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    Brainstorming

    Quick key style off the early

    I’m in debt, to my own well-being personal success
    God emcee, yet and still a soul wrapped in flesh
    Demons try to connect, transform my mind waves
    Use to be blind slaves, survived at least 9 plagues
    My thoughts deeper then caves, my words r heatwaves
    Life not a game with saves, Pull the pen on them grenades
    That’s the picture I see, Armageddon from the beginning
    Adam in eden sinning but I’m crazy not trusting women
    Future alterer today rearranger tomorrow forgetter
    Stand behind my moves type next move inter-pretter
    Heavy thinker slow move maker some say I’m brash
    Poker face chess player your next move might be your last
    I’m so selective, stay in my lane that’s so respective
    Not one to mess with, over mine the killing kind protective
    Not a soldier I’m a boss hopefully you heard this verse
    Blueprint creator niggas like you do my dirty work
    Sharp yes I’m RAZOR, murk you over a buck 50
    You might catch 300 shots who wanna multiply with me
    You probably ain’t catch that the jewels stay hidden
    Jamaican shooter with ganja breath drive-by to a riddem
    I’m distanced from fraud fake niggas with no vision
    With no back-bone no back teeth that’s no wisdom.....lol

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    Re: Brainstorming

    I liked it, the rhyme scheme was easy to follow and I don’t know how to quote but you had a good multi - as far as topic I could relate just differently like an alternative side or view point. I enjoyed reading this it wasn’t boring or dragged out. Hope
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    Re: Brainstorming

    Thank you for the feedback. I’m gonna read some of your stuff today. Hey, that would be dope If you did a new thread, pasted my verse and Dropped your alternative side, or view point. I see not really many people are dropping anything in this forum so if you ever want to collaborate let me know. We get it popping in here lol

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    Re: Brainstorming

    nice man i like the multiply line and heatwaves and i think it's a good point and theme to bring in god emcee and then how you don't trust women and then try to build in some more content with chess and similarities with games and poker. the structure is on point, so just push it and the words will lend themselves to the rhythm naturally, so yeah. good job. the one wack line was inter-pretter cuz i have no idea what pretter means yo, lol. you mean prettier? predator?

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