The Final Fatality

[LoCo]

Repped
Word Perfect Disses [Chrit]
Public Enemy
Origin Ill Diss: Ill Mental

Nigga simplicty - just a pussy wit a mentality
fuckin wit LoCo its 'The Final Fatality'
cuz uve come against me
aint talkin that boo-boo shit
get yo hat-split
when my gat-twist
yea im pissed...
nigga a G-Unit playlist dont make u gangsta
as I slip the crip walk past the drip
dont flip as i trip into your supply..cuz cats demand
the right brand - no some grass mixed wit oregano and alil dro
Oh-no - as my knife enters ur wind pipe i swipe the air out of ur breath
cuz bitch u just ghost write
he thinks 'freestylin' means keystlin memorizin the dropin it on a mic
cake ass nigga wit frostin for the top
u can tell hes fake- he serves 2 days in pen comes out and says he from 'D - blok'
thinkin hip-hop is a dance
as i 'hoover' the 'shake' into your toes cuz u got steped on
Why do i even post here - shit gon get slept on
Blue killa
B to the G is illa
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[Endeva.]

i cant say this was very good cos it wasn't, your flow fell off and your structure was all over, with a basic rhyme scheme, i would use a more constant scheme.....Pc

[Norm Macdonald]

that shit was weak.

get off the dr sues rhymes, rhyming crip slip drip flip doesnt take alot of skill. you had no quoteables. try writing about a topic instead of this im a gangster and your not shit. its to basic. if your going to do gangster rap say something that has never been said. make it your own.

work on your structure to, one line has 4 words, then the next has 19 words, it throws off the whole flow. you just need to elevate on everything