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    State Of The Union

    Congress is in on this..
    ................................100 billion in cuts for the rich?
    It's dirty to snitch, but we got some nuts in that bitch
    They pitched 10 billion from medicare... they wont deal fair
    Im real aware its still there they kill without a care
    This nightmare I cant wake up from is just wack
    The government calls it takin taxes, I call it a jack
    The attack of Cancer, many'll see the case closed
    Face folds, rage explodes like blood through your nose

    I'm Ready to Scrap son, Drag Bush & them fag's
    Got My Country tis of thee swiftly pushin' Us Back
    Don't Look at whats Black...
    Two Thousand Killed in one Day
    I Fought for this country duke!! Still don't think I Should Stay??
    Got Racist places still exsistin'?? Look faggot's & Listen
    Only a United nation is Replacing all them Facist ass Systems
    ALLAH-WHA-BAH!!
    ^^^ THATS who ya Ass should be Hittin'
    Yet I'm seein' my Brothers Bleeding from the policy's leadin'
    When we should be Wavin' stars & Stripes while Mobbin' these Heathen's


    Mobbin a heathen who be believin he decievin
    But I aint leavin till his whole family is grievin
    Acheivin racism under the guise of a friendly handshake
    But after awhile their pile of lies makes the land quake
    Stand straight solider.. Look me in the fucking eye
    And see the blades of truth get stuck in this guy
    My anger will tell the point that I might push
    I never thought Id say this but I DON'T.. LIKE.. BUSH

    & You can say it again Son, True Patriots man
    Fuck Michael.. Have Bush n' Clan takin' the Stand
    Like: "Can you tell me why my manz died Fightin' Taliban"
    "Osama was never in Iraq & there's Nucs in Iran"
    "& my man..
    .............How can you stand for Education ever since.."
    "You cut 30 mill from after school class Benefits??"
    Lies Eclipse these Events lighting quick your lack of Relevance
    Evidence & Remnants shoved aside.. slight looks from the Resident’s
    Just Go wit Cancer, fuck it son... Don’t like Bush and It’s evident

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    Nice message dude. This was some deep shit. I liked how you used alot of multis, but I think you could have constructed it a little better, tho, Im not knocking anything, cause I liked this piece alot. But, from all the multis, in places, it made your flow a little choppy. Iono what you were more concerned with, the multis, or the flow, but personal, I prefer the flow, which can come from alot of multis, but ya need to work just a little bit more on ya wording with the multis, and ya shit will be bomb. Nice read man.
    You really think ur tough... come 'n try me man
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    Nice Piece Saw Some Good Wordplay In Here Which I Liked This Was A Good Piece Meta's In here Dope Keep Em Coming
    Still Out For Revenge....

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    dam dude thats some harsh but really true shit man keep it up I liked tha message and tha flow cant wait to read more ish dude
    btw if u dont mind can u guys vote on my battle?? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=193517

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    lol Your a future terrorist

    this was a nice piece...nice subject.....u stayed pretty much on the topic thoughout as well...flow was str8 too

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    This was a real nice verse, the i hate bush concept has been done loads of times but this was real good. The imagery was raw and you made some real points that not a lot of people would know about.
    The vocab went well with this piece your structure was fine the flow was nice but you got a bit inconsistant with it half way through so all i could say was keep the flow strong throughout the piece.

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    Wo tight shit, multi, multi, multi that bitch was filthy rich.. you actually knew sumthin about the topic, 8.5/10
    Pz

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    cancer on the government eh? haha. a played topic but you did it with some fire man, your multis are getting better and your flow was spot on throughout. the arguments have been done before but you kept the thing moving at a decent pace. vocab was ok, and the imagery, where you used it, was solid.

    keep posting.

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