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    LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3) - OPEN FOR VOTES

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    14.

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    Jemster

    I wont be home til late but I want to show so need the ext

    Hope that's cool.. I'm good with 14

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    Yup. Tomorrow is fine. I’ll post then too.

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    castor & pollux are the gats & they're known to get holy at times
    so if i approach Gemini open up the Twins i'm not talkin a zodiac sign
    machete on me boyyy know you ain't a friend of me yet
    i'll end ya life with a couple hacks & no it's not identity theft
    it's nothing to end you, claim i dont invoke fear & i'm sayin you fraud
    even a disciple outta my ass is enough to have you praying to god
    says 'i'll cook for you' to bitches cuz there's no money for the date he's planning
    his game gets embarrassing when he's gotta come outta pocket that's Peyton Manning
    maybe i shouldn’t mock his mack tactics as i nuke his melon..
    one girl has a Crush on em.. holding a cold can to his head should reduce the swellin
    i'm ruthless mayne, hard too contain that's why i cruise w/ flames
    you're just another guy i've gone straight thru. for ur sake i hope bullets do the same
    yeahhhhh i party a lot, i get drunk & like to feel the rhythm..
    every picture tells a story. & i got enuff nudes of your girl to get a deal w/ Grisham
    Last edited by Blue Bayou; May 3rd, 2019 at 11:12 PM

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    I’m the two seater stealer, wait for him to park the bitch
    Then look for a coup, and he’ll see me take his shit
    Maple back that bromance, allegedly over pucks but I wonder
    If Boycotting something gay, that’s why only you n Barc fuck w each other
    It’s gonna be a long night... my chick cold and anger struck
    So if blue eye my bitch, it’s only before she puts a dagger in his gut
    You dumb punk put up dough for cunts... that don’t agree to sex
    She just bumbles from you to get fucked on POF!
    I come through hell or high water, and you blessed for the real fail
    & if you don’t feel the slight, it’s cuz Dom told you the devils in the details
    You overdoing the mocking - dropping your quality every time
    Sinuosities, but yet your drops been stuffed with those kinda lines
    Sea JEM evolving, these big guns hurting more than a few feelings
    Only time I worship blue, I left more bodies dead than New Zealand

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    Quote Originally Posted by Blue Bayou View Post
    castor & pollux are the gats & they're known to get holy at times
    so if i approach Gemini open up the Twins i'm not talkin a zodiac sign
    ok this is garbage i don't get it, jammin eye?? gemin I? like shit wordplay... syke gem in I, castor and pollux are the names of the 2 gemini fuckers.. well worded
    machete on me boyyy know you ain't a friend of me yet
    i'll end ya life with a couple hacks & no it's not identity theft
    kinda simple, ok line
    it's nothing to end you, claim i dont invoke fear & i'm sayin you fraud
    even a disciple outta my ass is enough to have you praying to god
    cool little wordplay, the link is there but the concept isn't very hard hitting but still a good line
    says 'i'll cook for you' to bitches cuz there's no money for the date he's planning
    his game gets embarrassing when he's gotta come outta pocket that's Peyton Manning
    props don't think ive seen this play, could be my ignorance of whats played out but this seems dope
    maybe i shouldn’t mock his mack tactics as i nuke his melon..
    one girl has a Crush on em.. holding a cold can to his head should reduce the swellin
    to simple for a can line i guess, clever, nuke his melon is funny
    i'm ruthless mayne, hard too contain that's why i cruise w/ flames
    you're just another guy i've gone straight thru. for ur sake i hope bullets do the same
    solid
    yeahhhhh i party a lot, i get drunk & like to feel the rhythm..
    every picture tells a story. & i got enuff nudes of your girl to get a deal w/ Grisham
    i'm not trying to be a tough judge here just feels like filler maybe for lack of personals on jem, he doesnt give u a lot to work with at least from what i've seen. not really your fault but other than a bunch of nameflips its hard to come up with material. sorry for long expo
    Quote Originally Posted by JEM. View Post
    I’m the two seater stealer, wait for him to park the bitch
    Then look for a coup, and he’ll see me take his shit
    ok, gta swag
    Maple back that bromance, allegedly over pucks but I wonder
    If Boycotting something gay, that’s why only you n Barc fuck w each other
    kinda clever, lil personal dig ok
    It’s gonna be a long night... my chick cold and anger struck
    So if blue eye my bitch, it’s only before she puts a dagger in his gut
    nice 1, love the reference, wording may be lacking something but i like the concept cool
    You dumb punk put up dough for cunts... that don’t agree to sex
    She just bumbles from you to get fucked on POF!
    simple lite
    I come through hell or high water, and you blessed for the real fail
    & if you don’t feel the slight, it’s cuz Dom told you the devils in the details
    personal i get it nice
    You overdoing the mocking - dropping your quality every time
    Sinuosities, but yet your drops been stuffed with those kinda lines
    i get the punch and looked up the word but idk if i'm missing a wordplay or something here
    Sea JEM evolving, these big guns hurting more than a few feelings
    Only time I worship blue, I left more bodies dead than New Zealand
    decent punch here

