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Thread: Is It Me?

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    Rock you in the Face Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic's Avatar
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    Is It Me?

    Is it me, or does it Feel like the world isn't enough
    You can try to feed the hungry, But it is out of Love?
    I don't question much, but I've had alot bottled inside
    How Even Real Eyes, can't Realize, all our Real Lies..
    I thought I had pressure, dealing with girls One Night..
    Now I feel Like I have the whole World On My Shoulder..
    ..And shit it feels Light
    Sure we have wars and shit, People dying on a Daily Basis
    And people here feel bad..Yet some are still Dying by Murder..
    ...Is that the way you plan to change it?
    Can somebody give me an answer, something to heat the cold
    Pain embedded on to the concrete, White colors begin to Show
    So lets blame it on the music, it really does affects how they act
    Or maybe It starts at the home..The Position they were put in..
    ...so It Leaves.. and never comes Back
    Is it me? Or People are acting Like Its Too Late to change society...
    If Only they really knew, how they can still change..
    Its too Late for me..
    I sold my soul to the devil, and I ripped up the Reciept...

    Your fellow Politician..
    Hence Forward.. BURR!
    [YOUTUBE]seYxVBIsycE[/YOUTUBE]
    Just watch My Back, I got the front.

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    hard to follow because of its ryhme scheme and some bars was alot longer than others. but its aight.
    Da KiD iS iN dA FoRuM BUiLdInG!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    ^Thats because your a noob and were reading it different.
    Hence Forward.. BURR!
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    this was a pretty cool peice. nonetheless a good read. i like the I dont question much line..i can really relate to that dude. you had a good rhyme scheme. and the flow was on point. it flowed really well. well..to me it did anywayz. your wordplay was decent. you know what im sayin. and you most definitly had good usage of multis's in this peice. only thing that lacked to me in this peice was your vocabulary. it was a little basic. but it also fit this topic and peice. overall this was kool and also a good read. props. stay up.

    if u can homie, check out my peice called " Self-Destruct Sequence "
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116109

    feedback is appreciated pimp. thanks

    peace.

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    this was a pretty cool peice. nonetheless a good read. i like the I dont question much line..i can really relate to that dude. you had a good rhyme scheme. and the flow was on point. it flowed really well. well..to me it did anywayz. your wordplay was decent. you know what im sayin. and you most definitly had good usage of multis's in this peice. only thing that lacked to me in this peice was your vocabulary. it was a little basic. but it also fit this topic and peice. overall this was kool and also a good read. props. stay up.

    if u can homie, check out my peice called " Self-Destruct Sequence "
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116109

    feedback is appreciated pimp. thanks

    peace.

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    Hence Forward.. BURR!
    [YOUTUBE]seYxVBIsycE[/YOUTUBE]
    Just watch My Back, I got the front.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Accelerate
    Sure we have wars and shit, People dying on a Daily Basis
    And people here feel bad..Yet some are still Dying by Murder..
    ...Is that the way you plan to change it?

    ..
    ^Dope lines..I see that your last few pieces have been,something very meaningful...no clue why your pieces are getting slept on??.....if you wrote some 'GangStA" shit like Muh and I..LOL....anywho..this was a nice drop..peace..!!!

    Check out the collab..LMAo

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    was a good piece. simple, but good. some ideas could have been formatted to flow better. like the shit its light line, definitely could have flowed better. the idea behind this verse.. definitely wasnt a new approach to it. work on that, people get bored of reading same things too much.

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