What Will Happen If.....

[Truck]

My frequency is high Note you’ll lose so channel it in your brain
Put your lights out like candles in the rain Truck’ unanimous acclaim
Now I’ll release an hellishly lyrical depiction Sars from throats
Hell and heaven collide when gods elope wit this Harsh approach
Throw darts that choke and crossover from mainstream to dopeness
Kids hopeless from the path’s chosen with one last token
Rush home when I crush bones Truck became a touchstone
Fathered your flow smacked mother nature to crack the ozone
Nasty wit this Bout to spill shit with my Bout with illness
I took a vow to kill shit and it allowed the realness to reveal this

Quick Key..

[Thug Breeze]

nice word use some pretty off but for a quick Id say this a good piece...

[Truck]

^ Good looking. I didnt give it any thought. Just typed away. Infact it wasnt even prof-read..

[Thug Breeze]

lol haha I dont proof-read my shits either just write n drop. peep ma shits

[Endeva.]

first thing id say is.. your lines are stretched a bit.. it knocked the flow... some decent vocab in there, but id write something longer, so you can get more into it... and some spots didnt really make sense, like...

My frequency is high Note you’ll lose so channel it in your brain
Put your lights out like candles in the rain Truck’ unanimous acclaim
^^ you need to put the punctuation in, so its read easier... k
... all in all average... you need to work on it some...

[Mistral]

You need to leave a link to a open mic that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.