i got rhymes,
to make your fuckin head rewind,
make you look back,
say "damn that should of been mine,"
but its not, and i got,
everything that you need,
to that ill feelin' w/out
smokin' weed,
cuz i'm the next drug,
next slug through ya fuckin mug,
gettin grimmy tuggin on your
girls panties hoppin the tub.......
try me....
fix ya shit son.......now it aint bad but it aint good.......step up ya game......THEN TRY ME!!
You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
Well it was... interesting to say the least. You might want to think more about your choice of words, you didn't seem to come off as the kind of person that you wanted to.
This was to short to give a lot of feed.
The structure flow and vocab all needs work.
If you want to improve try and come up with concepts for your raps and think up some good punches and metaphors.
Return the favour.
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