10 lines max
no cheating
no feeding
blind spit due half an hour after you check in.
good luck.
peace
Silent Mumbles
Ace of Aces
10 lines max
no cheating
no feeding
blind spit due half an hour after you check in.
good luck.
peace
listen boy im a fucken crook i got more bitches than tha fucken chinese phone book, do im tha fucken battle field keep yo shit and tha shield,bitch i aint yo fucken friend my fucken nine put wholes and grown men, dude im tha greates i aint i can talk and write it boy i can tell that im winnin this battle cause i dont need a fucken siket cause i can read yo mind and my shit be one of a fucken kind, dude you can tell who eva tell tha cop im from cashville we known to put bitches on tha block,bitch i come thru yo nieghborhood lookin and skim bitch i rob yo and steal yo fucken grandmas sweat shirt or yo fucken walmart rims, u fucken challenging me how u dare bitch i was beatin like you back when michael jordan had hair
Check it…
Another confused child, you should’ve kept ya ‘mumbles silent’
Take a look at a stuffed animal kid, compared to you its violent
New to Rb, is a loss from me how you want to begin your rec?
Then again, winnin’ for you isn’t in option for you to expect
I will hand you this loss with pleasure, pin it up as a souvenir
You can show off ur expectation and prove you’ve been here
I’ll end this 2 lines short of max and get 5 more votes to stash
Get used to havin zero percent on the poll and left to the dash(0-1)
lol. this battle is sad. but shuldn't be too hard to vote on.
uppin.
thanx.
peace
^thanx for voting. lol. i appreciate it a lot.
uppin
peace
well i think Aces took this one......Silent..you need to structure your verse better, it was sloppy and hard to read, not to mention half of it didnt rhyme, your punches came weak and didnt hit at all, the phone book line was pretty bad, but keep at it man...
Ave- nice verse with alot of nice punches and metaphors.. i liked the opener and the personals too, it was a nice peice to read, flowed well, the closer would have been killer if you worded it a bit better but i got the point..nice job man, keep at it...
vote-Ace of Aces
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aight ace won cuz his struc was solid and punches & personals
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SM had whack struc kinda long bars & punch & person wise choppy
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ace was connecting more with his verse and it was easier to follow
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as for SM flow was kinda fucked up do to the bad wordply and such
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yo SM make yer struc better and direct punches and shit more efficient
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also work on a good werdplay cuz ya shit was all over the place
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overall 7/10 for SM and a 8/10 or higher for ace aight ya heard
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ace doesnt really need ne feedback other than keep doing ya thang
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vote/Ace of Aces for overall better battle oriented drop ya'll heard
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yo dogg vote on this and do not leave me hangging for w/e reason
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118862
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finally. a vote. lol. thanx, i appreciate it.
uppin
damn. uppin this thing. vote plz.
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peace
Okaaay...
silent mumbles: Ur verse was dead wack. Ur structure made me barf, ur concepts made me barf, and basically ur whole verse made me barf. U need to elevate bad, dog. Ur punches didn't really make sense, and ur flow was choppy. Keep elevatin'.
Ace of Aces: I wasn't really fellin' ur verse this time. U had god concepts, but they were kinda indirect. U need to hit harder and sharper. Ur flow was just aight. Keep elevatin'.
Vote: Ace of Aces
*Vote on my battles and I'll return the favor later.*
Punches - Ace
Personals - Ace
Wordplay - Neither
Multies - Neither
Structure - Ace
Silent Mumbles.. Whole verse looked like one big blob of words, honestly.. was not looking forward to reading it, But i did.. and it was completly weak and boring
Ace of Aces.. You got this easily.. But battling newbies will not get you known nor respected on this site. Theres not much to say about this battle.. You Won
Vote / Ace of Aces
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Silent spit some metas, it's about all he had.
Very newbish, very straight forward (as in no finesse)...
HORRIBLE, HORRIBLE, HORRIBLE paragraph format.
You'd think it helps flow, but it don't.
No wordplay, basically just a shouting verse that I hadtrouble finding the rhymes in.
Ace, well, pulled the merk.
Threw wordplay to help connect his punches...
Used personals for that extra sting...
And closed really well.
All around better.
Ace
Peace
^thanx peepz. one more to finish this. uppin......
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peace
^word to that..........hit this up and i'll return the favor
with a vote....thanx
peace
Silent Mumbles had disgusting structure... my main challenge was actually finding your rhymes, not deciding who would win... Well anyway.... you had some metaphors and similes, so thats one thing, and your flow is decent once I worked out where the rhymes were... bad structure, simplistic rhymes, weak vocabulary... no really good punches... basically and all round bad verse
Ace had far better structure which helped it flow... some nice nice punches, especially the closer and this:
I will hand you this loss with pleasure, pin it up as a souvenir
You can show off ur expectation and prove you’ve been here
.. you didnt really have good vocab but it was better than Silent's and your whole verse was spread out more nicely...
Ace Of Aces = vote
Return the favour by voting in my topical against freeman in elevated front lines... peace
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