LLL Week 7 Contendership: $pitacular1 (4-2) vs Ronin (3-3) - Spit Wins

[King]

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[A. Diction]

18?

[$pitacular]

LMAO WTF

20

[A. Diction]

Sent 20

[$pitacular]

Wow. Just.. wow.
Great fucking job.
Your verse homie it was fucking dope
I'm not going to vote until this weekend but I am voting for you.. I hope Blue doesn't take it as a personal vendetta I just really feel you won.
When I read your opener I spit my coffee out on my desk at work lol. That shit was fire

lol...

u shoulda known I was lying. u can't get with the pros, ur shit with the prose.
so now I'ma end the fairytale, expose this troll & crush the bridge of your nose.
that PM was a plant, the vultures are circling & you'll get scarred from abusing
but I'm doing this #FTC, cuz ur more of a horticulture than Bar when he's losing
ur a palindrome, with all the goddamn names you use for pouting & fronting
cuz I know nothing about the account I'm vs... & your vs account for nothing
I'm goin' in. cuz taking the alias Useless is really a cardinal sin of duplicity
& I doubt you even know the origin of Ronin but we Marvel at your stupidity
whatever the fuck you call yourself, it's a fact you can't get with the best
ur next corny name should be gronin, based on reactions you get to your text
you try so hard to be me. so I decided to ride with the heat popping
& when I pour this lead, you'll diecast aside like a cheap copy
idk how you thought we could go 20 by tonight & the fight would still be fair
why the FUCK would you battle me LR style, when I'm still on a kill spree there??
weak gun bars & wack punchlines.. I mean it's a pathetic caliber you're carrion
& you're a fucking text scavenger dog, you jackal your concepts from erryone
you're doing it all wrong, acting like a bitch & improper with every try
& now misuse is what I'm calling you for the rest of your pathetic life
always throw a fit & quit. watch me put a bastard coward on a gurney.
if you plan on signing out this time, you better transfer power of attorney

[Blue Bayou]

Ronins Verse

18?

Sheesh u obv have no sense of humor, all ur jokes make no sense and get shit on, bitch...
U wanna be a joker, I'll keep ur funeral's ledger as a memento to spit on, spit.
U got 2 losses from better writers, 2 of mine are DQs from ppl who won't make the top 5....
Only way u beating me is if the past repeats itself....n u get me disqualified.
He never had success at NC. Tf was u doing getting ur ass kicked dude?...
Then they sent one of their own to rb and alienate thru ur roster faster than girls do that to u.
If resin hadn't no showed, u wouldnt be here. Ur music sound like a drowning cat...
This the one time in ya life a mic actually helped you move down the tracks.
Do u drink n write? U just wasting the time of the veterans n shit...
Go thru a rough draft........maybe the more we drink the better it'll get.
U ain't balling, facts. Back in class u was always picked after the clutz n the retard...
Gonna put that mug on a Posterize all see my nuts in ur face on my greeting cards.
You'll never make it big, no matter how hard u stay grinding...
So while he pushing the trash...he should be pulling his music right behind him.
Hall of fame? What a shame, it makes the site look bad dude...
When u dont have a single accomp at NC, except alllll the ones bags gave u.
U dont blow no smoke, cost ur dad a lot to find out u were into men...
Only time he smoked diesel, was watching the wrestlers entrance.
What's the deal kid, when it comes to hands u dont have none to throw...
I miss The Real Spit...when I tried to hit him in the face with one of those.

[Lay Doubt.]

