The Dope Man

[Lil Tra]

WEED,SYRUP,YAYO, I GOT IT INDEED
KEYS, BIRDS, AND GROW, ILL EVEN SUPPLY YOU THE SEEDS
NICOTINE, INFEDAMINES, EVEN COKE AND LEAN
40 DOLLARS A POP, BUT EIGHTY FOR THE DOPEFIENDS
WENT FROM A CRUCIAL ASS LIFE, WIT NO CHANCES AND PAIN
TO HITTING THE CLUB V.I.P, WIT LAP DANCES AND BRAIN
WENT FROM WORKING SMALL TIME, NOW IM DOING BIG THINGS
AND FAM PLEASE KEEP IN MIND THAT IM ONLY SIXTEEN
BUT I WILL TELL YOU ONE THING THESE DRUGS DO TO ME
MOMZ AND DAD HATE ME ALONG WIT THE REST OF COMMUNITY
DEAL WIT IT EVERYDAY, DONT LET THE SHIT PHAZE ME
LOVE MY PAPER, ALTHOUGH MY WHOLE FAMILY HATES ME
BIG DRUG DEAL COMING UP, THIS ILL GET ME THE HOUSE AND ECETERA
THE ONLY DOWNFALL, ITS LOCATED IN SOUTH AMERICA
IM SO SCARED, CUZ AINT NOTHING FUN TO BEING DEAD
A HOUR LATER, KID FOUND WIT GUN WOUNDS TO THE HEAD
DONT GET HIGH ON YA SUPPLY SEE DONT PUT NOTHING ABOVE IT
CUZ BEFORE WE GOT THERE I SNIFFED 10 KILOGRAMS OF IT
WOULDA GAVE UP ALL THAT SHIT, EVEN MY DIAMONDS AND WEALTH
NOW IM IN THE CEMETARY, NOTHING TO SAY FOR MY SELF
SHOULDA KNOWN, SHOULDA KEEP MY ASS IN TOUCH WIT THE REVEREND
OH SHIT, HOPE THAT I CAN PASS JUDGEMENT IN HEAVEN


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[elm0 da crackur]

pretty basic... has a thug gangsta drug feel to it of course, wasnt feelin it much... but you did keep flowing, although it was basic.. throw in some multis and hit hard

[Lil Tra]

iight preciate that man

[Lil Tra]

uppin

[Woogsta]

Chea, not badd actually. After the first 4 lines i was hooked, cuz i can relate to that shit some. Liked how u told the story, liked some rhymes, could relate to da family issues and the opening issues. Overall i actually liked this cuz of how real it was.

Nice one.

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[nolonger]

not bad man...but lacked in content and wordplay
also vocab wasnt great my man....flow was coo
overall not amazing but something to work with
keep at it man....

[Lil Tra]

Iight, Preciate Tha Feedback Yall

[Woogsta]

Lil Tra, them glasses u rockin in ya sig is dope.

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[Lil Tra]

thanks bro, got em at a corner store for 5 bucks, but that gold grill you see was about 500 bucks

[Blazzin_Pimp]

Yo dawg, Where did you get them stunna's from thems is hella hard! Yo, the story line was tight just don't forget to create a structure so it flows together. The theme was kool though

[lillem]

cool flow man, actually i got into this...Nice use of wordplay, it would be great to here a audio...Good shit man......Keep it going and who knows where it''ll take ya


aight peace

[BeRLin`S BesT]

this was pretty tight not the best I've ever read but one of the best pieces I've read in the past few days...as said u kinda displayin' a thuggish style but that's aight...flow was nice but up on the vocab...return da favor...pz

[noncentz]

needs some work on complicating rhymes style and delivery but other then that if this si ur angkle this is good work.

[Woogsta]

Yo Tra, when u get on next mayn hit me up on AIM.

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[Lil Tra]

uppin, for the last time