this is one of the best i've seen throughout open mic.....nice imagery, vocab and everythang. keep it up
this is one of the best i've seen throughout open mic.....nice imagery, vocab and everythang. keep it up
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New Writejist Song - Tito Ortiz
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this was a great piece.. your imagery, concept, and the flow was all straight brick solid..
you kept the flow, going at all times, hardly, maybe minor slip ups..
the concept was not the most original, but not used.. so I liked that, but even if it was played, this was beyond most others pieces.
Your vocab, was very good... I liked how you kept the rhyme scheme going at all times..
I liked the hook..
keep at it man.. didnt know you did topical text...
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161296 - return the favor
this was very good...
the syllable count was excellent...created a nice meter and im sure a very nice flow in the audio...
some of the metaphors seemed slightly forced, but nothing really major...
Once or twice i thought you may have had too many internals in a line...but...thas a very minor criticism, and that's just personal preference...
the story was very good...it seemed very emotionally charged...not tha i can criticize emotion, but i felt it, your imagery was strong and i could visualize the scene...
nice syntax...nearly every word was used properly...one or two mispellings, one extra letter somewhere...if i remember correctly awful had an extra l on the end, other than that there were very few technical errors...
this piece was very technically sound, very aesthetically pleasing ( i forget, line length was nice), and content wise this was exceptional...
overall, a very above average piece, and im sure the audio is very good as well...ill check it out later...props emerge...you honestly could get a legends nod for this...
Bittersweet
Legendary?
Ha thanks for the gesture.
Oh and incase yall didn't know this is 100% honesty from 'Merge. That really is exactly how I feel about my life.
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nice work Merge, I felt the deep stuff...
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