]u shoulda known I was lying. u can't get with the pros, ur shit with the prose.
so now I'ma end the fairytale, expose this troll & crush the bridge of your nose.
ok ok solid open worded well
that PM was a plant, the vultures are circling & you'll get scarred from abusing
but I'm doing this #FTC, cuz ur more of a horticulture than Bar when he's losing
whore to culture, witty.. but felt like more a shot at Bar than Useless
ur a palindrome, with all the goddamn names you use for pouting & fronting
cuz I know nothing about the account I'm vs... & your vs account for nothing
nice I lol'd
I'm goin' in. cuz taking the alias Useless is really a cardinal sin of duplicity
& I doubt you even know the origin of Ronin but we Marvel at your stupidity
seen Marvel shit done for sure but the name play element makes this a decent flip to me
whatever the fuck you call yourself, it's a fact you can't get with the best
ur next corny name should be gronin, based on reactions you get to your text
ironically this is a lil corny, I chuckled tho.
you try so hard to be me. so I decided to ride with the heat popping
& when I pour this lead, you'll diecast aside like a cheap copy
yessir, die-cast shit's made by pouring molten lead into a mold to produce a certain shape. this is creative and hard.
idk how you thought we could go 20 by tonight & the fight would still be fair
why the FUCK would you battle me LR style, when I'm still on a kill spree there??
self prop line and fillerish, not feeling
weak gun bars & wack punchlines.. I mean it's a pathetic caliber you're carrion
& you're a fucking text scavenger dog, you jackal your concepts from erryone
"jack all" is a bit forced to me tbh. would have been better if you'd used "jackal" wordplay to say "jack'll" somehow.
you're doing it all wrong, acting like a bitch & improper with every try
& now misuse is what I'm calling you for the rest of your pathetic life
dope, I like the double entendre here and tie-ins to both meanings in your set up. works both ways.
always throw a fit & quit. watch me put a bastard coward on a gurney.
if you plan on signing out this time, you better transfer power of attorney
simple concept but this is hard to me and works for a straightforward closer

vs.

Sheesh u obv have no sense of humor, all ur jokes make no sense and get shit on, bitch...
U wanna be a joker, I'll keep ur funeral's ledger as a memento to spit on, spit.
joker/ledger concept had potential but the wording and execution ruined it for me
U got 2 losses from better writers, 2 of mine are DQs from ppl who won't make the top 5....
Only way u beating me is if the past repeats itself....n u get me disqualified.
it's "history repeats itself" and this was too basic regardless
He never had success at NC. Tf was u doing getting ur ass kicked dude?...
Then they sent one of their own to rb and alienate thru ur roster faster than girls do that to u.
yoga flame
If resin hadn't no showed, u wouldnt be here. Ur music sound like a drowning cat...
This the one time in ya life a mic actually helped you move down the tracks.
nah "down the track" really just means the same as "down the road" aka "in the future" to me and doesn't have an implication of success or victory attached to it. It's also weak to diss someone about their opponent not showing up and flaking in a battle
Do u drink n write? U just wasting the time of the veterans n shit...
Go thru a rough draft........maybe the more we drink the better it'll get.
draft like beer I'm guessing is the wordplay? "rough draft" doesn't make sense in that regard so the phrase doesn't work both ways, since nobody says that when referring to beer.
U ain't balling, facts. Back in class u was always picked after the clutz n the retard...
Gonna put that mug on a Posterize all see my nuts in ur face on my greeting cards.
what? absolutely not
You'll never make it big, no matter how hard u stay grinding...
So while he pushing the trash...he should be pulling his music right behind him.
nah this is elementary af and super bland
Hall of fame? What a shame, it makes the site look bad dude...
When u dont have a single accomp at NC, except alllll the ones bags gave u.
see above and also "bad dude" and "gave you" is not a good rhyme scheme
U dont blow no smoke, cost ur dad a lot to find out u were into men...
Only time he smoked diesel, was watching the wrestlers entrance.
nope this ain't it.. doesn't rhyme for shit either
What's the deal kid, when it comes to hands u dont have none to throw...
I miss The Real Spit...when I tried to hit him in the face with one of those.
another elementary concept and you also use present tense by saying "I miss" and then past tense when saying "I tried." Which makes it not work or add up. Regardless, it's a weak concept and bad closer

Disappointing battle and obviously rushed. Spit dropped decent, not as good as usual but more hits than misses. I don't know what happened to Useless though, because from everything I've read from him thus far he's MUCH better than this verse. Maybe writer's block? Not sure. The only line I was feeling whatsoever was the "alienate" one. Outside of that, the rest was simply not good. This might come across as harsh but I'm not one for sugarcoating because nobody ever elevates that way. Wish yall woulda had more time to write because this was a weak contenders match overall. I got Spit taking this pretty handily, no real crazy haymakers but he was much more consistent all throughout.


