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    LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted MIR WINS

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted

    Here you're the gatekeeper. a doormat, not EVEN the main feature..
    I'll lay hands on this fraud miracle til he walk different, u'd think i was a faith healer
    Mirs style so tailored? but those stretched schemes doin us NO favors..
    Readin alll them Longplays give our eyes a Twitch more than fans of Pro Gamers
    Nerd prob got a dragon tattoo. & askin for me in the league was savage
    Cuz he Noomi as a Rapace.. & NOW is 'playin w/ fire' like the Swedish actress
    Pull up & have his mugshot. battle was a wrap from the jump dog..
    Soon as i CVS...got a clip long as them receipts, so i'm getting a few bucks off
    Vehicular manslaughter when I drive my whip straight in this punk..
    I have to be Frankincense Myrhh wanna act hard....he'll end up scraped off the trunk

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted

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    Your ugly and bummy. It's a fucking fact your that gross
    As for brains, ur showing less signs then being prepared against the Astros
    + your a loser w/ the ladies.. no chick would ever invite you to her spot
    If girls think execute dude, s'cuz they want him dropped to his knees and SHOT
    When i met wifey shit changed. Our relationship became a success
    When you meet a girl shit changes, starting w/ her phone number & address
    My goons will stomp ex out.. making sure he's down & bruised
    And as soon as dude heelys getting rolled on again like outdated skating shoes
    You got nothing going for you... Everything you've done is a disgrace
    If he looks like a million bucks s'cuz my shotgun unloaded to many times in his face

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted

    Here you're the gatekeeper. a doormat, not EVEN the main feature..
    I'll lay hands on this fraud miracle til he walk different, u'd think i was a faith healer
    Decent opener
    Mirs style so tailored? but those stretched schemes doin us NO favors..
    Readin alll them Longplays give our eyes a Twitch more than fans of Pro Gamers
    Had to look up some of this but cool
    Nerd prob got a dragon tattoo. & askin for me in the league was savage
    Cuz he Noomi as a Rapace.. & NOW is 'playin w/ fire' like the Swedish actress
    See what you were going for but this is a reach. I looked up how to pronounce her name and it aint work, unless you were going for "rap ass", which would be weird
    Pull up & have his mugshot. battle was a wrap from the jump dog..
    Soon as i CVS...got a clip long as them receipts, so i'm getting a few bucks off
    Maybe I'm missing a CVS wordplay, but i dont think so. I'm not the biggest fan of gun bars.
    Vehicular manslaughter when I drive my whip straight in this punk..
    I have to be Frankincense Myrhh wanna act hard....he'll end up scraped off the trunk
    Felt like this was a situation using a nameplay for the sake of using a nameplay. It didn't really tie in to the rest of the bar so this is avg

    I liked the first two, and the last 3 were ok conceptually, but meh in their execution. Your wording is decent and the verse flowed well for the most part. I'd give it a 6.5/10


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    Your ugly and bummy. It's a fucking fact your that gross
    As for brains, ur showing less signs then being prepared against the Astros
    Aight. A better setup line would've made this fire
    + your a loser w/ the ladies.. no chick would ever invite you to her spot
    If girls think execute dude, s'cuz they want him dropped to his knees and SHOT
    Yuh. Nice
    When i met wifey shit changed. Our relationship became a success
    When you meet a girl shit changes, starting w/ her phone number & address
    Okkkk
    My goons will stomp ex out.. making sure he's down & bruised
    And as soon as dude heelys getting rolled on again like outdated skating shoes
    Aight
    You got nothing going for you... Everything you've done is a disgrace
    If he looks like a million bucks s'cuz my shotgun unloaded to many times in his face
    What a coincedence, another gun bar using bucks. Meh closer.


    Actually a good verse minus the closer, not a ton to critique. Made me chuckle a few times. 8/10. First three bars were nice. If you could tighten up your setup lines, and maybe improve your rhyme schemes a bit this would've been higher.

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted VOTE NOW

    I like this battle.

    Exalted
    I like your opening two lines. Nice name flip. The twitch line was hard. The noomi line threw me off cause I had to look it up as well and it fell short of landing because of that pronunciation. I respect the attempt. The CVS line was cool, not as strong as the opening 4 but solid. The final two bars to end your verse were okay. The way you opened didn’t match the way you closed. Finish strong my boy!

    Miracle
    I dig the opener. Nice to put in a current sports reference and make it work. The next two were strong, nice name flip for sure. The next two lines made me laugh good stuff. I like the heelys reference, don’t see that everyday (here or in life anymore lol). I like the ending, hard to make original gun bars but it was a good one.

    Miracle took this one. Stronger punches. Ex had a nicer flow overall but If your last two bars were slightly this might be a different outcome. It was a close call. This my fav battle of the week.

    Vote-Miracle. 8.5 to 8 on my scale.

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted VOTE NOW

    Here you're the gatekeeper. a doormat, not EVEN the main feature..
    I'll lay hands on this fraud miracle til he walk different, u'd think i was a faith healer
    ok
    Mirs style so tailored? but those stretched schemes doin us NO favors..
    Readin alll them Longplays give our eyes a Twitch more than fans of Pro Gamers
    this would be better if miracle actually had long winded bars. this is aight though
    Nerd prob got a dragon tattoo. & askin for me in the league was savage
    Cuz he Noomi as a Rapace.. & NOW is 'playin w/ fire' like the Swedish actress
    cool
    Pull up & have his mugshot. battle was a wrap from the jump dog..
    Soon as i CVS...got a clip long as them receipts, so i'm getting a few bucks off
    see VS? something not right here
    Vehicular manslaughter when I drive my whip straight in this punk..
    I have to be Frankincense Myrhh wanna act hard....he'll end up scraped off the trunk
    should have done something different with this. flat as is

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    Your ugly and bummy. It's a fucking fact your that gross
    As for brains, ur showing less signs then being prepared against the Astros
    not a fan
    + your a loser w/ the ladies.. no chick would ever invite you to her spot
    If girls think execute dude, s'cuz they want him dropped to his knees and SHOT
    diggin it
    When i met wifey shit changed. Our relationship became a success
    When you meet a girl shit changes, starting w/ her phone number & address
    lol cool
    My goons will stomp ex out.. making sure he's down & bruised
    And as soon as dude heelys getting rolled on again like outdated skating shoes
    nah
    You got nothing going for you... Everything you've done is a disgrace
    If he looks like a million bucks s'cuz my shotgun unloaded to many times in his face
    its ok i guess

    closish but i have mir taking it with the stronger hits.

    v/ mir

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted VOTE NOW

    3-0 mir

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    Re: LLL WEEK 18: Miracle vs Exalted VOTE NOW

    thought Exalted was more creative & at the same time more forced. both verses were solid.

    stand out lines were;
    fraud miracle from Exalted
    Execute & shit changes from Miracle


    V/Miracle

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