My Last Lyric For 2004

[Tha Track]

Intro - Track Shit
I Seen alot of shit happen this year,
my crew elvating
O.D.B. dyin
but to tha cops i still be lyin
HERE WE GO!

Verse 1 - Track Shit
i'ma see y'all in 2005//
i hope i still be alive//
me and orez, we burn many bitch ass soulz//
and boy, i learnt my lesson, just play our proper role//
i was born a lethal lyricist//
but no-body believed in this//
i'm gonna stay underground it's better wid who u know//
cos it don't really matter if u ain't got no doe//
this be more real than fake//
just like this some jake//
i gotta watch tha moves i make//
4 i be seen wid moneymake//
*HEY, HEY, HEY*
these bitch'z don't play, no gamez..
*HEY, HEY, HEY*
we ain't gon quit this, no way//
i be back in 2005//
makin this part of your life//
if u laugh at tha shit we do//
we pop a whole clip in you//

Chorus - Orez n Track Shit
this will be tha last lyric for 2004//
this shit we pumpin will make you get off the floor//
RE-RUN!
but fuck it, many souljaz dyin each weak//
just think of all the hearts slowly becoming weak//

Verse 2 - Madrap
i ain't stopin for no-one, once ur in u don't quit//
not even if my records sell just like it would for shit//
these faggots in here don't take me seriously//
but i don't give a fuck, they don't know who i be//
all they see is their shit, their dreams and their hopes//
and themself, there's no difference, so give it up hoes//
talking all this shit to me//
i'm wid trackshit and ORE to da Z//
fuck y'all.....

Outro - Track Shit
this be hot man.....orez, it's gonna be wut it's gonna be
fuck y'all hatin me, ur only hatin yaself
Peace Out!!!

[Tha Track]

no hate replies, no crew hatin, no other shit like that

[Kaotic Theory]

u have the right enotion for this,but u need to work on the structure,the imagery, and word choice,aswell as spelling,you need to get more into details and so fourth....for this to become a good piece.....i think u need to read other om's and elevate alot before dropping another piece



3/10

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Tha Track]

???
what do u mean?

[MaYo]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

i don't get it either man, explain it more

[Mistral]

read the rules...

But....you have to reply to 2 other peoples open mics with decent feedback saying what you thought about their piece...and post the link to the pieces in your thread...and you must use 2 new pieces everytime you post a open mic.

[Tha Track]

ohhh, i get it now, i have to post on other peoples om's, and then leave the links here to show other people......sorry if it got my post count up, i got confused

[Tha Track]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...41#post1907841

i couldn't find the other link i posted on, i replied on "The Godfather"'s OM
can't find it

[Tha Track]

need more feedback y'all

[Tweety]

i think its really good! tell me what you think of mine?

[Tha Track]

can you please give me some more specific feedback, also, how can i tell you what i think of yours if i don't have a link,

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[bloods]

yo man da shit was alright but u need 2 elevate a little more, better structure, maybe throw some good rhymes in there. and better vocab other good open mic.

[Tha Track]

yo thnx bloods, i got another one comin, it's gonna be a keystyle with a simaliar topic as 2pacs "Changes" and eminems "Like Toy Soldiers"