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    microcosm spokenoh's Avatar
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    ~Phriction~

    Millions of ways to walk down life's path
    Billions of ways to sample the mic's wrath
    But dont write past the red margin
    Cause the pen goes out of control like carcinogens
    When you spill the ink, time is frozen
    For every hour is valuable, seconds are stolen
    Green gardens are ravaged in stanzas
    As reality distorted like the Easter rabbit or Santa
    Endangered black and white like pandas
    It never ceases...
    Implant the mentality in are heads we will never get the diseases
    Do what feels and pleases, feel the passion
    For the questions are answered, so conceal the asking
    Reveal the blasting and commercialism expressed
    The bias and ugly realism would leave Hitler impressed
    3 white kids, but the black one gets arrest...
    Lord, Buddha, it's all God for the reason we get appalled
    Is that if we only reply when addressed...no one would speak at all
    Step down the area where the devil once crawled on earth
    I haven't weeped tears, besides the pain I balled at birth
    Everyone wince from pain, crush your dreams like pinched-aim
    You shouldn't be with a mic anyways, if nothing significant to say
    If you had 24 hours to live, would you have second thoughts?
    Because if you decided, debated over time seconds would be lost
    ...Trifling over recognition is like an incision to the heart
    How are you gonna accomplish life, when your ambition won't start?
    The beast of the mark... is it reversal...
    That I am poor when underground and wack when commercial
    Breaking and breaking during the intermerals, for the love
    Humanity; the grim on the tiolet seat too thick for the toothbrush to scrub
    Jesus' whip marks too harsh to back rub, and we cause
    The loss for our retreat, when television and daily routine gets tossed
    Into a salad of...nothing...I can't reach people with relating ballads
    Just like I can't have success in rap without stating madlibs
    Or being myself, cause in this land of giants, I am an elf
    Without knowledge of self, rich of mind like cerebrum wealth
    But in contrast, my walk ain't so bad when we look at them
    While we pile dollar bills, homeless need garbage for stacking
    I hear "back in the day" too much for real comfort
    My skin irritates like paint peals in my sunporch
    The sun scorch, scorches like the truth expelled by the government
    It's like it's disaster happening when the blanket of sincerity smothers-men
    ...Take the chance sometime and watch the horizon gap out your window
    Cause the tall tales of the sky blazes colours with astrological symbols...
    ...
    Pinacle and the ~Phriction~ my mind posseses...
    ...
    Peace.
    can I kick it?

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    For the questions are answered, so conceal the asking
    ^^dope line
    i thought this was a decent enought read... you could work on some of your transitions tho... most were pretty smooth, some werent..... some of the rhyming seemed a lil forced too... but on the whole you portrayed this nice.... caught some meaning in it.... ~one~
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    Thanks alot^^ for the reply.
    can I kick it?

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    wow this is a reall nice piece deep in shit loving everything you did here

    The sun scorch, scorches like the truth expelled by the government
    It's like it's disaster happening when the blanket of sincerity smothers-men
    ...Take the chance sometime and watch the horizon gap out your window
    Cause the tall tales of the sky blazes colours with astrological symbols...

    really liking these lines the most hitting it hard and shit

    nice drop keep spittin this ill shit

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    microcosm spokenoh's Avatar
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    Something amidst...something wrong...why hasn't Credz popped in this thread yet to remind me of my links..? Here it is...to lil'hova...
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...90#post1325890
    can I kick it?

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