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Last edited by Unwritten Hazard; August 20th, 2006 at 06:42 AM
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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thanks for the feedback.......ASSHOLES
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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i acctualy really liked this man. good flow nice contence with some nice creativity..... Things to improve more add a bit more complexity .... but props man good spit!
my thoughts exactly.......
nah j/k
but thanks for my ONLY feedback
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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Yo dat was tight creativity was off the chain and good vocab.
But one thing that i personally think you can change is the fact that you
switched topicks so fast you go from being depressed to gettin laid and rockin
crowds, if i were rockin crowds the last thing i would be is depressed.
so my advise is try to be another person a person who has never read that verse before.
aight i hit yours up now you hit mine up with honesty its "To whome it may concern"
''nobody knows me, even my mother who named me//
i feel like the invisible man walking outside when its raining//
a changling, that looks like water colors washed off on a painting///''
I liked that imagery, but id say the peice lacked anything that braught me into it - like adding a name into one of the lines say of a famous person or something like that, i think those were your best lines, .....definatly liked them. I also never find any lyrics any good unless they make me laugh or have great metaphours. But thats just me so...
same with me
lyical soldja, i was geting laid and rockin crowds cause i was dead and n heaven
thanks 4 the feed
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we battle all the time so I don't wanna give you no compliments, but fuck this rhyme was illmatic you really know how to make shit that should'nt rhyme...rhyme..you gotta come back to the cypher and get your ass beat though stop being a pussy...this rhyme was thorough
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wow, thats nice
i think thats the most positive feedback ive ever got
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I agree this was good here.....made a nice read i think....i liked the opening to this, it was nice....the flow to this was good as well, it flowed pretty well....vocab was good in it....overall a nice piece....keep at it.
good lookin out cred
uppn
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Good creativity...Ive heard better stuff from you before tho
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