SS: Ghost Writer

[Throwaway123]

To my grandfather who died of cancer when I was 12…

Dear Papa,
It’s been six years since I have seen the spirit of your life..
You were a fighter, and you finally overcame your strife..
Cancer they told me you had but I could not understand..
Why this disease is able to be killing such a strong man..
You taught me how to be tough, and to never give up..
So your memory helps allow me get through any rut..
You were never there for many of my first experiences..
Never saw my first date even if it was an embarrassment..
You could of fixed the sentiment and allowed me to laugh..
Never saw me graduate, God allowed you to only see half..
I cried just thinking of what you would of thought of me..
And you know me, I’m not one to get sentimentally..
I never experimented with taking drugs and smoking..
Because all I could remember was your lungs choking..
So that’s why to this day, I have never ever taken a puff..
You had a sweet side but you always tried to act tough..
I saw right through it, and to the inner child that hid inside..
My best friend that’s the little kid that you tried to hide..
But now I have grown up you should really see me now..
So to God I pray, for just one more day for him to allow..
I’d show you around the university to all of my classes..
Then I’d show you my marks and every one of my passes..
I’m only first year, but I have already chosen my career..
But like I said it’s only first year so ladies are my only care..
And lucky for me I have your dancing skills and charm..
So ladies can’t resist, they think, “Oh whats the harm”..
That’s when I reel them in, and they end up as mine..
But Grandpa, I have to go now, just look at the time..
Now your in heaven, and I’m sure they all love you..
But if they don’t, just know that I will always love you..

Signed…
Speek.E.Z.

[Phoeniix]

nice job. alot of emotions. well and thoroughly expressed. a really sad peice....hope it got alot off your chest

nice job

[Throwaway123]

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[Masahiko.]

nice work.. emotions wer nice and everything flowed.. the structure was also real good i think

[g3n3sis]

Very good , with lots of lines in it that people can relate to
- Peace - Nice Job , keep it up.

[Fresh]

It’s been six years since I have seen the spirit of your life..
You were a fighter, and you finally overcame your strife..
Cancer they told me you had but I could not understand..
Why this disease is able to be killing such a strong man..
Wow, very deep.. I really feel where your coming from here... We all see our elder family members as people who've given us wisdom.. Grandpa maybe foought in the war, I dunno.. But we see them as being really strong because thats how we saw them as a child.. When you find out this disease is going to kill them, you just can't imagine it can be happening to this man, who helped you thru struggles in life, who tought you things you'd never knew.. And most importantly, showed know signs of weakness in front of you..
You taught me how to be tough, and to never give up..
So your memory helps allow me get through any rut..
You were never there for many of my first experiences..
Never saw my first date even if it was an embarrassment..
Remembering his strength, makes you strong.. Your grandpa must have had a big impact on your life.. But I think for the second bar, it would have been better if you said I couldnt be with you for my first experiences.. and I couldnt be with you for my first date.. Because he is with you, and was there for all those experiences.. You probably felt his vibe, because he was a strong spirited man.. And that gives off more powerful vibes then a weak spirited person..
You could of fixed the sentiment and allowed me to laugh..
Never saw me graduate, God allowed you to only see half..
I cried just thinking of what you would of thought of me..
And you know me, I’m not one to get sentimentally..
You see, your grandpa did see you graduate, he just couldn't share his happiness with you.. But this is still really deep.. You think your grandpa is ashamed of you now, because he can see the things that happen that he wouldnt have seen if he were still alive.. You see you just proved my point that he was there for everything.. But you didn't get share your happiness with him..
I never experimented with taking drugs and smoking..
Because all I could remember was your lungs choking..
So that’s why to this day, I have never ever taken a puff..
You had a sweet side but you always tried to act tough..
Your grandpa was a big influence on your life.. You learned from his wisdom.. And you learned from his mistakes.. Thats awesome.. Its great that you don't do drugs, they can fuck up your life.. And your grandpa is your influence for not doing drugs.. Your grandpa didnt like to show his weak side, and that makes him that much more stronger... Great bars here, has a good point to it.. Nice imagery..
I saw right through it, and to the inner child that hid inside..
My best friend that’s the little kid that you tried to hide..
But now I have grown up you should really see me now..
So to God I pray, for just one more day for him to allow..
Wow, very deep here... Great imagery.. But remember he has seen you now.. You can't say he doesnt know what your up too now.. He looks down on you, and protects you from above as best he can.. For example, not doing drugs.. Thats your grandpa's spirit helping you.. Thats my opinion anyways.. You just gotta be open minded.. Other then that this was really tight, lots of emotions..
I’d show you around the university to all of my classes..
Then I’d show you my marks and every one of my passes..
I’m only first year, but I have already chosen my career..
But like I said it’s only first year so ladies are my only care..
Very deep, and emotional.. Your talking to your grandpa.. Telling him about yourself, the kind of things you like to do, the things you would LIKE to do with him, and the things that make you happy so on and so forth.. This part was pretty simple, but its simplicity is what makes it nice, cause it gets to the point..
And lucky for me I have your dancing skills and charm..
So ladies can’t resist, they think, “Oh whats the harm”..
That’s when I reel them in, and they end up as mine..
But Grandpa, I have to go now, just look at the time..
This piece is really nice.. You've described your grandpa's character.. And I know what kind of person he is from what you wrote.. Strong spirited, didnt want people to see any of his weak sides, which makes im that much stronger.. A very nice man, with lots of wisdom, and likes to have fun and laugh.. He musta been a ladies man too.. lol.. Thats great.. Ahh, now when you say I have to go now just look at the time.. thats what I was talkin about before, with you talkin to your grandpa through this piece.. Thats deep man..
Now your in heaven, and I’m sure they all love you..
But if they don’t, just know that I will always love you..
I also believe he will be loved in heaven.. But I'm sure he doesn't have much time having fun wit them, cause hes busy looking down on you, making sure your alright.. Nice ender, finishes it off nicely..

This was very deep... You expressed your grandpa's character really well.. Just remember though, he is with you, and does see all the things you do, you cant forget that.. Like I said, you not doing drugs is probably your granpa's spirit helping you.. If your grandpa was an asshole and didnt care about you, you probably would do drugs and shit know what I'm saying? Now you can say oh no its on my own accord, but just try and be oppen minded.. You'll come to the realization of some really wierd things.. Very deep piece here, lots of emotion.. I really liked.. And its something lots of people can realate too, and if they read it, I think it would bring memories of there loved ones, and either bring a smile to their face or a tear to their eye.. Good job man.. Keep it up..

Peace.

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