aight keep it gully, house rules, no bs
10-15 lines since my house i drop first
Laureate
zee the 2nd
aight keep it gully, house rules, no bs
10-15 lines since my house i drop first
yo i'm coming off a rebound, lost one to a bitch (DA KID)
dont judge too quick, one loss can make you rich
look at tyson and holyfeild dude got paid to bite that bitch
now sidewinder i wont murder you quick or bite but u will sufferin a loss by my fist
dudes saw this coming when this niggga had vida as his pic
dont you know my brother thas my bitch
i could go into you bio and no shyt
why even bother cuz u will be my bitch
dont try to copy my style dawg
i will do wat nas did hov and diss u with ether
but we all know u will do it like ja and get murdered by aftermath
so today u learned a lesson and thas not mess zimmaman cuz he too quick
I almost took this kid seriously, til I peeped his last battle
I mean he aint even level newb, cause hes till fuckin wit rattles
Kid tried to spit a hard flow, by his shits too weak for words
I mean he went to prewrite deop shit, but couldn't lift the verbs
Damn kid you fuckin suck at rappin, like 1 handed crosseyed elfs
Me against you is like smokin, extremely bad for your health
I mean I dun even have to try, cause I'm guaranteed victory
Zee's The 2nd of his kind, cause I made the first fuckin history
I mean you rhymes are whack as ya name, and both played and weak
Kid could prewrite ona calender, and still couldn't spit ina week
damn!......weak battle, but vote goes to sidewinder
reason:
sidewinder- ur verse was aight, but not really even that. It was enough to cut it this time. Ok u ok vocab, simple words. U had aight flow. U had aight structure. and U had barely any metas. The main thing u have got to leave out in ya verse or just narrow down, is the "I mean"s it sounds stupid everytime u hear it, or when u say it more than once.
Zee- i dont know man. Ur verse just didnt cut it int his battle. Everything ya verse was either alittle below average or worse. U r structure was terrible, the ryhme was messed up when i tried to read it. The main thing u need to work on is ya structure. Its terrible.
Vote-sidewinder, but by barely, both verses were pretty much the same to me.
wow this was the weakest battle ever !!!!...mwauahhhh/...... u both deserve to lose but ima vote anyways...
verse from zee:
^^lol gotta be kiddin me ^^blahyo i'm coming off a rebound, lost one to a bitch (DA KID)
dont judge too quick, one loss can make you rich
look at tyson and holyfeild dude got paid to bite that bitch
now sidewinder i wont murder you quick or bite but u will sufferin a loss by my fist
dudes saw this coming when this niggga had vida as his pic
dont you know my brother thas my bitch
i could go into you bio and no shyt
why even bother cuz u will be my bitch
dont try to copy my style dawg
i will do wat nas did hov and diss u with ether
but we all know u will do it like ja and get murdered by aftermath
so today u learned a lesson and thas not mess zimmaman cuz he too quick
4/10
verse from sidewinder:
lol^^^muah^^blahI almost took this kid seriously, til I peeped his last battle
I mean he aint even level newb, cause hes till fuckin wit rattles
Kid tried to spit a hard flow, by his shits too weak for words
I mean he went to prewrite deop shit, but couldn't lift the verbs
Damn kid you fuckin suck at rappin, like 1 handed crosseyed elfs
Me against you is like smokin, extremely bad for your health
I mean I dun even have to try, cause I'm guaranteed victory
Zee's The 2nd of his kind, cause I made the first fuckin history
I mean you rhymes are whack as ya name, and both played and weak
Kid could prewrite ona calender, and still couldn't spit ina week
4.5/10/
breakdown:
opener:none
mulites:none
punchlines:ummm...side
flow:side
closer:none
structure:side
v...sidewinder
weak battle overall but thought that sidewinder had better punchlines..
and better personal'z
zee go pic another career ....mwauhh
check my other battles...if u do i will try to go to yours
UP1...yeah it was weak....I did what I did the minimum I had to
Ya Both Suck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!
^Freepost again and you will be banned...up2
sidewinder- ur verse was OK. ur punches was harder than his. u had good personels about his "I mean you rhymes are whack as ya name". ur flow and structure was easy to read and overall ur verse was OK.
Zee- ur verse was ass. u aint have any personels. ur finisher didnt even rhyme. ur flow was ass and structure was confusing. ur punches were garbage werent even about him. its like u didnt even start gettin at him yet.
vote: SideWinder
vote for da battle in mah sig, i will return da favor
Da KiD iS iN dA FoRuM BUiLdInG!!!!!!!!!!!!
Vote: Sidewinder
Zee: You came weak again man. No good punches, no personals either, and those are the two most important. And you said 'bitch' like 5 times, you way overused the word. You just gotta elevate, alot.
Sidewinder: A decent verse, you had a couple good personals. I really liked the one about makin the first zee history. Your structure was good, easy to read. Your punches just hit harder than his
Return the Favor, votes needed:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=122915
Sidewinder took this easily....Zee yer verse was terrible....
it lacked everything that a battle verse should have...
personals, punches, creativity, wit, structure, etc...
you didnt even diss yer opponent, let alone use
punches or personals....go to the help center asap
to learn whats needed to construct an actual battle verse
and just keeping trying to elevate.. Sidewinder....
not that great of a verse...still though it was twice as good
as Zee's...the creativity used could have been better,
but you still had few decent punches and a personal
plus you actually dissed your opponent..
v/ Sidewinder...better punches, a personal, stucture, wit, structure, etc..
...
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