v/ Spit

[Blue Bayou]

lol...
LoL at that PM in the first place...lordy
u shoulda known I was lying. u can't get with the pros, ur shit with the prose.
so now I'ma end the fairytale, expose this troll & crush the bridge of your nose.
pretty cool concept, dont love the change of 1st/3rd person but thats nitpicking
that PM was a plant, the vultures are circling & you'll get scarred from abusing
but I'm doing this #FTC, cuz ur more of a horticulture than Bar when he's losing
horticulture been done a lot, but the set-up & bar double tie in made this enjoyable
ur a palindrome, with all the goddamn names you use for pouting & fronting
cuz I know nothing about the account I'm vs... & your vs account for nothing
lol, dece
I'm goin' in. cuz taking the alias Useless is really a cardinal sin of duplicity
& I doubt you even know the origin of Ronin but we Marvel at your stupidity
nah, Marvel plays need to be completely avoided at this point imo
whatever the fuck you call yourself, it's a fact you can't get with the best
ur next corny name should be gronin, based on reactions you get to your text
lol, this is almost so silly it's funny & hits... i half like this and half hate this
you try so hard to be me. so I decided to ride with the heat popping
& when I pour this lead, you'll diecast aside like a cheap copy
fire..dope concept
idk how you thought we could go 20 by tonight & the fight would still be fair
why the FUCK would you battle me LR style, when I'm still on a kill spree there??
solid swag here, but the punch is light..dont mind this kindve line in a 20 line battle tho tbh
weak gun bars & wack punchlines.. I mean it's a pathetic caliber you're carrion
& you're a fucking text scavenger dog, you jackal your concepts from erryone
not terribly smooth but i like the concept.. cool idea, the multi is terrible tho tbh
you're doing it all wrong, acting like a bitch & improper with every try
& now misuse is what I'm calling you for the rest of your pathetic life
nice, liked this np
always throw a fit & quit. watch me put a bastard coward on a gurney.
if you plan on signing out this time, you better transfer power of attorney
meh, nah

vs

Sheesh u obv have no sense of humor, all ur jokes make no sense and get shit on, bitch...
U wanna be a joker, I'll keep ur funeral's ledger as a memento to spit on, spit.
ehh, a lot of ledger/joker plays were done 10 years ago when the movie came out.. dont love the spit on spit tie in here... miss to me
U got 2 losses from better writers, 2 of mine are DQs from ppl who won't make the top 5....
Only way u beating me is if the past repeats itself....n u get me disqualified.
okay solid.. like the straight forward hit of this personal
He never had success at NC. Tf was u doing getting ur ass kicked dude?...
Then they sent one of their own to rb and alienate thru ur roster faster than girls do that to u.
upon reread this is a miss...I originally thought alien beat spit on here after coming over from NC, but NVM .. spit isn't RB, it's not his roster..don't even know if he was active at the time
If resin hadn't no showed, u wouldnt be here. Ur music sound like a drowning cat...
This the one time in ya life a mic actually helped you move down the tracks.
personal attempt noted, but there isnt the swag to this a simple jab likes this needs to make me love it... dece
Do u drink n write? U just wasting the time of the veterans n shit...
Go thru a rough draft........maybe the more we drink the better it'll get.
ehh, i find referring to a beer, even a bad beer as a "rough draft" is a bit of a reach for a concept...especially since draft/draft isnt the freshest of angles... nah on this one
U ain't balling, facts. Back in class u was always picked after the clutz n the retard...
Gonna put that mug on a Posterize all see my nuts in ur face on my greeting cards.
nah, better posterize wp's have been done this one screams rushed how its worded
You'll never make it big, no matter how hard u stay grinding...
So while he pushing the trash...he should be pulling his music right behind him.
meh
Hall of fame? What a shame, it makes the site look bad dude...
When u dont have a single accomp at NC, except alllll the ones bags gave u.
damn, with some rewording this mightve hit.. but the way it was executed w/ single "a"comp fucked it up imo
U dont blow no smoke, cost ur dad a lot to find out u were into men...
Only time he smoked diesel, was watching the wrestlers entrance.
i dont really like wrestling bars to begin with (sorry), & this was pretty meh.. "he" smoked diesel doesnt really apply to the watching an enterence way this was done.. i wouldnt love it even with a reword, but it couldve used one
What's the deal kid, when it comes to hands u dont have none to throw...
I miss The Real Spit...when I tried to hit him in the face with one of those.
lol kindve chuckle worthy, but the punch of 'missing him while trying to spit on him' is kindve light... funny tho in a non nonchalant way


Overall this was a pretty solid read for 1 days notice...respect to both for that....

