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Thread: Close Your Eyes

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    Close Your Eyes

    Take a second to close your eyes, and relax your mind,
    imagine a beach with clear skies, the waves from blue to white.
    A coconut drink in your hands, the sand between your toes- dry,
    pretend your life has been this nice since the beginning of time.
    Take your index fingers and massage your skull, small circles please,
    at the outside end of your eyebrows where your hairline meets.
    Act like it's the smooth caress from that ocean's breeze,
    and remember to remain relaxed and continue to calmly breathe.
    When you're ready, let's journey through an odyssey,
    pass the jungle, away from the seagulls and water's peace.
    Smell the leaves and wildlife that surrounds you; watching,
    embrace nature like you were born beneath the palm trees.
    You can hear somebody in the distance calling your name,
    a familiar voice that echoes through the falling rain.
    Run to it and fixate your curiosity, I promise it's okay,
    what's the worst that can happen? It's all in your brain.
    You find a little boy with something in his hands,
    the grass is much greener but only where he stands.
    You ask what he's holding, and he shows you a stem,
    with flowers more beautiful than the mind can comprehend.
    Now, do you take it or let the boy enjoy what he found?
    One choice plants Greed, the other doesn't touch the ground.
    I can't decide for you, this is where my voice fades out,
    and you must make a decision before the sun rays cloud.

    I leave the seed with the child, because it's not mine to take,
    we trade each other's smiles then I continue on my way.
    I travel for awhile before coming to a lake,
    dip one foot in before diving through an underwater cave.
    I pull back some vines like they were emerald curtains,
    discovering a place where I no longer have these urges.
    This cleared my mind, but I mean, nobody's perfect,
    thank you for your time, doc, I was really hurtin'...

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    Re: Close Your Eyes

    This is a cool vibe. Reminds me of some shit I woulda wrote in my old RB days almost haha. The flows were on point when reading through and I didn’t slip at all when taking it in. The wording and language of it was super poetic and you can picture a lot of the things you’re saying here I think - especially if you’re a coastal human. The therapeutic vibe of it mixed in with the ocean breeze style images made it a relaxing read. Truly a “close your eyes” kind of feel to it. Nothing bad to say on this one! Solid drop.

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    Re: Close Your Eyes

    I loved it and I am hypnotism... I asked my drs to find one and it's illegal now. The imagry... yeah it was a beach and I remember almost the entire week. But not too much else... I'm hanging on to ten split seconds and nah I'm not ever going to let go. Family is everything and it's not selfish either. I loved the writing... I wish we could bookmark pieces cause I like to read some again and again. This is one of them.
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