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    LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    verses due: Thursday 11:59PST
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    Maximum Lines = 20 Lines



    Extension: Up to opponent IF verse completed & posted/sent. Otherwise at the Moderators discretion.

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2)

    I am going to fuck you up.

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    Last edited by hello there; March 17th, 2019 at 10:57 PM

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2)

    @hello there

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ronin
    This hit game available everywhere: I line up green and jem pops, from cellphone to ipad..
    ....this makes NO sense n I'm pissed I wasted time reading that garbage.......stick to trolling chat.........
    Ur last verse was like reading hieroglyphs, u def not dangerous...
    This my feedback from his last battle, sometimes it was like I was reading a different language.
    Get away from rap n stay in chat. Yall already know this kids dead...
    Ur last verse? U tried to hit the JEM a lot but didn't...fat ass on the couch trolling rb instead.
    U the type to go camping n shit, hate this fake ass clown...
    This nigga pitch a tent in the morning...n no one there to help him take it down.
    He's used to people not treating him equal. Easy for him to stay grounded...
    Even in school u was always berated...for never dropping A bomb when it counted.
    This cats a weakling, could write an Essay on why he so wack n cheesy...
    This battle is a Sherlock Holmes, from past facts I deduce I'll win this match easy.
    I'm rich man, the big wig. Ur a bitch wimpling...
    U got beat by a Gemini can see ur dual personalities conflicting.
    Last edited by A. Diction; March 21st, 2019 at 02:56 PM
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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2)

    Quote Originally Posted by JEM
    In HS you were a bitch! Going to classrooms, getting hazed son
    Used to being the hallmark so much, you made your name one!






    .
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    I see this Heckler & Coke? Go find me the muzzle..
    Cuz when Art See my Sig Nature, there's no sign of a struggle..
    Your Queen wraps her noodle round meat that's not you..
    Till that pussy leakin' yellow like egg drop soup..
    You bit to beat Letterman. You moved votes for the W..
    Real talk: You're not cultured. 'Swhy no one can stomach you..
    Why battle this kid? Each line is a tattle and fib..
    Next time you act like Baby Barc, I'll rattle your crib..
    Ask the brethren: Who think Rosa Legend? They'll say "fuck that shit"..
    One whisper will seal lips like you hittin' on black chicks..
    No lie; you gotta decide whether you so gay or so thug..
    You hedge, the chopper trims Ro's Bae and Ro's Buds..
    .
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    Last edited by hello there; March 21st, 2019 at 02:11 PM Reason: i added a fucking s, you degenerates

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Open 4 Votes

    Hello There wins by DQ.

    Open for feed
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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Quote Originally Posted by hello there View Post
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    I see this Heckler & Coke? Go find me the muzzle..
    Cuz when Art See my Sig Nature, there's no sign of a struggle..

    You're improving, this is alot better than your past verses. Could be harsher but this is a cool one. Important thing is your wording is smoother.

    Your Queen wraps her noodle round meat that's not you..
    Till that pussy leakin' yellow like egg drop soup..

    If it leaks yellow then its an std u gave her. The punch feels underworded, good concept though, Maybe something like this.

    "Have her pussy all hot & leaking once it's busted - thats Egg Drop soup."



    You bit to beat Letterman. You moved votes for the W..
    Real talk: You're not cultured. 'Swhy no one can stomach you..

    This is slick, cultured so it can be eaten. I like this one. Good bar!

    Why battle this kid? Each line is a tattle and fib..
    Next time you act like Baby Barc, I'll rattle your crib..

    This is a statement and a wasted oppterunity to knock his block off.

    Ask the brethren: Who think Rosa Legend? They'll say "fuck that shit"..
    One whisper will seal lips like you hittin' on black chicks..

    Not sure what you were going for with the punch. I actually thought the setup was fire. Was expecting a rosa park punch cus of the set up

    No lie; you gotta decide whether you so gay or so thug..
    You hedge, the chopper trims Ro's Bae and Ro's Buds..
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    Need to word your punch better here, You have all the words that associate with the play. But not executing on the punch. Its very soft here.
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    All in all I think Hello there is improving. You just need to work on wording your punches to land cleaner and with more impact. I see alot of improvement. Keep at it! Its frustrating i know haha, but all you can do is push on & keep writing.

    Thank you for the time you take to participate, man. I appreciate it!
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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Thanks @Clout lol
    Now I am become death; destroyer of worlds.

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2)

    Quote Originally Posted by Ronin View Post

    Ur last verse was like reading hieroglyphs, u def not dangerous...
    This my feedback from his last battle, sometimes it was like I was reading a different language.
    I've never seen some 1 quote their feedback. Unique
    Get away from rap n stay in chat. Yall already know this kids dead...
    Ur last verse? U tried to hit the JEM a lot but didn't...fat ass on the couch trolling rb instead.
    gem gym is a stretch bar was lite
    U the type to go camping n shit, hate this fake ass clown...
    This nigga pitch a tent in the morning...n no one there to help him take it down.


    He's used to people not treating him equal. Easy for him to stay grounded...
    Even in school u was always berated...for never dropping A bomb when it counted.
    punch is lite
    This cats a weakling, could write an Essay on why he so wack n cheesy...
    This battle is a Sherlock Holmes, from past facts I deduce I'll win this match easy.

