Blessed Upon

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[2_sides_of_life]

yea this seem like it should be in the poetry section.. i'm feelin this though, real nice imagery, good flow...


They Reach The Spot, Feeling More Than Hot, The Push Forward
No Ques, This Was Their Oppurtunity To Live, Not Being Awkward
The Pipe Had Burst, The Town Without Water, The Scavengars Chance
Grabbing as much as they can, Filling Pans And Hands, Needing To Enhance
Sickening Thoughts As The Children Enjoyed What They Were Seeing
Men And Women Around, Could Not Believe, Around Mixed Feelings
Blessed By The Gods, The Historic Camp Had Been Given Water
A Source Of Life, For Men And Women, For Sons And Daughters


yea i was feelin this.

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[~{ExClusive}~]

damn this was really good, very good stucture nice flow, sometimes syllable counting was off and sometimes it felt like you forced emotion, but thats something i still work on, great imagery damn you remind me of myself this was very good ish here, maybe we could collab some time i need a collab wit a rb cat so holla at me anytime peace

RTF links in the sig if you wanna see how good iam then look, check out my hooks to, speically for Karma that one had a dope hook
pz

[Jay Walker]

Dope Writtens Sy.

Best shit yet, for sure.

I liked it alot, how you built up your delievery of them being 'blessed upon'. As well as the entire first verse describing how they are suffering in a sense, then you wait til almost the end of the second verse to finally feed into the title. The amount of description in this piece is increbible. The rhyme scheme was nice, as well, too. Some parts the flow got a little choppy, but overall, it was dope. You painted an awesome picture here. Favorite lines...

The Skin Cracks Like A Pod. Water Hungery The Sun Still Shines
Gold Mines To The Undeveloped, The Bones Of Each Spine
Sand Crunches Under Their Feet, Bodies De-hydrate In The Heat
Overhead Sun Filled Sky, Around Here There Is No Street
This Source Is Much Needed, For Each Tree A Plant Is Seeded
They HAd Ran Out, They Begged And To The Gods They Pleaded
Blessed By The Gods, The Historic Camp Had Been Given Water
A Source Of Life, For Men And Women, For Sons And Daughters
Children Danced Naked Around THe Split In THe Pipe, Wealthy Without
The Amount Of Pain This Camp Had Suffered, From The Summers Drought
The Gods Had Blessed Them, Gave Them The Water They Needed
To Give Them A Miracle Water Was Needed, And In This They Had Succeeded

...this was just a illy piece man.

*Awaits the next dope drop*

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[Judge Judy]

this was good homie....Iliked your wordplay and ur flow is good 2....Please drop a honoest vote on a battle in my sig

I did vote for u and gucci in that 2 0n 2

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I hit all links

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[TheReinvention]

Pretty nice piece there, not too bad. I like your style dawg. You need to improve on some multies, and thats about it. Your words were basic, but some were tight. Thanks for the drop. Its tight. Keep droppin bro, keep droppin and one day you will be one of the dope phenes on the site. ha ah.

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word to the up

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[Di G]

yo tis piece was deep could feel ur emotinon wit tha topic u did u did better ten i couldve dun wit it give ya props 4 tat tha part i liked was

Word Of Mouth Lets Them Know, Its Time To Go, One Opportunity
Together They Rush Forward As One, Standing As A Community
Tin Mugs, Copper Pans, Using Anything They Can They Grab For It
Desperate Hands, Just Grab As Much As They Can, Minds Split

[mainevent]

yo hot shit bra had me readin keep it it up yo