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    I Remember You

    I Remember You



    I lost a quarter in that game, but wanted to play pin ball
    Didn’t think much hearing the keys come down the hall
    He opened the trap, look up and smiled cause it wasn’t there
    So I smiled and said ok, it’s in that game over there
    That nite my sister, her bestie and me went out on the beach
    Coming up with lies cause I wasn’t even old enough to work, let alone reach
    I prolly didn’t have to, so when I first woke I remembered the guy that sweated me
    …. when I was sweating you
    We played spin the bottle, and on you it landed but Im not sure what made me cry and leave
    He grabbed a bottle and my shoulder, like come on lets leave – I wanna to talk to you

    “So that I knew that you were there for me, time after time you were there for me”
    C: Remember yesterday… x2


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    Sleeping on the beach, he sat on my face so we had a sit up contest, my best – he was laced
    We used to sit at the bar and order drinks on my tab like adults – it was nothing
    But one night at 7 he wasn’t there, and I was scared, I knew nothing then of guys fronting
    But he didn’t…. to the couch on the conference floor
    That’s not a ben a hu that’s all of my blood all invested in you

    “I live for your smile and die for your kiss”
    C: Remember yesterday… x2


    (Next verse)


    He told me I ain’t kiss right and showed me how, asked if I ever had sex but said nah not now
    At the pool the following day, rocked my bikini and kept walking maintenances way
    His swag made me swim up to him in the pool like HEY – I’m ready

    (Over guitar)


    That nite I had to be in the room by 9, snuck back out and lost it in a light rain and white flashes of time
    I remember waking up and looking at the sand and how it looked
    Sneaking back in saying I went to the vending machine not even shook
    On the 4th I remember positioning the blanket just so – and his smile looking up and how he just glow
    My brother’s friend threw me in I remember he said cool off
    Left their pissed and didn’t even think about leaving you there with them even if they was soft

    (Guitar chord finishing)
    (Next verse)


    They can try to change the picture but it’s already imbedded
    And I’m left all alone with too late – I can’t believe he even said it

    Just wanted to let you know, touch by touch you help me get thru
    I know the difference between a dream and true, I know the difference cause I remember you

    “You will always be my dream come true”

    In case you thought I don’t remember you….

    C: Remember yesterday… x2

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    Re: I Remember You

    That was good work, I like how you write in story mode. I could flow with it but I enjoyed the content level of the piece. From you playing spin the bottle , to having drinks on your tab and him not showing up like usual, to him saying you didn’t know how to kiss and showing you how, to you saying your ready for sex and later sneaking back in. Lying talking about your ass went to the vending machine lol. It was a great read and a good job on this piece. I’m gonna check out more of your stuff and give feedback as well.

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    Re: I Remember You

    Thank you @Razor _sharp I read your work as well. I appreciate the feedback.
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