    over all; this was a good solid battle. jem used a couple personal tie ins, but maybe missed a good opportunity with some of the netcee drama that went on. could have capitalized off that but still a few good punches. blue was creative and put up a consistent verse with only 1 or 2 lack luster bars. the concepts were there but i'd like to see u do more with some of the better punches. bring some fluidity to the verse.. idk just have to critique something or whats the point. cool battle on a short week with few battles up to read. enjoyed this 1. if the vote is a lil off it's cause im fucking frizzled cuhhhhh


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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    blue bayou -

    castor & pollux are the gats & they're known to get holy at times
    so if i approach Gemini open up the Twins i'm not talkin a zodiac sign

    good work here..

    machete on me boyyy know you ain't a friend of me yet
    i'll end ya life with a couple hacks & no it's not identity theft

    good work..

    it's nothing to end you, claim i dont invoke fear & i'm sayin you fraud
    even a disciple outta my ass is enough to have you praying to god

    lmao..niice..


    says 'i'll cook for you' to bitches cuz there's no money for the date he's planning
    his game gets embarrassing when he's gotta come outta pocket that's Peyton Manning

    this was okay..

    maybe i shouldn’t mock his mack tactics as i nuke his melon..
    one girl has a Crush on em.. holding a cold can to his head should reduce the swellin

    this was cool..

    i'm ruthless mayne, hard too contain that's why i cruise w/ flames
    you're just another guy i've gone straight thru. for ur sake i hope bullets do the same

    this was cool..

    yeahhhhh i party a lot, i get drunk & like to feel the rhythm..
    every picture tells a story. & i got enuff nudes of your girl to get a deal w/ Grisham

    this was cool..

    JEM -

    I’m the two seater stealer, wait for him to park the bitch
    Then look for a coup, and he’ll see me take his shit

    this was okay..


    Maple back that bromance, allegedly over pucks but I wonder
    If Boycotting something gay, that’s why only you n Barc fuck w each other

    this was cool..

    It’s gonna be a long night... my chick cold and anger struck
    So if blue eye my bitch, it’s only before she puts a dagger in his gut

    this was niice..

    You dumb punk put up dough for cunts... that don’t agree to sex
    She just bumbles from you to get fucked on POF!

    this was okay..

    I come through hell or high water, and you blessed for the real fail
    & if you don’t feel the slight, it’s cuz Dom told you the devils in the details

    this was okay..

    You overdoing the mocking - dropping your quality every time
    Sinuosities, but yet your drops been stuffed with those kinda lines

    this was okay..

    Sea JEM evolving, these big guns hurting more than a few feelings
    Only time I worship blue, I left more bodies dead than New Zealand

    this was okay..

    overall -

    cool battle but blue has this..

