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    ...IllTheories..."the science of words"

    "The Science of Words"

    ...There is a chemical imbalance of words, disease infested verbs...
    ...contagious like the plague, manifested across the world...
    ...Theoretical ideas of man are irrational to composition...
    ...plajorism revealed by hypocrites of text position...
    ...steady searching for the truth but their pen is a lie...
    ...words are utilized for comprehension of the human cerebral extensions...
    ...so it is not the matrix that is everywhere but the words we are plugged into...
    ...chronicles of science, indication of experimental people...
    ...atomized ink make up the clouds with strong domination...
    ...raining ideas too complex, no use for clarification...
    ...some thoughtz are not classified and have yet to go thru ratification...
    ...inkspots, the blueprint of compositional defication...
    ...my illtheories are backed by the most abstract visionz...
    ...therefore my thoughtz are ill liable to leave mental incisionz...
    ...some souls use words without meaning searching for complex schemes...
    ...their just a decimal, this is a whole number of thoughtz i've redeemed...
    ...in my theory blood is of no real use...
    ...it is ink that runs thru our veins, to the weak minds the ink gets transfused...
    ...as the ink diffuses the paper they stand permanent like the ten commandments...
    ...with the endurance of moses I compose deep lyrics within minutes...
    ...my strong faith in my penmanship conceals any real worries...
    ...weak hope is no belief, see and believe my Illtheories...
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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    this was decent
    not great
    I'll say
    you had some good vocab
    and it wasnt just "thrown" in there
    you actually used the words in the right context
    anyway, the topic was new, I never seen it done before
    but, this as a whole, was kind of empty
    I wasnt really satsified
    its sort of hard to explain
    but ,it had decent flow to it
    6/10
    aight peace
    it was straight

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    thx mo feed people im hungry

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    Quite a Good Piece

    Quite well executed verse of verbalism, no conscious content to comment about, but good vocab and flow meant it was good reading. To say it was unsatisfying is kinda true but not to say its not good reading just its not as gratifying as a piece with a topic to follow.

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    Yeah, u might not get the greatest of feedback here, cause alot of the site would be too young to understand exactly what ur saying here and how deep u really are.
    This piece was actually really nice.. I love the complex ways u went about it.
    very complex ideas, and nice vocab to make it understandable but hard to fully catch.
    and well, that's what I like....
    the flow was decent, could've went a little smoother I think, but overall was alright.
    pretty ill of a piece, like I said u came deep with the thoughts..
    about the 'Science of Words'.. science is never easy to capture.
    the ending was my favorite, prob the last 5 lines with moses..
    pretty deep, but to get good feedback I'd concentrate on making it a little more catchy throughout the piece to keep everyone satisfied.. and keep the complexity at the same time. Keep droppin..
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    i like it

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    i liked this, the vocab was great and well placed the science in this peice is deep might be hard to understand for people with no brain nice as hell tho
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    dis piece was kinda empty but it wasnt really intended to have a real plot...its just my theories on da use of words and etc....take it how u want it but i hope i challenge peoples brains wit dis piece...thx fo feed uppin

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