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Thread: World War II - Feat. Berlins Best

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    GhettoFabolous
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    World War II - Feat. Berlins Best

    June 6th, 1945. The Omaha beach takeover was a success for the allies, but deeper inland there was another battle breakin out...

    Woogsta
    D-Day just ended, allies taken over more terroritory
    Many men died, but the captured land is a victory
    Will make history, happy faces for the men standin
    But tears where shed for those who never made the landin
    Its obvious now we winnin the war, Britain prevail
    We got the Germans runnin like beaten females

    Berlins
    We lost this battle but we haven’t lost the war yet
    Enemy warriors stepped on r doorstep, to come is more death
    More flesh to be torn, More souls stashed in this morgue yet
    these forces won’t be reborn, allies r known for their short breath
    we’ll take em to court back on the War-set
    revenge will be evil plus our fallin’ fellows we’ll never forget

    Woogsta
    While the Beach battle been won, another jus started
    We was travellin inlands when we encountered our targets...
    Boom, explosives landin makin the earth rumble
    Enemies approachin guns aimed spellin out trouble
    Allies fire, bullets flyin souljas dyin, a bloody fight
    I was firin the tanks M40 when the germans Tiger entered my sight

    Berlin
    Troops assembled ready to scramble who is to come
    We got info on soldiers approachin so foolish and dumb
    They think we beat cuz of this minor re-treat
    But we’re well nourished in bunkers, firin’s our deed
    Fear is r enemy wirin’ our feed, it eats up my nerves like a
    cannibal
    Trigger fnger ready to squeeze to release a cannon-ball...... here
    comes the animal

    Woogsta
    The tiger movin towards me, both of us firin rounds aimlessly
    Bullets catchin souljas, leavin then bleedin into a bloody sea
    Few shots ricochetin off our tanks, nothin bein really damageable
    Jus this Nazi sympathizer tryna aim for the spot most flammable
    Hate them germans, always squirmin, tryna destroy our Shermans
    But now tables is turnin, and im happy to destroy this vermin

    Berlin
    No holdin’ back I feel the first impacts of machine gun shells
    Everythings still intact so we burstin back, his dream done melt
    We attack with a thirst to crack his armor and dead him
    The drama is settin’, he got us in aim but I use my Karma as weapon
    Like a sauna I’m sweatin’ steerin’ straight at this white cloud
    Last chance to pray befo u be slayin’ and them medals be send to ya
    wife’s house.....

    Both:
    Leavin the MP40, loadin up the rocket then aimin
    Everything else a blur, jus the tank remaining
    Finger on the button, if i said i wasnt scared i'd be a liar
    No time to hesitate now as i press down, FIRE

    .................................................. ..............................

    60 Years later, two friends is talkin in a bar when they realised they grandfathers died in the two tanks.

    Woogsta
    Son, i cant believe my grandpops let patriotism kill him
    Makin my pops grow up in a one man only buildin
    No longer livin, because of some war that wasnt his beef
    Jus was young and the goverment called him up off da street
    Thrown in the heat, of a battle that he wasnt ready for
    Last letter was sent June 3rd, then he never sent anymore
    Pops thought he forgot, but never knew his own daddy got buried
    Now im talkin to this German, who Grandad is also in da war cemetery
    Seems that they met on the battlefield, and claimed the others life
    But i guess out there u never think twice about a strangers mothers'
    strife
    Even tho our grandads were enemies, we both friends
    Cuz the war finished then, dont need to start another again

    Berlin
    Wars were fought people were killed for no good reason
    Just the thoughts of a maniac his home country wouldn’t believe in
    So he stopped by ready to achieve it in FRG...dreamin’
    Of leadin’ the biggest force there can be
    Still we bleedin’ from remorse of his deeds
    Prejudice are not leavin’ the streets even more seem to grief
    The metamorphosis can’t creep...it’s held up by anger
    My grand-daddy died for nothing with a bullet in his chamber
    I can’t even remember.........
    All I know is I’m sittin here listening to an English man
    Speakin’ in english and feelin’ not the slight need
    To distinguish him between enemy or friend
    All I know is if I ever need help, he’ll be there lending me a
    hand.....

    I know its madd long, but gon appreciate feedback. Props Berlin.

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    back up again...lol...well yeah let's get some feed...pz
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    Oh my badd dogg, i aint been around for a madd minute.

    Uppin.

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    Fuck sake, stop sleepin bitches.

    U all respondin to whack OM's or postin up whack OM's cept a few decent heads, so how bout some appreciation in how long me n berlin spent in this?

    Bitch ass muthafuckas.

    Leave a link, and decent feed.


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    This wasnt bad, I got the comcepts pretty well and each side came with their own style so it wasnt too bad. I see you've both completed your length size and a good structure, which is what most need. Your tactics to attack the big theme are pretty well met from such an early stage of textcee. But Overall this wasn't a bad piece, a long read no doubt. And dont get offended by whatever I write from now on...

    But leave good feedback on this:

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176338

    Both of yall, thanks.

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    thx for the luv and the favor will be returned...pz
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    Thanks sinamen, ima hit up urs now. Good lookin out.

    Uppin.

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    Woogsta: ok you came pretty good with structure in all of your verses, there was maybe a few lines that seemed a little bit stretched but your emotion in these take up for that. i really didn 't see to many multis, i might have just missed them but i didn 't notice any when readin, but you still had a good flow nonetheless...your verses seemed to be part story about the war, wich was dope, i was feeling that.

    Even tho our grandads were enemies, we both friends
    Cuz the war finished then, dont need to start another again

    ^^i was likin those 2 lines. actually, i liked alot of others, but i wont point them out (don 't feel like lookin for them). but yeah, you came at the topic pretty nice, i think your lines could have been a bit more describing but that 's just my opinion. you came very good in all of this.



    Berlin: you seemed to have more violent, gore type verses, wich i liked. you came pretty detailing in most of your verses, multis were pretty good in this. everything also seemed to flow very welll... your structure was good, you had longer lines then woogsta, and some of them seemed stretched but it was still good. emotion in this was good, it could have been better but it fit this topic perfectly. both of you finished good with your last two lines

    To distinguish him between enemy or friend
    All I know is if I ever need help, he’ll be there lending me a
    hand.....
    ^^^didn 't rhyme, but i was liked the concept of it. you also had some other good lines. you came pretty good in most categories in this.


    ok you both came very good in this, to be honest i didn 't favor one of you over the other, you both came with your own style and they fit together perfectly for this topic. and yeah this topic was good, i was likin it and you two came good on it. it was long, but it was worth the read. i hope to see more from you two.

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    ^ wow @ that bein so long lol

    anyways, return the favor

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176592

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    thank you for the breakdown abusive...glad u liked it...pz
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    loved the concept and the various plot twists, some great back and forth style between the pair of you as well. Great imagery from both writers and some good multi's from berlin as well. i know Berlin's style but i didn't know yours Ghetto, colour me impressed.

    keep on posting.

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    I#m tired of u faggots not giving feedback...recognize real bitches...pz
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    Thanks for da good feedback Abusive.

    Johnny, u done seen my shit before lol, just a while ago.

    Still, good lookin erryone for da feedback.

    Upping for more.

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