?!?Random or NOT?!? (reply plz)

[Mag...]

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Getting by now that.. Le plus dur est passé,
forgive the french but I have no excusé
must play a game to help me pass the day,
Le jouet if I may, le francais in a fast array
lines a bramble with the mindless amble
So why the ramble with these signs of scramble?
Bet it's just a gamble to show what i can handle
Show a flow to dandle on knee like daddy's best scandal
Or worst, it's a worthless verse and that's no first
But likely just coerced words submersed in what's terse
And interspersed with extra poetic femininity,
Duplicity, trinity construction straight to infinity
Lyrical divinity, English language never one to limit me
Limitless i spit it best, always blessed with success
Obessesed to impress, possessing power to profess
Of beauty and malice, of the callous and challis
Canada's finest and brightest; like aurora borealis....

that's it for now... im just bored....

btw...
"Le plus dur est passé" means "the hard (part) is over"
"excusé" = "excuse"
"Le jouet" = "The game"
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poetic femininity refers to multiple syllable rhymes... it's the real poetic term for what most on RB call "multis"
...
aurora borealis = latin name for the phenomena known as "Northern Lights". Northern lights are arcs of solar flare from the sun being mirrored in the earths magnetic poles... the effect is a dancing lights in the night sky... best seen in Northern Canada...

please reply with feedback...

[Johnny 6-feet]

kind of random, although you kept the concept of foreign languages thorughout the piece, some nice rhymes, strong vocab and weird images.

pretty good for a short, hope to see more.

[SMZ]

Nice flow - vocab was good. Concept seemed a little irreverent - but as a just kinda demonstration piece it was alright. Good originality on the rhymes. Keep writing and hit my Lamentations if you haven't.

[Mag...]

thanks... i think im gonna do another one like this and call it Not Random...'

cuz if you read it it really isn't sorry to give it away to all those who are just reading...

[Vokal Rights]

You called the verse "random" but i cant help but feel when you writ it the whole meaning in the lines was about the randomness of language, like how you can 'randomly' put words together....i liked it nonetheless, good vocab, nice flow,

I liked...

"And interspersed with extra poetic femininity,
Duplicity, trinity construction straight to infinity
Lyrical divinity, English language never one to limit me"

That was a tight line.....keep it up...peace.

[Mag...]

Thanks vokal... you are seeing what i did... the verse was actually focused on randomness and everything is on point... im really just spitting about spitting

[Vokal Rights]

It's ok, some people read things and dont look for no meaning....whats the point in reading but ignoring the meaning, i thought the verse and the whole idea was very creative...i liked the piece a lot....

[Mag...]

just a little up for a break down...

[World War]

Pretty creative. I didn't know anyone else on here knew french. Some Latin too, maybe? I liked how it all flowed together. Kinda poetic. I enjoyed for sure. Tres bien monsieur.


(I ripped on some kid a lil in French in Cypher-Diss the person above you, if you wanna hit that up)

[Cory Stylez]

this was a nice peice over all, more of a "that was random" type of piece. the flow was great, and the vocab was nice, pretty nice for something that you did when you were bored. structure was good, and everything else was pretty much clean, nice work.

[Prophesized-Con]

nice piece ... woulda been much better if it were longer .. like the part where u say english bear u no limit .. good drop ..

[Mag...]

thanks all for the feedback... glad i could amuse for one day...

[Mag...]

holla for an up...