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    blue bayou -

    castor & pollux are the gats & they're known to get holy at times
    so if i approach Gemini open up the Twins i'm not talkin a zodiac sign

    good work here..

    machete on me boyyy know you ain't a friend of me yet
    i'll end ya life with a couple hacks & no it's not identity theft

    good work..

    it's nothing to end you, claim i dont invoke fear & i'm sayin you fraud
    even a disciple outta my ass is enough to have you praying to god

    lmao..niice..


    says 'i'll cook for you' to bitches cuz there's no money for the date he's planning
    his game gets embarrassing when he's gotta come outta pocket that's Peyton Manning

    this was okay..

    maybe i shouldn’t mock his mack tactics as i nuke his melon..
    one girl has a Crush on em.. holding a cold can to his head should reduce the swellin

    this was cool..

    i'm ruthless mayne, hard too contain that's why i cruise w/ flames
    you're just another guy i've gone straight thru. for ur sake i hope bullets do the same

    this was cool..

    yeahhhhh i party a lot, i get drunk & like to feel the rhythm..
    every picture tells a story. & i got enuff nudes of your girl to get a deal w/ Grisham

    this was cool..

    JEM -

    I’m the two seater stealer, wait for him to park the bitch
    Then look for a coup, and he’ll see me take his shit

    this was okay..


    Maple back that bromance, allegedly over pucks but I wonder
    If Boycotting something gay, that’s why only you n Barc fuck w each other

    this was cool..

    It’s gonna be a long night... my chick cold and anger struck
    So if blue eye my bitch, it’s only before she puts a dagger in his gut

    this was niice..

    You dumb punk put up dough for cunts... that don’t agree to sex
    She just bumbles from you to get fucked on POF!

    this was okay..

    I come through hell or high water, and you blessed for the real fail
    & if you don’t feel the slight, it’s cuz Dom told you the devils in the details

    this was okay..

    You overdoing the mocking - dropping your quality every time
    Sinuosities, but yet your drops been stuffed with those kinda lines

    this was okay..

    Sea JEM evolving, these big guns hurting more than a few feelings
    Only time I worship blue, I left more bodies dead than New Zealand

    this was okay..

    overall -

    cool battle but blue has this..

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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Quote Originally Posted by JEM. View Post
    I’m the two seater stealer, wait for him to park the bitch
    Then look for a coup, and he’ll see me take his shit

    Coup de' tat i like this one.

    Maple back that bromance, allegedly over pucks but I wonder
    If Boycotting something gay, that’s why only you n Barc fuck w each other

    Ok

    It’s gonna be a long night... my chick cold and anger struck
    So if blue eye my bitch, it’s only before she puts a dagger in his gut

    GOT thrones ref, this could've been worded better.

    You dumb punk put up dough for cunts... that don’t agree to sex
    She just bumbles from you to get fucked on POF!

    Nah

    I come through hell or high water, and you blessed for the real fail
    & if you don’t feel the slight, it’s cuz Dom told you the devils in the details

    Cool, good shot sir.

    You overdoing the mocking - dropping your quality every time
    Sinuosities, but yet your drops been stuffed with those kinda lines

    Hmm, this is awkward dont really like this one. i agree with reef, somehting is missing to make this work.

    Sea JEM evolving, these big guns hurting more than a few feelings
    Only time I worship blue, I left more bodies dead than New Zealand
    Good, not bad jem not bad at all. You kick this filthy Canadian while he is down.

    Quote Originally Posted by Blue Bayou View Post
    castor & pollux are the gats & they're known to get holy at times
    so if i approach Gemini open up the Twins i'm not talkin a zodiac sign

    Nice, good opener.

    machete on me boyyy know you ain't a friend of me yet
    i'll end ya life with a couple hacks & no it's not identity theft

    OK, jab here.

    it's nothing to end you, claim i dont invoke fear & i'm sayin you fraud
    even a disciple outta my ass is enough to have you praying to god

    diss-i-pull this was cool,

    says 'i'll cook for you' to bitches cuz there's no money for the date he's planning
    his game gets embarrassing when he's gotta come outta pocket that's Peyton Manning

    Nice

    maybe i shouldn’t mock his mack tactics as i nuke his melon..
    one girl has a Crush on em.. holding a cold can to his head should reduce the swellin

    Cool, now we need a stick line bud. Can't just have Can ones now.

