long keystyle...

[vane]

ok Before you close it, am doin the links now, but i cant save documents and it was a keystyle, so i had to post it up....ujst a keystyle, feedback would be appreciated...Blah!

nobody on this site gon question me like am a top architect//
I pardon myself, niggaz leavin battles with no heart in there chest//
An i aint playin... cause injury to niggaz with my lyrikal skillz//
....still causin thrills, gettin paid like am workin on tills//
*Pow* am serious niggaz, ye rhymes just worthless am here for a purpose//
I’ll have you huggin the streets like green peace workers//
Reign on me, have vermillion shootin through showers//
an have you hooked on wires like computer towers//
so think of that when you wanna attack on a website//
get ye wig pulled back like over powerin head lice//
see if you can take the pain of this enourmous strain//
ill pause ye vien, fuck around an have a slug in ye brain//
an i stay fuckin, work it out bitches... erection, face//
its hard to concentrate, cos V got more dimes than a church collection plate//
put my dick in my rhymes, and start to rap fast//
little faggit, he didnt bust till 22 like a game of black jack//
keep punchin in keystyles, cos to me rhyme means wins//
wake up... an get a double dosin of head eryday like siamese twins//
dialects of ghosts, packin swords that disect ye throat//
throw up signs on the corner like fuckin’ direction posts//
cos Reg a gangsta... guns in yo raps is just plane lame//
only D block you visitin is a stand at a football game....we poppin//
lights am punchin, process of construction causes life deduction//
nigga thinks hes phat? have the pump to ye chest like liposuction//(oohhh)
this a slug fest, but the slugs at rest, fuck around an have a slug in ye chest//
you can’t fuck wit me... am so dope.... i aint never passed a drugs test//
pull out my gun an lick shit, pull back my leg an kick kids//
put you down on both knees like proposin to midgets//
we talkin bout keystyles, so fuck the lead and sharpners//
pierce ye skin like fuckin’ tattoo and ring parlours//
an my lines straigh, like i rap with drawin’ stencils//
then make rappers the weakest link like anne robinson specials//
before you attempt b, juss know ive been through plenty//
oh you got rhymes...well i keep both hands on the four like sixteen twenty//
shhhh... i rap quiet, sneak up and have ye bones shook....
this is the last warnin.....remember... V been through more MC’s than a scottish phone book//

out...

[rappersdie]

i no like it

[rappersdie]

it suked rewrite the whole thing

[vane]

i dont think you read it... not judging on your opinion, but you wanted to drop a keystyle, so you type i no like it in two peoples threads and get your two replies...but w/e

~Links~
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115837
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116082

[Slayer]

Aight man i thought that shit was tight, fuk you 'rappersdie' ya probably never even read it, cos any1 else who wud read that wud probably like it. anyway nice freestyle vermillion keep that shit up.

[Slayer]

Ohh yea i liked ya flow and punches in that keystyle by the way. Nice multis aswell, some really good punches wa made me laff lol.

[vane]

thanxz fo the feedback...uppin

[vane]

uppin.....ill give you feedback just ask...........

[vane]

upppiiinnn.......................

[Katz.Frost]

that was sum good shit

[vane]

thanxz fo the feedback loke

[Karl Merks]

You had alot of nice lines in there, even though it was just random babbling. Do you listen to Copywrite? It was very similar to something he would write. Also, I really hope that you wrote this cause it almost came across like you jacked it.

For instance,

then make rappers the weakest link like anne robinson specials

- Seeing as the show was likely cancelled months ago, I find it strange that you'd put that in. That's what makes me think you just came across someone's older verse and pawned it off as your own.

Anyway, if you truly did come up with that , it was nice and you've got real talent. No hate.

[vane]

thanxz fo the feedback...yes i listen to copywrite, did i bite .. i was juss keystylin' so i dunno, and yes i did come up with the weakest link line... i had juss read about the rap one, kus i never did see it, and then when i was writin it that came to my head...blah, dont believe me if you chose not to...thanxz fo the feedbakk

Edit: juss thought you could ask slayer... i was keyin it up talkin to him on msn

[Allen McGregor]

LMAO


no comment.

[vane]

juss remembered who you are... now, if you have nothing posotive, constructive, or destructive to say, stay the fukk outta my threads. that was just a waste of your time, cos to me it meant nothing, and stay out of my future threads bekus, i can see you take the internet a bit too seriously...