    I'm rich man, the big wig. Ur a bitch wimpling...
    U got beat by a Gemini can see ur dual personalities conflicting

    set up could be better but nameplay is fire

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    Quote Originally Posted by hello there View Post
    .
    .
    I see this Heckler & Coke? Go find me the muzzle..
    Cuz when Art See my Sig Nature, there's no sign of a struggle..

    Your Queen wraps her noodle round meat that's not you..
    Till that pussy leakin' yellow like egg drop soup..
    nasty


    You bit to beat Letterman. You moved votes for the W..
    Real talk: You're not cultured. 'Swhy no one can stomach you..
    not bad
    Why battle this kid? Each line is a tattle and fib..
    Next time you act like Baby Barc, I'll rattle your crib..
    funny wording, rhyming battle needs to fade lol
    Ask the brethren: Who think Rosa Legend? They'll say "fuck that shit"..
    One whisper will seal lips like you hittin' on black chicks..


    No lie; you gotta decide whether you so gay or so thug..
    You hedge, the chopper trims Ro's Bae and Ro's Buds..
    Ur wording is funny punch was lite
    .
    I liked hellos verse better even tho most punches did not slap. Just reads funny or maybe it's the weed. Ronins closer was lotb and was fire. Still could have linked the Gemini concept better.
    Last edited by Sting3r; March 22nd, 2019 at 02:46 AM
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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Can we get some feedback since I was dq'ed for "editing my verse after he dropped" which, again, didnt happen

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Quote Originally Posted by Imurhuckleberry View Post
    Can we get some feedback since I was dq'ed for "editing my verse after he dropped" which, again, didnt happen
    Lmfao

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Damnit

    - - - Updated - - -

    U was quick on the trigger to catch that one

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Quote Originally Posted by Imurhuckleberry View Post
    Damnit

    - - - Updated - - -

    U was quick on the trigger to catch that one
    I knew you fucked up! Had to quote you

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    Quote Originally Posted by Imurhuckleberry View Post
    Can we get some feedback since I was dq'ed for "editing my verse after he dropped" which, again, didnt happen
    it was a full hour after he dropped.... you're so annoying, AND yes another alias attempt to reset your record , such a joke



    I see this Heckler & Coke? Go find me the muzzle..
    Cuz when Art See my Sig Nature, there's no sign of a struggle..
    coolish concept, wording is solid
    Your Queen wraps her noodle round meat that's not you..
    Till that pussy leakin' yellow like egg drop soup..
    nah, setup funny but 'leakin yellow' with a soup connection is corny to me, needs more wit
    You bit to beat Letterman. You moved votes for the W..
    Real talk: You're not cultured. 'Swhy no one can stomach you..
    lol, and punch is strong if true.. i know he posted mad late but never heard anything about biting
    Why battle this kid? Each line is a tattle and fib..
    Next time you act like Baby Barc, I'll rattle your crib..
    meh, okay
    Ask the brethren: Who think Rosa Legend? They'll say "fuck that shit"..
    One whisper will seal lips like you hittin' on black chicks..
    meh
    No lie; you gotta decide whether you so gay or so thug..
    You hedge, the chopper trims Ro's Bae and Ro's Buds..
    really good wording... wp and punch is solid
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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    I see this Heckler & Coke? Go find me the muzzle..
    Cuz when Art See my Sig Nature, there's no sign of a struggle..
    had potential but why did you say coke? Smh
    Your Queen wraps her noodle round meat that's not you..
    Till that pussy leakin' yellow like egg drop soup..
    lmao wtf
    You bit to beat Letterman. You moved votes for the W..
    Real talk: You're not cultured. 'Swhy no one can stomach you..
    this was cool
    Why battle this kid? Each line is a tattle and fib..
    Next time you act like Baby Barc, I'll rattle your crib..
    alright
    Ask the brethren: Who think Rosa Legend? They'll say "fuck that shit"..
    One whisper will seal lips like you hittin' on black chicks..
    no
    No lie; you gotta decide whether you so gay or so thug..
    You hedge, the chopper trims Ro's Bae and Ro's Buds..
    no


    Not too bad, I think it was better than your last but I can’t remember. Useless might’ve been able to beat this

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    Re: LLL Week 3: Ronin (0-2) vs. Hello There (0-2) - Hello There wins by DQ. - Open for Feed

    I see this Heckler & Coke? Go find me the muzzle..
    Cuz when Art See my Sig Nature, there's no sign of a struggle..

    Ok concept, the intention of the line is meh

    Your Queen wraps her noodle round meat that's not you..
    Till that pussy leakin' yellow like egg drop soup..

    Needed rewording could've been better as is its a no

    You bit to beat Letterman. You moved votes for the W..
    Real talk: You're not cultured. 'Swhy no one can stomach you..

    Ok connection- as a personal it's aight..

    Why battle this kid? Each line is a tattle and fib..
    Next time you act like Baby Barc, I'll rattle your crib..

    Needed more here, meh wording

    Ask the brethren: Who think Rosa Legend? They'll say "fuck that shit"..
    One whisper will seal lips like you hittin' on black chicks..

    Didn't like..

    No lie; you gotta decide whether you so gay or so thug..
    You hedge, the chopper trims Ro's Bae and Ro's Buds..

    Cool idea not lived to potential

    Ehh.. expected far more from the way you vote
    Last edited by Exalted.; March 24th, 2019 at 10:14 AM

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