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    The Prophecy

    One More Chance feat. LM - Formula
    Can't Stop - N.I.Z
    Life feat. MC Uski - Masta C

    this is a piece about philosophical self-glorification.. it also very shallowly delves into my person life and childhood... but its really a kind of piece which "intelligently" promotes my own rapping... peace, hope you enjoy it

    The Prophecy

    [chorus]x2
    The prophecy...
    Has come to pass

    [verse 1]
    Some 13 years ago, in a European hospital
    A woman gave birth to the greatest being possible
    The family was overjoyed, it was their first son
    Little did they realise that he was a cursed one
    He appeared to be normal, he had no physical ails
    But he was like milk in a bottle, a literal jail
    Somethin' predicted his fail, wrote and scripted his tale
    It was like his mental designs were encrypted in Braille
    As he grew to be older, he sensed an internal dragon
    He felt colder, but was trapped in an infernal chasm
    He couldn't fathom the pain, at this stage of his life
    So he began to unleash his furious rage on the mic

    [chorus]x2

    [verse 2]
    As the sand in the hourglass flowed, so did his life
    Time went by, but it didn't seem to have imaged right
    The proportion, the ratio of peace to distortion
    His existence was unbalanced, he was beatin' abortion
    Every day of his life, he was challenged to survive
    The intense mental anguish that banished his sight
    His ability to forsee the consequences of actions
    The reactions of other people's responsive patterns
    So socially he was inept, somethin' of an outcast
    He presumed it was cos of neglect, soon his doubt past
    His assumptions of failure in relationships
    Were confirmed, he could never be cool or play a bitch
    Or make it rich, when the fuckin' riches were still candy
    He sought the world, but couldn't even rule the school canteen
    His life at home deteriorated, parents didn't matter no more
    His anger was fear initiated and it shattered the doors
    The boundries that constrained his mind from findin' a cure
    His pain was so great it provoked his mind to think pure
    Then he realised, to successfully ease his spirit
    He'd have to breathe his image through his speech and lyrics

    [chorus]x2

    [verse 3]
    In the year 2004, a new era is born
    The hip-hop world will be changed by a new terror reform
    The game will forever morph at the hands of a prodigy
    Who will stack on skills like cards in Monopoly
    He will bring with him skills unused, he will bring his youth
    His powerful words will only ever be rich in truth
    His voice will provoke thought, and enrichment through song
    It will set his soul free, like a swimmin' dewgong
    You might not care about his existence, but altogether
    The only thing that matters is beatin' the stormy weather
    And that he will acheive by sheddin' his skin like a serpent
    To reveal his new form in which he'll be... perfect
    And keep in mind this prophecy, for future reference
    For all those who defy him will have no repentance
    He was a slave to the mind, chained up and blind
    Now he has dominated the fate of the rhymes

    [chorus]x2

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    This was a straight drop hommie. Telling a story, that is somthing that will keep people reading. So smart choice on the topic. Maybe work on your vocab and rhyme scheme, but thats about it. It had a consistant flow, never fell off. I was feeling a couple of lines in there alot. This was a good drop hommie.
    7.5 / 10 ( only cause I grade really hard )

    ---> Can you return the favor and peep the link in my sig.
    I know for a fact you will like it, aight hommie. much appriciated...

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    ^ thanks for the positive feedback... i tried to make up for the vocab with multie rhymes, they are throughout the entire song.. dunno if u noticed.. but thanks for the feedback, heaps appreciated... i'll check out your piece for sure

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    Damn nice go at this topic
    Seen people step to it
    but not as good as this
    so i think u did the topic great
    and the last verse
    is new i havent seen people tell the future
    in thier rap that often.
    gg.

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    this was a nice Open Mic.....i felt tha topic.....not much wrong in it.......enjoyed the read....wasn't too long or too short......word play was done nicely So ummm 9/10..tha shit was tight Kuz


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    ^ thanks.... it means alot to me to hear someone say that... your support is appreciated

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    Yeah i agree with them this was a good piece here....it made a good read i thought as well....your flow was pretty good in this i though, stayed on point through out it...your vocab was alright...structure was real good i thought....good content in this....overall good piece...keep at it.

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    ^ thanks heaps.... up

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    excellent man., one of the best I’ve seen. I enjoyed reading the
    whole thing. everything about it was great. flow, rhymes, structure,
    vocab, and you know wut I mean. I enjoyed how it was written.
    as it someone was reading straight out of a book…nice man
    much props…9.5/10…stay up…

    peace

    ps. check my thread out plz…thanx

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    Yeah this shit was dope, one of the best ive seen from you, i enjoy reading your peices, great great great work, the story was dope the imagery was dope, flow was almost perfect, the vocab was as good as it had to be, it was a dope peice and keep writin rymes


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    i would like to hook up with you for a collab
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    This was good.. It made a nice read.. The braile line was quaote worthy.. but i'm too lazy, lol.. Your multis held the flow on this one.. The structure did get a bit repetitive.. but it was very good at the first part.. um.. yeah.. very nice take on this concept..

    Go return the favour on any of mine.. Pz
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    i'll admit this was a real nice spit.
    All lines flowed nicely and all multis were perfect.

    this inspires me, ya see the post you read was just a no topic keystyle, so dont judge me on that piece. Cuz of this ill write something good.

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    This was nice dawg.
    Flow and multies were on target. Like you said...you were tryin to make up for vocab with multies and thats exactly what you did.
    Structure was great and overall a really good drop.
    9/10
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    thats hard dude

    good flow, excellent actually

    good vocab and story tellin

    keep postin man

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