Week 1: Echelon vs A Disciple Echelon Wins

[King]

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LLL Season 24
Regular Season Rules

10 line minimum
16 line maximum (unless agreed upon by both battlers)

No Bullshit Allowed

MUST CHECK IN BY WEDNESDAY!!

VERSES DUE FRIDAY 11:59 PST

24 hour EXT must be granted by opponent

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[A Disciple]

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[Echelon]

I will revel..heavy metal..gepetto..kill this fellow..
I am mellow..I'm killing disciple..like the devil..
I discern what's left..burning meth..learning breaths
I'm the urn of death..if a boy gave you a ring of fire..they want you to burn to death..
I'm rare in art..I have a pair of darts for your fairy heart..
I carry art..I'm a fortune teller..I'll deck you in the face in a duel..I have the heart of the tarot cards..
I'm a lavish with bars..animal bars..animal bars.
Animal bars..you're a little fat..if this pig is the leader..it's animal farm
This is a light round..I'm higher than sky clouds
I'm Mount Sinai's eye now..you're out of your league..just sign out..

[A Disciple]

It’s been years since I checked in, now I’m back to battling
Picked back up my pen, reminiscing over now and then
I can’t say the walk was all bad
But I was thinking of the things I never had
Thinking of the things just getting mad
And in the meanwhile I just wanted to say hi, I made it, just still wondering why
Admiring from a far even though you always was my star
I still ain’t even learned yet what’s a barr... but still I spar
And maybe if I took the time I would’ve learned less
Looking back to the days of my first test
Who knew 7 years later Id lose my vest
But still one day maybe I’ll be the best
Maybe one day there will be some way to separate myself from the rest

CLA919 checking back in
Let’s try this again...

[A Disciple]

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[Networth]

So yea, this battle was a bit lack luster but I can see the effort from both sides and it's always good to have people show up and atleast try to give the audience a good show..


I will revel..heavy metal..gepetto..kill this fellow..
I am mellow..I'm killing disciple..like the devil..
^ok minus the setup
I discern what's left..burning meth..learning breaths
I'm the urn of death..if a boy gave you a ring of fire..they want you to burn to death..
^pretty cool minus the setup
I'm rare in art..I have a pair of darts for your fairy heart..
I carry art..I'm a fortune teller..I'll deck you in the face in a duel..I have the heart of the tarot cards..
^meh, the repetion of heart took away sting and it was overworded
I'm a lavish with bars..animal bars..animal bars.
Animal bars..you're a little fat..if this pig is the leader..it's animal farm
^Hellll Noo bro.. u really did that three times<just to use animal again in the close?<Big Miss here, altho a bit funny tbh
This is a light round..I'm higher than sky clouds
I'm Mount Sinai's eye now..you're out of your league..just sign out..
^cool rhyme shceme, could've hit harder in setup and delivery tho

Versus


It’s been years since I checked in, now I’m back to battling
Picked back up my pen, reminiscing over now and then
^Odd rhyme scheme here and no shot towards your opponent
I can’t say the walk was all bad
But I was thinking of the things I never had
Thinking of the things just getting mad
And in the meanwhile I just wanted to say hi, I made it, just still wondering why
^staggered rhyme on the delivery and it's becoming more or less poetic at this point
Admiring from a far even though you always was my star
I still ain’t even learned yet what’s a barr... but still I spar
^cool rhyme but it's talkin thru your Opp, and not in a good way
And maybe if I took the time I would’ve learned less
Looking back to the days of my first test
^ok, but as u can tell, this is not directed at any one but self, and thats not who you're battling
Who knew 7 years later Id lose my vest
But still one day maybe I’ll be the best
Maybe one day there will be some way to separate myself from the rest
^^nah.. maybe these are facts but nah, it doesn't hit well for a battle




However it came down to the fact that we had what was ultimately an attempted battle verse, against what appeared to be more of a topical delivery. There wasn't a single line of text that led to a diss of your opponent @A Disciple and for that main reason..

V/ @Echelon

Way to show up tho you two, keep it up and keep working towards elevation with better bars.

[Unfukwitable]

I discern what's left..burning meth..learning breaths
I'm the urn of death..if a boy gave you a ring of fire..they want you to burn to death..

vs

Nothing

seemed like a choppy verse against a poet style drop. v/Echelon

[JEM.]

v/Echelon.


This was a bit of a rough read. I really don't have anything to quote, simply said, one verse had battle intentions vs one that was not constituted for this type of format.

[Joe Boston]

Echelon

m the urn of death..if a boy gave you a ring of fire..they want you to burn to death..
I'm rare in art..I have a pair of darts for your fairy heart..
I carry art..I'm a fortune teller..I'll deck you in the face in a duel..I have the heart of the tarot cards..

I can tell how your verse was presented it has more of an audio battle presence but overall I liked these two bars you had the flips were pretty creative

Disciple

Not sure what you were going for here no real punches or you were just trolling

V/Echelon

[King]

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[YG]

Echelon for having more of an attempt at a battle verse

[King]

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