LLL Week 4: Skurj. vs. Exalted - OPEN 4 VOTES

[Blue Bayou]

verses due: Thursday 11:59PST
Minimum Lines = 12 Lines
Maximum Lines = 20 Lines



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[Skurj.]

Going 12

[Exalted.]

sure

[Skurj.]

I’m going to need the ext

[Exalted.]

I'll take the same.

[Skurj.]

Exalted aka Infiltrate aka Thorne

Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champin shit
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket

[Exalted.]

Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to midtier

[Resin M-I-C]

the punch was nice, works both ways.. now that’s wordplay, only takeaway is “off” in both rhymes
useless was too straighforward for me
same with the golf line
spit bars is ehhh
deleting bars simple again
Thorne was solid, feelin that.. flowerly gay tho? lol
feels like the closer’s been done before but it was aight

vs

apple is a heater, great way to open
ex squeeze me was a lil corny but i’m a sucker for creativity so i fucked with this
skurries was light
urgently was a lil reach but was aight
good, i liked mentalist
matador doesn’t work both ways for me but is creative


skurj had two solid lines, some straightforward/simple punches that needed more umph tho.. Inf prob one of the most creative with concepts around and showed it here.. that opener was lotb

v Inf/Exalted

[Lenox]

Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off
Okay, not much context to this punch. Coulda been worded better
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
Nahh
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
Alright
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champin shit
You’re just using other battlers from the site to help your weak concepts at this point
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
Read above
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
Read above
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket
Gross



Vs


Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
Nice
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
Okay
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
Alright
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
Okay
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
Fire, this was good
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to midtier
Nah


Overall: this was a landslide like my depression playlist. @skurj you’re a decent writer when u actually have concepts. Seems like you’re going through writers block cuz you didn’t have a single concept I liked this week

INF

[A. Diction]

Exalted aka Infiltrate aka Thorne

Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off
...partial np good flip......
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
....nah my name been used in connection to too much shit, even with 3 losses tie in....
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
....not feeling this tbh......
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champin shit
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
...I like this concept but the wording is all over the place.......
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
...this could of been dope but flowerly gay? The actual punch was soft but the bar is good.....
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket
...overworded but aite......

Vs

Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
....good open.....
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
....not feeling this, too soft.....
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
....ehhhh......
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
.....this was aite.....
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
....this is nice......
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to midtier
....yeah matador coulda been dope with better wording.....



V. Inf

[Dominate]

Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off
Nice, good np and attack bar
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
Nah. Seen a useless np/wp already this season and I generally don't like bars that flip other user's names anyway unless it's relevant to a personal punch concept or the line is clever/harsh/funny asf
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
hmmm okayish. All those golf wps feel familiar but it's aided by the 'current event' flip
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champion shit
Nah. Same as the Useless bar I don't like flipping other users' names for a generic concept
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
I'm going to assume the personal. This is is pretty cool
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
lol. funny flip. not bad.
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket
Nah, you OD'd on these types of bars



Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
niiiiiiice. Could've worked in calling him 'clown' to make this even better but still dug this even with just the apple on the barrel part. Good open.
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
LOL. Pretty good. Tied the personal angle in with the self nameplay to make it a much stronger punch than it would've been - good job
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
Not sure if 'scurries' is supposed to be a wp. I didn't catch it if so. If it's just the word scurries tying in with squeaking/rat then this bar is just okayish
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
LoL. I dunno about calling him Ur but I like the flip
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
Niiiiiice personal and wp flip. I'll assume he's done this in previous verses and you didn't flip his verse here. This one's heavy
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to mistier
ehhhh not so much on this one. Too much of a reach conceptually for me - door opening to move onto midtier


Inf got this one. Scurj's opener was pretty dope and that shows promise (please stick around and work towards entire verses of that standard!), but he had a few bars I just didn't like at all. Ex was more consistent/creative and had the two best lines of the battle.

