Uptown Prince

[Jae Hott]

lets get down to buisness no time for small talk//
im the prince of uptown throw down peddles when i walk//
i paid my due, fallowin clues like blues paw print//
niggaz dont talk tough thats how you get ya jaw bent//
i make money in the hood rappin on street corners//
or shakin up bones head crackin on street corners//
i aint start it but im gone be the end of the game//
no one hit wonder yall gone remember my name//
jae... a.k.a young breez//
im gone stay up in the hood like government cheese//
i flow sick like a sex transmitted disease//
niggaz have a hard time flowin i do it wit eas//
i only got one goal take over the spot//
im gone get sales like 50 when his first cd dropped//
he cursed hip hop//
every since he said he been popped//
all these rappers runnin round bragin bout bein shot//
not JAE he HOTT//
catch me on the block flowin from beats off trash can tops//
for hours off a old school b-box//
inspired from listenin to 50 and d-block//

[SwiftMenace]

Okay,.. Not a bad piece, but your bars are really short .. Which I'm not a fan of, but it works for some people , you my friend are not one of those people ... no hate, your not a bad emcee, just consider writtin longer bars, with more intellect ...

[Zeal]

real short piece, im not really into the pieces that arent topical style but it wasnt a bad read.. Expand on your bars i.e. line length and make some of you lines longer "government cheese" and things like that i wasnt really feeling... Keep elvating.

[CrazyCarl]

Your structure needs work. Your short set-ups, that didn't rhyme should be put in the beginning of the next line. Then you can work on the verse's context. You attempted wordplay, keep that up.

[Swift Death]

yeah your sturcture needs work....

try goin form

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makes it better... flow n all... but not bad for your first peice you had some alright covab... just keep working at it work on the basics and youll find elevation fast.

[man_got_game]

yo kid u cant rap fo nuttin//
i can rap better than u, kid u just aint nuttin//
so back off now, cuz u'll get yourself hurt//
boy u crazy.........your name should worse//
buddy this man got game, man u in the shame//
im better than u, cuz im in the hall of fame//
boy u down below the list, cuz u suck so bad//
its ok man u got beat..... don't get sad//
man this a rap battle, so suck it up//
this man got game i won now so fuckin shut up//

[Jae Hott]

^you tryin to come at my head but ya bars is weak//
dog you say you got game but.. talk is cheap//
if you got game then show me//
you'll never match me nigga fuck you blow me//
jae aint goin no where im here to stay//
you wonna battle bitch set the time and day//

[Jae Hott]

its not that my bars is short i made it to where when you read it you can read it the way its writtin and said i fixed it now but i apreciate yall advice except that bitch ass nigga man got game

[man_got_game]

how bout u set the time and day//
man u in shame but thats ok//
you act all hard but you really ain't nuttin//
dis man got game ima show u a lil somethin//
jae hott ur talk is garbage//
just like ur house...its full of garbage//
u wish u could beat man got game//
u wish u could be in the hall of fame//
but ur nowhere near the fame//
every day ur in shame to this day//

[Jae Hott]

man got game you suck you not even worth me battlin you weak up ya game and come see me you shitty

[LadyEnyceCMD]

I Would Like To Battle Anyone That Wanna Battle I Perfer A Nigga But A Bitch Will Be Even Better.