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Thread: When my eyes are closed

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    When my eyes are closed

    My mind is distored, orthidox flow with-in
    life is dimin, used to hardknocks,life is retorted
    But when my eye-lids shut, I think nothing of it
    quiet times, I love it, the moons trim, and light over me
    Sittin staring off into space, never a minute of time I waste
    old pictures, I stare at the face.. my love is a lace
    Tight but not strung out enough, life is an aspect
    Never retoric neglect, or flourish the dim success
    rap,life,music,highs thats wat keeps me nourish'd
    I carry the staff, climb the highest feets'
    ride in fleets, keep members in there seats
    But at home, I think off the dome - and make mouth beats
    when my eyes are closed... lies fold, text is bold
    Colors become beautiful majestys, useful anasty's
    life becomes fantasys, things that I wish happened to me..
    When my eyes are closed.... time never grow's old
    things that cannot get taught, are told
    Emptiness lurks inside of my body
    a friend to bring happiness to me, never happiness
    ..... even when my eyes are closed....

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    quik key but has alot of meaning...

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    Told you on AIM, and I'll tell you here- this is dope...no matter how you look at it, it's awesome

    Ill flow
    Ill meaning
    Ill topic

    Definately a good read, legend status if nothing else...

    Keep it up..I love reading

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    thanks..

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    damn can someone please give me some feedback...

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    Vis dawg i like 90% of your shit including this one my dawg keep doin what cha doin, the thang flowed together, and its the damn truth not even happiness with your eyes closed, i hear you my dawg
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    thanks

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    yo sek thanks for the legends nomination

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    omgggggggggggggggggggg UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

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    that was tight
    keep up ur shit

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    pretty good man, i can feel ya
    check out my recent flows, the gotmeaning to em as well
    up em if you got any feedback

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    ight... upp for some reps

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    sighs.. up

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    some nice meaning in there, but the flow was off..... and the first couple of bars were unique.. if they flowed!.... but once it got past that... yeah pretty good.... nice scheme.. carried the rhyme well.....pZ....
    return the favour...
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    it flowed tho... just depending how u read or prenounce words
    thanks for a hit tho

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