Spit - diecast was flames and very well executed, lotb for sure... Misuse was a funny np as well, some other solid bars throughout... A couple played joints & so so bars but thats to be expected in this sort of time frame... cool read

Ronin - I must say i like the peronal & aggressive approach you took in this battle...Thought the alienate personal was hard (even if it has been used on Alien, the flip is cool)...SOme solid personal shots throughout the setups as well...you were in this early, but i feel like your concepts & wording/execution faded as i got further through your verse...Again, to be expected when writing 20 in one day

Overall Spit was more consistent with generally more enjoyable & well executed lines and het gets my vote... props to both

[Aero]

Spit:

u shoulda known I was lying. u can't get with the pros, ur shit with the prose.
so now I'ma end the fairytale, expose this troll & crush the bridge of your nose.
no way
that PM was a plant, the vultures are circling & you'll get scarred from abusing
but I'm doing this #FTC, cuz ur more of a horticulture than Bar when he's losing
liked the wp but not the punch and I get it
ur a palindrome, with all the goddamn names you use for pouting & fronting
cuz I know nothing about the account I'm vs... & your vs account for nothing
you called him a palindrome? punch was creative I dig it
I'm goin' in. cuz taking the alias Useless is really a cardinal sin of duplicity
& I doubt you even know the origin of Ronin but we Marvel at your stupidity
just awful
whatever the fuck you call yourself, it's a fact you can't get with the best
ur next corny name should be gronin, based on reactions you get to your text
this might be the worst bar I've seen all season
you try so hard to be me. so I decided to ride with the heat popping
& when I pour this lead, you'll diecast aside like a cheap copy
love the wp and concept. didn't sting though
idk how you thought we could go 20 by tonight & the fight would still be fair
why the FUCK would you battle me LR style, when I'm still on a kill spree there??
name drop... meh
weak gun bars & wack punchlines.. I mean it's a pathetic caliber you're carrion
& you're a fucking text scavenger dog, you jackal your concepts from erryone
aight
you're doing it all wrong, acting like a bitch & improper with every try
& now misuse is what I'm calling you for the rest of your pathetic life
lol dig it
always throw a fit & quit. watch me put a bastard coward on a gurney.
if you plan on signing out this time, you better transfer power of attorney
okay



Useless:

sheesh u obv have no sense of humor, all ur jokes make no sense and get shit on, bitch...
U wanna be a joker, I'll keep ur funeral's ledger as a memento to spit on, spit.
I fully get it and Im not feeling
U got 2 losses from better writers, 2 of mine are DQs from ppl who won't make the top 5....
Only way u beating me is if the past repeats itself....n u get me disqualified.
the set up was almost a diss to yourself.. punch was bad
He never had success at NC. Tf was u doing getting ur ass kicked dude?...
Then they sent one of their own to rb and alienate thru ur roster faster than girls do that to u.
wp is there to be used and you butchered the punch
If resin hadn't no showed, u wouldnt be here. Ur music sound like a drowning cat...
This the one time in ya life a mic actually helped you move down the tracks.
I'm almost not in the mood at this point.. I mean this is ok but Im annoyed
Do u drink n write? U just wasting the time of the veterans n shit...
Go thru a rough draft........maybe the more we drink the better it'll get.
cool.. dig it
U ain't balling, facts. Back in class u was always picked after the clutz n the retard...
Gonna put that mug on a Posterize all see my nuts in ur face on my greeting cards.
if I fully tried to understand this bar I'm sure it'd usurp Spit's for the worst bar I've read
You'll never make it big, no matter how hard u stay grinding...
So while he pushing the trash...he should be pulling his music right behind him.
no
Hall of fame? What a shame, it makes the site look bad dude...
When u dont have a single accomp at NC, except alllll the ones bags gave u.
no
U dont blow no smoke, cost ur dad a lot to find out u were into men...
Only time he smoked diesel, was watching the wrestlers entrance.
no
What's the deal kid, when it comes to hands u dont have none to throw...
I miss The Real Spit...when I tried to hit him in the face with one of those.
lol nah man


I've got Spit here. Had more creativity and Useless missed a lot. If you guys aren't going to come with it at least do less lines.