V/ Ex

[King]

Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off
cool wp
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
nah this was too straightforward
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
eh. its ok coz of the chat tie-in, but still a little played
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champin shit
not feeling this one. again too straightfoward
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
pretty good. would have hit harder if it wasn't ur 3rd np using other battlers. should have scrapped the others and just went with this imo
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
dope. idk about the term "flowerly gay", but punch was dope
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket
nah man, this i think the 4th np using other members, and u already referenced these two. throwaway bar. Seems like u hit a little writers block or didnt have a lot of time. still a couple nice bars tho.

vs

Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
cool
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
i think it could have been worded a little harsher but cool still
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
i think i'm missing the reference. tried to google.
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
np with "ur"? little bit of a reach imo
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
this hits pretty hard after reading his verse. to the point of almost feeling like feeding lol i'll assume this isnt the first time he wrote bars like that
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to midtier
dont like this flip tbh


Ex got this with more variety and creativity alone. Skurj definitely seemed to be struggling for ideas in this one. it happens to all of us homie.

vote Ex

[Barcotic]

Skurj
Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off

now that’s wordplay, only takeaway is “off” in both rhymes

yup, 100%
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
no, weak
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
dece.
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champin shit
hell no
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
no again. these namedrops are simplistic & soft thus far
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
ok, this 1 is better
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket
i like this, but why so many namedrops? the weaker ones ruined the whole middle of ur verse

2 gd punches
1 jab
3 misses

vs

Exalted
better than Infiltrate but still a weird af name IMO
Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
dope, allllmost too much but it works
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
ok
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
nah
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
what tf. no
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
fire
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to midtier
good

3 gd punches
1 jab
2 misses

v/exalt

[Sting3r]

Exalted aka Infiltrate aka Thorne

Let the Uzi clense you. your life feels will dim off
You'll see External Red.. way the choppa peeled his skin off
horror core shiiiit
3 punches? = 3 loses! your nothin but weak dude
Bars are such a useless shit show that we'll see Ronin beat you
ok, like the personal approach punch was simple
Rob this faggot cos he sub par! Lame'll die soon
Give'em the Nine,Iron for the green! this aint golfin 101 W/Blue Bayou
like the idea but 9 iron is kinda old
I'm your 'Real NME!' so jus plan to quit
Cos You cant $pit w/Bars S'why you're never known for champin shit
creative but not lacks harshness as 1 might say
I'll Bomb Bard U w/punches! till ur feelin rattled
S'like 1-2 vs Spree....
Deleting your bar's the only reason your known for Kill'n Battles
nice 1
This prick'll get cut & Buried, you flowerly gay
The blick'll put thorne in the ground 4 less than Barcotics hourly wage
wording is off concept was clever
INF never HOF! drop a thousand bars that are all wack shit
If you look up & see Spit Bayou? S'cos I hocked a loog on your casket
i like how u used other battlers names to diss him,

Hear the shotty blare – throats hit! blood sprayin til he's out've air
'Apple on the Barrel' now he wet facedown & mouth open like a County Fair
decent scheme
Had writers block or life probs? Waitin last minute's wacker then fuck
Only cute excuse is 'Ex squeeeze me' when ya girl sees me to ask for a hug
thats goofy
Don't act sooo above. Your type infests the site w/ how ya risen..
For this snitch squeakin by wins a way of life–this Rat Skurries 'bout his business
good scheme
Just admit it you're worried. One extra day... this what he serves me?
Its like punches signal to land & Urgently let us down writing wack shit in a hurry
ok
Dog this #facts & it's known. U name drop vets who dont rally ur hopes
Got Mentalist in verses.. but NEEDS one to trick us into thinkin it's actually dope
is this feeding or does he do that often? fire either way
Noone takes u serious cuz a wins clear the first stage begins here
No bullshittin ya... sucha Welcome Matador opens for newbs who move on to midtier
wp was dope, wording of the punch coulda been harder

skurj; i liked ur personal approach, i like the name schemes. could use some harder haymakers in there. good verse

exalted; over all nice verse. first scheme and 3rd bar scheme were good just not the hardest hitting. still liked them both tho. u can let me know if ur mentalist line was based off prior skurj battles where he did that sort of style. i can't remember and i'm to lazy to look. either way bar was fire. but if ur feeding then ur a dick..


vote/ exalted

[Spree]

Inf wins