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    I am not who you think I am

    I am not who you think I am
    I am not a picture or a pentagram
    I am unexpected expectations concealed revelations
    I am chiseled under this fat
    Wisdom behind the laughter
    My excellence only goes to the median
    Only to hide my true weapons when I need to display disobedience
    My ingredients don't have origins
    My fortitude is underground
    I'm so underground that my inner soul is under bounds
    Confined to a bottomless pit for protection
    This world cannot fathom the modules I have computating my existence
    Rewriting DNA so I can be untraceable
    The face you see hides the faceless caper
    Remember remember the 20th of November
    I cause vivisections into inquiries
    Only a few can get near me and clearly I invented social distancing
    My grin is menacing
    My talent hides the dismay
    I write this because I think that yall ok
    I only write this because I think that yall OK
    Everything that you praise me for i am not
    Everything that I am not you praise me for
    I will die knowing that this world knows not about the true me…
    You can't handle the truth...


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    Re: I am not who you think I am

    Quite a honest poem and as someone that considered myself generally misunderstood it resonated with me a bit. Think it started well, dropped off in the middle a little then ended strong

    Loved these lines
    I'm so underground that my inner soul is under bounds
    Everything that you praise me for i am not
    Everything that I am not you praise me for

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    Re: I am not who you think I am

    Intriguing. It left me asking "OK, so *what* are you?" The piece opens as an attempt to explain who you are and glories in the mystery of the impossibility of finding that answer. Personally it read a bit recklessly--sheer self-praise, without a destination. Perhaps because I'm looking for a sort of resolution when a poem begins as your did. But hey, it is YOUR poem, not the poem I would have wanted you to write! Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.

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