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    Father and Son (Self Colab)

    -Son- (PBK)
    I cry to you from a rock on top this holy cross
    I feel vie only lost the ability to speak the gospel to whom ever calls
    I cant except the steps leading to my demise
    I cry why have you forsaken me just before I close my eyes
    I must suffer, but why, for spreading the truth with all my time
    Had to hold a cross and climb, just for those to believe that I’m divine
    My heart beats are fading, I was humiliated and degraded
    I loved you so much, but it seems I’m the one you hated
    Was caring, gentle, compassionate, and gave my all
    But my time was cut short, now I sort through all there flaws
    I sit beside you now still wondering, with a manner thats mild
    Why had you forsaken me, your one and only child
    But you loved the world so much, I was sent to wash there sins
    But never would I have thought, you would forsake your only kin

    -Father- (PBK)
    You’ve cleansed the world from its sins but why do feel forsaken?
    You changed how the world thinks, is it cause your body was taken?
    You turned water into wine, cured the blind, deaf and crippled
    You helped the poor, walked on water without casting a ripple
    You befriended tax collectors, prostitute and soldiers
    You moved huge boulders without getting dirt on your shoulders
    Don‘t feel despondent, did you not see me everywhere you traveled
    From the sun and moon, to the mountains, right down to rocks and gravel
    From the sunrise and sunset that unravels the world that I created
    The gentle breeze to heat waves, how can you feel humiliated?
    Remember you prayed to me in the garden with tears flowing
    Knowing what would happen to you, in your face it was showing
    You were sent to rid this world of sin, to bring eternal salvation
    The Lamb of God, sacrificed to save infinite people from damnation
    I was always with you, in lamentation of when you were crucified
    When you cried out, I fell silent like a part of me just died
    Whatever happens to you I feel it, whether small or grand
    Wherever you walked, I walked beside your footprints on sand

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    Yo da son verse was good like da emotion in it...real deep...good vocab and rhymes
    The fathers verse was real real deep nigga...that showed me alot of emotion in it...good structure and vocab...overall 9/10...that shit was deep!!!keep it comin dogg

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    lol@ self collab... kinda makes it not a collab... anyway i liked it, it had good emotion... i like the father's verse... had some nice vacab in there... it all flowed together quite nicely and you had pretty good structure... good job keep at it... i like seeing new writters with talent....

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