ill,
you wanna go to heaven?, then i can see why its me that you challenged/
and you just turned eleven, yo this kid is about to get seriously damaged/
no punch...weak opener...has flow an structure... 1/10
this is what your moms calls you, she calls you an 'angel'/
yo, dont name yourself like that, your too little to handle/
anotha diss....but again no punch...attempted personal i suppose...structure should stay tha same through out tha battle(to keep flow)..... 2/10
angel dust my ass, see you polly wit the devil/
you cant beat me, i got the strength of several/
SG...no punch....an again tha flows changed...has structure... 0/10
this bitch wanna ask me questions, but i got too many answers/
right now he tellin me what he wont for xmas, but ,yo, i aint santa/
flow change again...no punch...each line has structure though... 1/10
im puttin the nails in you, right while you screamin for lucifer/
you sayin 'this aint the way to die', as i nail you to crucifix/
no punch...rhyme dont work very well... 0/10
dont be thinkin you can rap, cos you seen eight mile/
dude,your raps are plain illegal, need to be put on trial/
a diss,but still no punch... 1/10
wait to you turn 18+, you need to do something else in the meanwhile/
and 'angel' , gods been seein' your sins, an' you aint makin' him smile/
anotha diss,i think... 1/10
6/70
VS
angel,(had to fix this up abit...so i can do a break down)
Im heading for da top nigga and no body could move me/
you da type of horney nigga da'll jerk of to a cartoon movie/
SG...no punch...jus a diss...weak opener... 1/10
ya girl man she nasty i don't no why you kiss her/
but while she gettin fucked you mealesting ya little sister/
anotha diss...thats jus raw,lol...structure almost falls off... 1/10
ya rapz nigga there garbage,trash,and lame/
I'm like a math teacher cause I stay gettin brain/
SG...ANOTHA diss...flows decent... 1/10
and nigga wit me you don't want no beef/
cause da gun I got hold bulletz da size of 50 cent teeth/
structure an flow is shit...weakest SG i eva heard(50 aint no gangsta)... 0/10
man ya whole crew frontin/
and nigga I'll erase you like I was pushing da backspace button/
structure an flow are terrible...ALMOST a punch!... .5/10
all you do is watch porn man get a life/
and how you a gangsta when you riding around with a kitchen knife/
....try ritin ya lines as "punch lines"(tha way ive set ya battles structure)... 0/10
man I'm 13 spitting grown flows/
man I'm 13 fucking grown hoes/
bullshit SG,nuffin worse....how many lines you got?shiiiiit.... 0/10
nigga if ya punchlines is good I'ma cut of ya hands/
and nigga my drugz will have you moving like church people when they dance/
no punch....jus more whak SG...no flow or structure... 0/10
homey my gunz make noise like 2 cars when dey crash/
I'm done with this verse my 3 last words for you lil is kiss my ass/
weak closer...MORE SG...flow an structure was almost decent... 0/10
3.5/90
ill 6/70,ya need to concentrate more on punchin ya opponent(eg.personals)...an try to keep ya whole battle wit tha same structure an flow...need sum elevation...keep tryin.
angel 3.5/90,try settin ya structure in punchlines(easier to read,breakdown,line count,an is an easy way to keep trak of ya structure an flow)...ya also need to stop talkin yaself up(SG[self glorification]) an start punchin ya opponent...
lol,you also ended up wit extra lines(which should be a DQ...but i aint gunna snitch)
keep elevatin...
V/ill techniques...fa stikin to tha rules...havin a betta structure an flow...an didnt self glorify too much...
return tha favour....no hate...
peace
