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Thread: Thought I Was Gone?

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    Thought I Was Gone?

    Thought I was gone? Well bitch, think again
    you couldn't keep me out, you a slut I come on in
    how long has it been, since then, well I win
    maybe you niggas should own better site security
    cause more than me, can skip bans and I own these
    mods, like an std holder, don't fuck around with me
    for this OM, no use of imagery for you to see
    cause like a flea who flees and then runs free
    my IP proxy, gets past your level of complexity
    after suckin his blood and giving malaria he
    falls like a lumberjack cutting down a leafy tree
    to RB: I'm a virus in your system, yes the one you missin
    like a genie you wishin, for the cook in the kitchen
    to catch this lobster and finish me off like a man
    with a scan of my hand, I'm past the IP ban
    like Leonardo, I tell you, Catch Me If You CanŠ
    playing a doctor or MC, that is the plan
    to you I'm anything and everything, just like a tran
    now I'm sorry if you didn't know, everything has got to go
    banning doesn't work fo sho, invest your time in it some mo
    I'll be banging on your ho, while you try to figure me out... you're too slow
    even though I'm supposed to be gone, I'm here and I'm your show

    so you thought I was gone, well guess and think again
    like Atilla the Hun, I will conquer your men
    so you thought I was gone, well there's one thing your missing
    the fact I'm the king, I never lose in the ring
    Thought I was gone? Must be kidding yourself
    contact your peidatrician kid, so he can check your health
    You thought I was gone? Nah, that's the career of ludacris
    cause I am this, the man you will always miss


    A forum tried to IP ban me.. haha, didn't work. I'm too smart for them. :P

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    Aww, you no likey? Tell me what to work on man, or else don't post.

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    wuite a basic scheme youve got, id try and get more rhymind done with more than 1 syllable words in there... get some multis flowing and some nice word play... it all helps to the overal feel of the verse...

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    yeah this wasnt your best g ..... it was plain and simple and there was not 1 sense of structure you just wrote it and posted it ........... but there were a few aight lines in it.... but only a few

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    show potential and you can sense the love
    for the art. Keep doin your thing. Read more
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    lmfao at the flee line that was funny lol..

    for feedback, this was str8 for a n00b, overall, it was bleh, but since ur new i guess it's ok... yeah, really elevate on your rhyme scheme, get some multis poppin... up vocab, don't want to always have a level of reppetition and simplicity... content was str8, wasn't feelin it, but it was str8... u didn't have many metaphors, but i liked the std line

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