When all I gotta do is ‘push him over the edge’ for us to see the fall & wit's end
    ...see what u tried but it was jumbled up. Calling him wit is lazy too.....
    U Watchmen so when I saw the door crack to ur shack,
    I crept in...machete in hand…& then I left w/ ur ‘head in a bag’ like Rorschach
    ...watchmen shoulda been in ur 2nd line and flipped it, lotta filler.......
    Should I spell it out? If u try to fuck w/ this animal mental,
    Or write off this lost...I’ma ‘fill ur insides w/ more lead’ than a mechanical pencil
    ....nothing wrong with the bar I've seen these tho.....
    I saw u & ur bitch at dinner. U think she’s a fine model...
    But don't celebrate yet cuz u know these 'capsule pop' & I'm not uncorking a wine bottle
    ....capsule pop aite good flip.....
    I’ma lift ur soul & give u breathing space as u vomit clown,
    I’ve cosmo stars to fall w/o shootin so someone tell this nigga to comet down
    .......Cosmo n comet wp in the same bar, never really seen dual wp in a bar unless they tie together. They simple but it ain't a bad bar the way u executed it......

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    No 9s... Sniper shots'll have u high to the sky,
    Scope Zoom in on this snowflake by Design;
    ....missing something not a good start..........
    He'll be permanently blind to the eye!.
    Face smeared, Silencer on.. they hardly could hear it;
    He felt "distinguish'n" people would be able to tell Body frm Spirit,
    ....not feeling this either, dis stringuish n, then the tell body from spirit u wasted a good concept.........
    Can't identify'em, Agents showin up w/ denture kits,
    I left Snatch distorted w/ the sticks his death came w/ Japanese censorship.
    ....snatch Japanese censorship it needed more.......
    So If its a Robbery... I'll mirror that w/ a gauge clutched;
    its Quick Draw Mc 'Grawlix'; If I sense any Signs to replace Fuk,
    .....I'm just not feeling this verse bro feels rushed............
    All that time training like Goku..it's irrelevant if your fists means danger,
    it's Hyperbolic... U'll be in a Daze for Weeks I'm on another Level w/ the chamber...
    ......nice.....
    Did all Gun bars cus I'm Beast Mode...
    Push who's buttons? Everything I 'Write down' is a Cheatcode
    ....needed more........

    Overall I went with consistancy, unfuk had that one fire line but the rest his verse was filler whereas bs had one good line and the rest was aite with a miss I think. Anyway went with consistency on this one.

    V. BS
    Last edited by A. Diction; March 23rd, 2019 at 08:24 PM

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - EXT

    Quote Originally Posted by RealBodySnatcher View Post
    U mean to read my verse & see what your up against. Don't matter.

    Coup de Grace


    I’m armed to the teeth so u can get ur mental severed,
    Until ur plaque is on the wall…& forensics can only identify u w/a dental record
    I like the wordplay here
    He’s close to the ledge...why should I throw the clips in?
    When all I gotta do is ‘push him over the edge’ for us to see the fall & wit's end
    Eh
    U Watchmen so when I saw the door crack to ur shack,
    I crept in...machete in hand…& then I left w/ ur ‘head in a bag’ like Rorschach
    This is a little forced.
    Should I spell it out? If u try to fuck w/ this animal mental,
    Or write off this lost...I’ma ‘fill ur insides w/ more lead’ than a mechanical pencil
    I like the metaphor but not the punch
    I saw u & ur bitch at dinner. U think she’s a fine model...
    But don't celebrate yet cuz u know these 'capsule pop' & I'm not uncorking a wine bottle
    This is neat. Not my fav bar but its cool
    I’ma lift ur soul & give u breathing space as u vomit clown,
    I’ve cosmo stars to fall w/o shootin so someone tell this nigga to comet down
    Ehh
    Quote Originally Posted by Unfukwitable View Post
    No 9s... Sniper shots'll have u high to the sky,
    Scope Zoom in on this snowflake by Design;
    He'll be permanently blind to the eye!.
    Don't love this
    Face smeared, Silencer on.. they hardly could hear it;
    He felt "distinguish'n" people would be able to tell Body frm Spirit,
    Ehh this is ok
    Can't identify'em, Agents showin up w/ denture kits,
    I left Snatch distorted w/ the sticks his death came w/ Japanese censorship.
    This is cute. Voters don't like this shit but I do.
    So If its a Robbery... I'll mirror that w/ a gauge clutched;
    its Quick Draw Mc 'Grawlix'; If I sense any Signs to replace Fuk,
    I dont get this
    All that time training like Goku..it's irrelevant if your fists means danger,
    it's Hyperbolic... U'll be in a Daze for Weeks I'm on another Level w/ the chamber...
    Didn't need all the extra set ups here. Hyperbolic was dope
    Did all Gun bars cus I'm Beast Mode...
    Push who's buttons? Everything I 'Write down' is a Cheatcode
    THis is a stretch
    VOTE: Body I didn't really love this battle, but I know you guys will come better one you shake a little dust off.

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    Fall & wits end was nice
    Rorschach was cool
    Machanical pencil is an old concept
    Capsule pop is aright
    Liked cosmo

    Vs

    Dis ting wish was dope
    Censorship could have been better
    Daze for weeks was cool

    Only bars I was feeling from fuck

    Both y’all openers were meh... I’ve read better from both I think if body stuck with his gun bars and less wordplay it would have been a better read but he had more quotables for me here.

    V/body

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    I wished Unfuk took more time w/ his other lines bc i liked that Hyperbolic jawn & Jap line was aight but had too many lows here/off concepts to me for me to lean his way.. Grawlix should have been entirely redone IMO..whereas BS played it safe even though the comparison lines can get repetitive to me.
    capsule was coo..

    V- BODY
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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    plaque was a fire start
    wit’s end was decent
    the setup was whatever but Rorschach was a heaterrr
    mech pencil was aight, concepts are nasty so far tho
    wasnt feelin wine
    nahhh at the closer

    vs

    wasnt feelin the opener
    dis ting wish was clever.. felt like i had to say it in a jamaican accent tho haha
    jap was nassstyy
    dunno about quickdraw
    hyperbolic was ehhh, felt like it coulda been reworded to be crazier
    same with the closer


    unfuk was solid, a lil rewording with the last bars and this woulda been a different story, feelin the jap line.. body had rorschach and plaque that were my 2 fav this battle

    v Body

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    Re: LLL Week 3: BodySnatcher (0-0) vs. Unfukwitable (0-0) - OPEN 4 VOTES

    Myfault I got busy and aint wanna N/S.... ima bring it next rnd props to Body
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