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    The Face of Fear

    My Muse

    An eloquently expressive, elegant vestige of past beauty
    An ineffable message, a vestal prestige beyond scrutiny

    Everything but new to me, a friendly face among strangers
    Always remained true to me, at beck and call like the Rangers

    Precise device, the likes to make the news channels ignite
    Who always scurry to scenes, to catch a glimpse of the new fright

    From local news perusing the minute on a deadly fight
    To CNN, watching the Iraqi sky explode in the night

    High as a kite off the subtle scent of humanity’s relent
    Too ignorant to repent, drama increases with each stint

    I feed from the disease they suffer but never see
    I read their pain between the lines on the covers of magazines

    Every TV special about a tragedy, I revel in lavishly
    Abundance of repugnance to sweetly fill my lungs wit

    My dumb wit…the idiot savants well hung wit
    Masters in their devastation, architects of self demise

    Like vicarious masturbation, my seed covers their eyes
    The spawn of demonic presence, that prescience prescribed

    The clangor and bedlam of weapons and rumors of war
    The gnashing of teeth and the suffering that I adore

    My head adorned with a crown of fear and scorn
    I was present at the death of the Pharaoh’s first born

    I was there when Eve was afraid to tell God the truth
    I was there when the coward gunned down Jay in the booth

    I sailed the skies when Aaliyah rode her last ride
    When Jesus was on the Cross, I stared Him dead in the eyes

    As He was then, He is and will ever be alive, The Christ
    These fools squander the purchase and He paid the price

    Better for I…to satisfy my gluttonous proclivity
    For killing innocence and glutting on suffering quickly

    Disrupting the ignorant, overexpose souls to the globe
    And like film, with too sin much they soon develop holes

    Soon enough the whole loses integrity
    Pieces fall and fold, flailing further on separately

    More precious than gold to me, I scream Gloria!
    I rape their phobia with a maso- sadistic euphoria

    I prey on unanswered prayer and can’t be bothered to care

    Every time these fools feel fear im always there, Hear Ye!

    The Proclamation that I Speak…you can’t ever define ME!

    Search until demise and be denied finding me…cause see…

    The face of fear is not a devil or demon seething with evil

    The real face of fear has always been right here . . .

    *presents a mirror*

    Surprised?! I thought so, you foolish men think but you don’t know…

    Destroying yourselves, with self perpetuated devastation

    A self sustaining creation of many generations of man

    First formed with the primal tribal clans, now advanced

    Our face of fear is the work of our own hands… United we stand

    And united shall we fall, because this view is held by all…

    Until the end when we gnash our teeth and bawl…

    Until we can no longer stand or walk but crawl

    Until our so called utopia pushes faith in a wall

    And the Son of Man returns to force fear’s fall


    We blame our evils and inclinations to sin…
    On some devils and demons when we need to look within…
    As it will be in the end as it was when time did begin…
    The faces of fear are of all the races of men…
    Bittersweet

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    Daym, I thought I fed on this my apologies, well to be honest, when I read the first two lines I said to myself "Shit I'm not gonna understand a single thing this poem has to say" Lol.. Your vocab leaves me in awe man, And honestly, I think that you should do a whole poem in alliteration. lol. cuz when you do it. its phenomenal. anyways, this poems content was an outstanding way to put so many peoples opinions, and I can relate to this so much, You've eleborated on such a simple truth and exposed nearly every detail about it. The italics is what really got to me, I loved how the beginning lead up to it all...

    Then the final lines juss clinched it. This was an oustanding piece in my eyes fam, and I'm sorry your gettin slept on...

    so UPPIN THIS FOR SUB! CUZ THIS NEEDS TO BE READ!

    Stay up

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    lol, the italics make you come across like you're some kind of extremist. Which is a criticism I guess, cause I'm sure that's not what was intended. Some advanced vocabulary I thought, nothing that sent me running for a dictionary, but good stuff. Maybe a little too advanced for this kind of message. Nice work, I felt the first section was more geared towards the open mic forum than this one, but a decent piece. Keep writing man.
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    ^Agreed about the italics, i felt like some of the phrases you used early on foreshadowed the whole religous turn this piece took about halfway through, if this was intended then good job cause i caught it, if not then i am overeaching in my insight and i apologize. To give you an example, the one that stood out in my mind was "the gnashing of teeth" word. This was very well written and the beggining in particular piqued my interest. Your vocab was very good and the flow was superb as well. I also felt the way you changed the scheme and failed to rhyme ar the end of a few lines and falling back to rhyme in the middle further served to draw the reader in and intrigue. Overall a good drop, my only complaint is that the intensity waned toward the latter part of the piece, good job kid, you always got me, and Merry Christmas, 1luv.
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