What is a Vet? What is a Newbie? The Truth of RB
Last edited by Penskills; March 3rd, 2004 at 07:48 PM
I'd say this was a really good piece...the delivery was complex with great points one of the best i've read from you. I enjoyed the flow some very creativ lines...the letter sing...that was really good. I enjoyed thisread not only for the value but the truth in your words...very well done...keep it up man
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You ripped this as usual - and I'm sure you know that - so there's nothing else for me to really say. You got talent out the gazoo - much respect.
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Hence Forward
^Thanks you two!!
You right all the way dawg........*plays Jay-Z* "What more can I saaaaaay?!, What more can I Dooooooo!?".......the truth has been spoken RB pay attention....peace
Last edited by ELEETE; February 12th, 2004 at 11:05 PM
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^Thanks....but too many of this fucks are too busy holding each others nuts!!Originally Posted by ELEETE
It was nice to see you prove your adaptability too. You might have done it before I came but this is the first non-story piece I've seen from you. Hit my "Broken Metamorphosis" if you can.
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this was good... lacked a bit on rhyme style. Ur definately a legend...in the making. U know what to say... a little bit of work on more original ways to say it n u'll be there.
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Hum, i really liked this. I think if it would've been me i woud've done something a bit different than the rhyme scheme but it was a solid read, a lot of good concepts. The flow was good. My only real complaint was that it seemed a bit too stream of conscious, you kind of delved off sometimes instead of keeping the structure of concepts tight. That's more of a choice of style really but if there was some structure scheme or motifs that unified and appeared in the peace throughout maybe it'd improve a bit. I'm just a stickler for organization though, I've written far too many essays. I'm becoming a fan of yours (though clearly less vocal than those who frequent Legends pushing your pieces...lol) and i liked seeing you branch out from your usual surreal style, attempting pieces rooted in realism will definitely help your writing a lot. It's good to try new things, your writing will becoming stronger and more compact in the end because of it. I liked the part about vets being through flames in their threads and the part about newbs should try to make their words sing off the screen, that also registered well with me. I think it stands overall and you come across as honest and genuine, this is a dope piece man. Keep writing, i'll keep reading.
And the only reason I really responded is in hopes of appeasing you to christen me with vet status. Haha. : )
Nice work man.
Nice drop related easy cuz sum people are lazy as fuck and can't do shit for themselves
I believe i'm making some good music, please just wait for me
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That's me right there. Not saying I'm a vet. I'm just saying...that's me right there.A vet can act rude or nice, rap sweet or slap dudes
Vets are the nice guys or the sh*t-talkers with attitudes
Is it just me...or does it feel like this whole piece should be a wakeup call for Camarac?
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this is sum gud stuff......U makin vets like cam seem shit
at open mics....
any way...Pen...Ur stuff was gud...flow immaculate
vocAB N wordplay perfect...9/10
Boom tick its Brix!
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damn penskills...nice ass drop homie, vocab n evrything was nice...really said sumthin to me cuz i really dont know where i stand...am i a newbie or flyweight...i really dont know..but its wuteva...the drop was dope homie n i think anotha legend piece in my opinion...speak the truth n let evry1 else see....and if you still don't get what separates newbies and vets
you may never know,it comes down to one word: respect...
^^dope line
keep spittin to de fullest
Peace
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YOOOOOOO! penskillz u really got skillz dawg u speakin' the truth, obviously u rhymed about the newbies and vets strictly, what more can i say.....real reconize real.....and this piece mos def defines them......HOTNESS!! i know the difference, but with you? u tell it LIKE IT IS! And thats What im talkin' ABOUT!!!! Peace and LOve ~GONE~
Last edited by BluMami; February 13th, 2004 at 06:19 PM
nice man. prop the best thing iv read on this forum.... peace
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