'Life after Death'

[JONESY_UK]

Life after death

Beyond this unknown walls, theres another life for participation
Believers having sightings, of an unknown situation
Leaving a soul behind, and being placed within another
Leading a new life, will it be successful or will it be tougher
Growing older each day, wishing you live longer than expected
But deaths just a term, a word meaning a new lifes being created
None believers say you die, and never see the world through a different perception
But can they explain the flashbacks that others have with no explanation
Some people just say they’ve lived in a number of different identities
We need real proof of going beyond, not just unexplained memorises


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[*Diz~Mi$$le*]

rhymescheme was bad.content was played...and didn't have an original twist.flow was off...vocabulary was limited, you just used words that ended in "tion" alot. and some of your lines didn't rhyme. you're not wack, just not very good. Atleast this piece wasn't too good. not horrible though. Elevate

[Mag...]

I thought the first 4 lines were actually ok... then you totally lost the rhymes... didn't think the last 4 really rhymed very well at all...

your vocab was alright... but you need to work on structure... this was alright...

haven't seen much of you so.. keep it up...