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    young ryda
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    pain of life

    [chorus]
    the pain i felt over the years
    all comes out with the run of a few tears
    i wish i could of been born into a better life
    but i still count my blessing before i sleep at night

    ever since i was 3 mom and dad never got along
    which left me behind and in the dark all alone
    these times of my life left me in a deep depression
    broke down and cried everynight to get out my aggression

    inbetween all this my grandma fell sick
    she was sucha great person why she get cursed with this
    remember when she was healthy, it a ever lasting sight
    it fucked up to make her better i would give my life

    when i was bout nine my uncle got beat in the head
    woke up a week later bloody and half brain dead
    he was back stabbed, jumped by his own best friend
    but when my uncle goes that pussy will also see his end

    two years back my cousin was sent to jail
    my spirit seem to collapse i was living in hell
    he was caught cause of a rat, one of his own crew
    this would of never happened only if he knew


    [chorus]
    the pain i felt over the years
    all comes out with the run of a few tears
    i wish i could of been born into a better life
    but i still count my blessing before i sleep at night


    my boy brandon he was like my second brother
    there was 4 yrs between us but we still chilled wit another
    he got caught selling weed and with pills in his whip
    my life never been easy i'm gettin tired of this shit
    he was one of the few that ever understood me
    always backed me up and always stood tall
    it fucked up how that one day he almost lost it all

    and just as it got better i fell in love
    with this girl in my class she was sent from above
    it true when they say that love equals pain
    thought she would help me but my life stayed the same

    my boy just got caught wit a gun that was stolen
    he might be facing time and seeing green
    this is prove that fate can be mean
    just wish i could rewind time and set my boy rite
    it all went came to this from because of one fucked up night

    i'm only 14 and i've been through some shit
    it leaves my heart dark and full of hate
    but God made it like this for one reason
    to test my strenght and to keep my brething
    well thank you Lord cause in a way it was a blessing
    from all my life i learned a special lesson

    [chorus]
    the pain i felt over the years
    all comes out with the run of a few tears
    i wish i could of been born into a better life
    but i still count my blessing before i sleep at night

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    young ryda
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    Last edited by young ryda; April 14th, 2005 at 10:19 PM

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    pretty good shit, nice stucture, but you need to use multies more to make the read go faster. word
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  4. #4
    young ryda
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    ^ thank it not done yet i'm goin to the studio saturday to record it

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    young ryda
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    uppin for replies

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    young ryda
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    come on people replie

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    young ryda
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    c-mon people stop being lazyand fucking vote

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    yo that was pretty good it had good structure an vocab not bad for a fouteen year old lol just playin pimp im just seventeen

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    young ryda
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    thanks iigh lets get some more replies

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    bro i feel yo pain and have live the same fucken life....except they took my mom away fo drugs and govmt. shit!!! SINCE i WAS 4 I HAVE'NT SEEN HER.. SO I'M STILL SEARCHIN FO A BETTA PATH IN LIFE... SO I LIKE YO SHIT AND GIVE YOU A 10 OUTTA 10 SUCKA!!!

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    nice drop had a nice flow but it took a longer to read than it should have.........great format and topic do what u do playa

  12. #12
    Mindprizn
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    Yo i thought it was a dope rhyme,..i dont think how long it takes to read is a factor, that to me is just lazyness on peeps part,...had good structure and decent vokab and for a 14 year old thats some tough shit to go through i know first hand, but keep it up,.oh and try to use a little more multies.

  13. #13
    young ryda
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    ^ Thanks That Only Half My Life No Doubt There Is About Another Verse Or Two I Could Rite But Htanks To All For The Replies Lets Get Some More

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    young ryda
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    lets get some more replies

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    it was okay,....nothing special IMO....work on structure...originality..flow..multies...wordplay
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