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LLL Season 24
Regular Season Rules
10 lines
(unless agreed upon by both battlers)
No Bullshit Allowed
MUST CHECK IN BY WEDNESDAY!!
VERSES DUE FRIDAY 11:59 PST
24 hour EXT must be granted by opponent
BATTLES CLOSE SUNDAY
The Last Level
Check. Going 10
winning for u's a dead claim, no one will avenge u cause what u pen's lame
when i knock Box Office Feat.. pleading for a quick death will be his only End Game
I'm a nice guy who often tells jokes, but faggots make me snap when provoked
I'll have the entire league in stitches, but you're the only one getting stabbed in the throat
I help the ones I respect, go above n beyond when I brawl w/ the best
if people see you go out on a limb... they just hope you fall to your death
I'ma force to be reckoned w/, u should abort this mission since it's known i'll win
comin at u with the strength of roman charges.. u don't even have the strength to phone it in
you lost to joe boston, if that was me I'd say get it over quick n make the grave shallow
But I don't lose n if I kick the bucket anytime soon it'll end with your body under the gallows
Check, just got back in town. Will write something tomorrow.
You dumb, gay, and upset us! Your flow about as Fresh as Subway lettuce..
These bars are amazing and bizarre, got you feeling like a retard gazing at the stars.
Don't talk guns punk - You wouldn’t open fire; this bitch couldn't open a mason jar!
You a fuckin' computer nerd on some nerd shit & that's the word, dig?
Frontin' Fresh, but spoiled rottin' like a bitch ass suburb kid!
I take a fresh shit on Fresh, Jute a psycho on a blood moon.
You mild off the head like a micro-dose of mushrooms.
I can't dig your shit - Dug E. you a clone! Box drop like an Amazon drone.
This Canadian bitch kid should go home, switch and get a real job.
Cause' lyrically you ain't touching Box like a skittish bomb squad.
I thought end game was cool.. Stitches wasnt decent.. Limb i wasnt feeling..roman was cool.. Thought ur last bar was a little to wordy..overall pretty decent verse ..you came with dexent punches thru out n your misses werent bad misses.. They were still slightly ok... Jutes no hate buddy but your 'all over the place' set ups take away from any punch.. Id say ur two best bars were ur last two and they were kind of self hype..i thought this easily goes to fresh for stronger/more consistent hits thru out.. Vote FRESH
winning for u's a dead claim, no one will avenge u cause what u pen's lame
when i knock Box Office Feat.. pleading for a quick death will be his only End Game
This was cool.
I'm a nice guy who often tells jokes, but faggots make me snap when provoked
I'll have the entire league in stitches, but you're the only one getting stabbed in the throat
Nice.
I help the ones I respect, go above n beyond when I brawl w/ the best
if people see you go out on a limb... they just hope you fall to your death
Good.
I'ma force to be reckoned w/, u should abort this mission since it's known i'll win
comin at u with the strength of roman charges.. u don't even have the strength to phone it in
Cool.
you lost to joe boston, if that was me I'd say get it over quick n make the grave shallow
But I don't lose n if I kick the bucket anytime soon it'll end with your body under the gallows
Cool.
You dumb, gay, and upset us! Your flow about as Fresh as Subway lettuce..
These bars are amazing and bizarre, got you feeling like a retard gazing at the stars.
This was good.
Not too shabby.
Don't talk guns punk - You wouldn’t open fire; this bitch couldn't open a mason jar!
You a fuckin' computer nerd on some nerd shit & that's the word, dig?
Cool.
Frontin' Fresh, but spoiled rottin' like a bitch ass suburb kid!
I take a fresh shit on Fresh, Jute a psycho on a blood moon.
Cool.
You mild off the head like a micro-dose of mushrooms.
I can't dig your shit - Dug E. you a clone! Box drop like an Amazon drone.
Nice.
This Canadian bitch kid should go home, switch and get a real job.
Cause' lyrically you ain't touching Box like a skittish bomb squad.
This was okay.
Overall - Cool battle here, I enjoyed both verses. However, Fresh was really well done.
V/ Fresh
winning for u's a dead claim, no one will avenge u cause what u pen's lame
when i knock Box Office Feat.. pleading for a quick death will be his only End Game
I'm a nice guy who often tells jokes, but faggots make me snap when provoked
I'll have the entire league in stitches, but you're the only one getting stabbed in the throat
I help the ones I respect, go above n beyond when I brawl w/ the best
if people see you go out on a limb... they just hope you fall to your death
Vs
This Canadian bitch kid should go home, switch and get a real job.
Cause' lyrically you ain't touching Box like a skittish bomb squad.
Everything else in this one can go... Cool verse mostly fresh but you fell off hard at the end. Jute.... This is not the place for you bro..youre gonna pad a lot
of records with drops like that sorry i don't have anything constructive to say.. But props on yall showin up.. Looks like this will be the only battle voted on out
of all that were set so that's saying something i guess. V/Fresh without a question
^scratch the only vote comment..thought it was already Friday*
Last edited by Networth; October 25th, 2019 at 03:29 PM Reason: ^scratch the "only battle voted on" comment..thought it was already Friday*
winning for u's a dead claim, no one will avenge u cause what u pen's lame
when i knock Box Office Feat.. pleading for a quick death will be his only End Game
...fire...
I'ma force to be reckoned w/, u should abort this mission since it's known i'll win
comin at u with the strength of roman charges.. u don't even have the strength to phone it in
you lost to joe boston, if that was me I'd say get it over quick n make the grave shallow
But I don't lose n if I kick the bucket anytime soon it'll end with your body under the gallows
Vs
You dumb, gay, and upset us! Your flow about as Fresh as Subway lettuce..
These bars are amazing and bizarre, got you feeling like a retard gazing at the stars.
This Canadian bitch kid should go home, switch and get a real job.
Cause' lyrically you ain't touching Box like a skittish bomb squad.
These are the only bars that had punch lines. Stick to this formula. The rest was garb. And try to stay away from self nameplays they're usually frowned upon
V. Odor eater
Last edited by A. Diction; October 25th, 2019 at 07:42 AM
Now I am become death; destroyer of worlds.
Both had some forced shit, but the reality is FRESH threw more punches. Props for the "Box office feat" line. That was nice. I'm not going to say this ain't for Juke, keep puttin' in work you'll get better. Pay attention to what the voters are saying about your opponents if you're losing. Don't take that shit personal just improve.
A lot of your lines just felt way too forced JUKE, for example:
These bars are amazing and bizarre, got you feeling like a retard gazing at the stars.
I would've found a better way to say that, but it's not that bad, BUT:
Don't talk guns punk - You wouldn’t open fire; this bitch couldn't open a mason jar!
^^ To pair it with this was a hella stretch. You can't just toss in "open a mason jar" because you think it fits with "gazing at the stars".. which it really doesn't. Don't just look to rhyme the last word in each line and think you got it. It's more to it than that. Like where's the punch in that line?
You should've said something like:
"Bench this nigga Im pressin his every bar, kid so weak he couldn't open a mason jar"
Not the best, but I'm trying to make a point:
Bench pressin + weak, speaks to him not being able to open a mason jar
Anyway keep it up, you'll get better. VOTE - FRESH
Box office was cool
Liked league in stitches
Kinda liked phone it in, could have been worded better
VS
Suburb kid
Closer was ok
V/Fresh, thought he was more consistent throughout
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