[King]

Up.

[A. Diction]

@King spit got it

[Sting3r]

Ronins Verse


Sheesh u obv have no sense of humor, all ur jokes make no sense and get shit on, bitch...
U wanna be a joker, I'll keep ur funeral's ledger as a memento to spit on, spit.
i remember when the movie came out saw a lot of ledger flips, spit on spit was a cool concept
U got 2 losses from better writers, 2 of mine are DQs from ppl who won't make the top 5....
Only way u beating me is if the past repeats itself....n u get me disqualified.
not feeling the set up for obvious reasons, concept is played against you but it was a decent attempt at flipping the angle which is good
He never had success at NC. Tf was u doing getting ur ass kicked dude?...
Then they sent one of their own to rb and alienate thru ur roster faster than girls do that to u.
nice personal and wordplay flip. cool
If resin hadn't no showed, u wouldnt be here. Ur music sound like a drowning cat...
This the one time in ya life a mic actually helped you move down the tracks.
wording seems a bit off to me nice personal dig
Do u drink n write? U just wasting the time of the veterans n shit...
Go thru a rough draft........maybe the more we drink the better it'll get.
punch line was a sick concept, set up coulda used something idk what tho
U ain't balling, facts. Back in class u was always picked after the clutz n the retard...
Gonna put that mug on a Posterize all see my nuts in ur face on my greeting cards.
funny but lite
You'll never make it big, no matter how hard u stay grinding...
So while he pushing the trash...he should be pulling his music right behind him.
solid
Hall of fame? What a shame, it makes the site look bad dude...
When u dont have a single accomp at NC, except alllll the ones bags gave u.
nice personal
U dont blow no smoke, cost ur dad a lot to find out u were into men...
Only time he smoked diesel, was watching the wrestlers entrance.
kinda lite
What's the deal kid, when it comes to hands u dont have none to throw...
I miss The Real Spit...when I tried to hit him in the face with one of those.
would have liked to see more to go with that punch, decent line tho

solid verse from ronin, couple bars came off lite, a few creative concepts made this enjoyable. like the personals also

lol...

u shoulda known I was lying. u can't get with the pros, ur shit with the prose.
so now I'ma end the fairytale, expose this troll & crush the bridge of your nose.
solid opener
that PM was a plant, the vultures are circling & you'll get scarred from abusing
but I'm doing this #FTC, cuz ur more of a horticulture than Bar when he's losing
supa hot fire shunn
ur a palindrome, with all the goddamn names you use for pouting & fronting
cuz I know nothing about the account I'm vs... & your vs account for nothing
punch was ok, decent flip
I'm goin' in. cuz taking the alias Useless is really a cardinal sin of duplicity
& I doubt you even know the origin of Ronin but we Marvel at your stupidity
good punch, seen a lot of marvel wps in my time
whatever the fuck you call yourself, it's a fact you can't get with the best
ur next corny name should be gronin, based on reactions you get to your text
solid punch, funny
you try so hard to be me. so I decided to ride with the heat popping
& when I pour this lead, you'll diecast aside like a cheap copy
simple but good
idk how you thought we could go 20 by tonight & the fight would still be fair
why the FUCK would you battle me LR style, when I'm still on a kill spree there??
not familiar with the reference but seems like it would be a nice rebuttal line
weak gun bars & wack punchlines.. I mean it's a pathetic caliber you're carrion
& you're a fucking text scavenger dog, you jackal your concepts from erryone
kinda lite with out any exact link but the wordplay and concept over all was cool
you're doing it all wrong, acting like a bitch & improper with every try
& now misuse is what I'm calling you for the rest of your pathetic life
solid
always throw a fit & quit. watch me put a bastard coward on a gurney.
if you plan on signing out this time, you better transfer power of attorney
fire line, this coulda been a longer scheme fasho

spit - consistent, worked in some hard hitting lines with few misses. where u shined was the punchlines and where u could get better might be in doing longer schemes or brushing up the set ups... that's lite criticism tho this was a nice verse

..


i got spit winning with 1 or 2 harder hitting lines. for ronin the concepts were there but a couple misses made the difference in my voting. props to both battlers here

v/spit

[Blue Bayou]

Spit wins