    i'm ruthless mayne, hard too contain that's why i cruise w/ flames
    you're just another guy i've gone straight thru. for ur sake i hope bullets do the same

    Eh

    yeahhhhh i party a lot, i get drunk & like to feel the rhythm..
    every picture tells a story. & i got enuff nudes of your girl to get a deal w/ Grisham
    lol ok


    Well Jem is one of my favorite up an comers to read. He has a very cool way of coming off cocky without being self brag. I think Blue got him here, just better worded punches. Jem is getting there and i enjoy his writing alot. I hope Jem does a Swag n flow at some point. But for now Blue got this one harder lands, cleaner execution.

    v/ blue
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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3)

    Quote Originally Posted by Blue Bayou View Post
    castor & pollux are the gats & they're known to get holy at times
    so if i approach Gemini open up the Twins i'm not talkin a zodiac sign
    let's goooo. this was hard
    machete on me boyyy know you ain't a friend of me yet
    i'll end ya life with a couple hacks & no it's not identity theft
    similar style punch to your opener but this is decent tho
    it's nothing to end you, claim i dont invoke fear & i'm sayin you fraud
    even a disciple outta my ass is enough to have you praying to god
    dope, comedy
    says 'i'll cook for you' to bitches cuz there's no money for the date he's planning
    his game gets embarrassing when he's gotta come outta pocket that's Peyton Manning
    yoga flame
    maybe i shouldn’t mock his mack tactics as i nuke his melon..
    one girl has a Crush on em.. holding a cold can to his head should reduce the swellin
    this is corny as fuck and you know it lol got a chuckle outta me tho.. followed by a cringe
    i'm ruthless mayne, hard too contain that's why i cruise w/ flames
    you're just another guy i've gone straight thru. for ur sake i hope bullets do the same
    felt filler-ish and simple, not feeling
    yeahhhhh i party a lot, i get drunk & like to feel the rhythm..
    every picture tells a story. & i got enuff nudes of your girl to get a deal w/ Grisham
    below average for you & also the rest of this verse

    vs.


    Quote Originally Posted by JEM
    I’m the two seater stealer, wait for him to park the bitch
    Then look for a coup, and he’ll see me take his shit
    I fucks wit it, prolly coulda done more with the concept execution-wise but it's a solid jab/open
    Maple back that bromance, allegedly over pucks but I wonder
    If Boycotting something gay, that’s why only you n Barc fuck w each other
    boycotting like a cot/bed? I don't see how else you could be trying to use the wp but it's a reach to me because I've never seen/hear anyone use that word.
    It’s gonna be a long night... my chick cold and anger struck
    So if blue eye my bitch, it’s only before she puts a dagger in his gut
    I'm missing the tie-in between blue eyes and putting a dagger in someone's stomach. Oh I Clout say it's GOT reference in his breakdown. I don't watch the show so this doesn't really do anything for me. I'll assume it's a light jab, which is how it reads.
    You dumb punk put up dough for cunts... that don’t agree to sex
    She just bumbles from you to get fucked on POF!
    pretty funny although "bumbles from you" is a reach to me because I don't think anyone would ever actually say that by itself
    I come through hell or high water, and you blessed for the real fail
    & if you don’t feel the slight, it’s cuz Dom told you the devils in the details
    decent personal jab but doesn't hit hard
    You overdoing the mocking - dropping your quality every time
    Sinuosities, but yet your drops been stuffed with those kinda lines
    creative attempt, not hard hitting tho. saying "but yet" hurt the potential impact imo.
    Sea JEM evolving, these big guns hurting more than a few feelings
    Only time I worship blue, I left more bodies dead than New Zealand
    cool current event closer

    JEM has most def elevated as a battle verse writer, no real haymakers but a lot of creative concepts. Just gotta polish up the wording to make them hit more effectively. Solid/respectable showing here. Blue dropped a couple of bangers and did enough to win here. His wording and execution is just too advanced/crisp and it makes him tough to beat. Good shit from both tho. Keep at it, JEM. Concepts are there.


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    Re: LLL Week 8: Blue Bayou (5-1) vs JEM (4-3) - OPEN FOR VOTES

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