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Thread: Raw Mentality

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    Raw Mentality

    I been, slept on & crept on my hearts Teflon I'm upper echelon
    Even when I lack my best form thru a fresh storm, Razor just press on
    Thru hard-times he perform see that's how success born
    Satan rushed, I juke'd right then stiff arm'd his left horn
    When approached with bull-shit I get ta Matodoring
    I don't analyze the torment, to me the data is foreign
    When shit fishy, I spots every fraud they try to lure-in
    Sitting on horses in my ride w/ a stick, Ralph Lauren
    Razor make the wrong choice they preparing a cell for em
    So I think long-term guess I'm getting older maturing
    Putting the hammer back & plus pushing the drawer in
    Pick a hole in your cup of wrath when it starts pouring
    You can't stop it, but you can prevent letting more in
    I vacation thru trials, because in it I'm only touring
    No matter were my body is my mind stay's soaring

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    Re: Raw Mentality

    Nice little piece here. Some parts read iffy due to the wording and punctuation but overall, I felt it.
    That left hour line was vicious. Third line read was a bit awkward..

    I fuck with the data line too.


    7/10

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    Re: Raw Mentality

    thanks for the feedback @slecht

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    Re: Raw Mentality

    I liked it I could relate a lot. It makes me want to have another outburst and start yelling at the people who do know again but what ever I'll sit here and shut up and just wait for everyone to catch up. (I'll put it on my own feed)
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